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 Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 4:30 pm
Have you ever felt unwanted
Like everything and Everyone
Didn't want to touch you
Didn't want to see you
Wouldn't care as much if you died
Just as long as another stayed alive
So you would hide your tears
Hide your pain
Hide everything that is unpleasant
Because you know
That as you quiver and shake
And let silent tears fall
No one knows how you feel
They want to be alone
They want you to know it
They don't want you to be around
You are the outcast
You are the underdog
You are
The one that must rise to be at your best.
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Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 7:51 pm
Drakulya666 Have you ever felt unwanted Like everything and Everyone Didn't want to touch you Didn't want to see you Wouldn't care as much if you died Just as long as another stayed alive So you would hide your tears Hide your pain Hide everything that is unpleasant Because you know That as you quiver and shake And let silent tears fall No one knows how you feel They want to be alone They want you to know it They don't want you to be around You are the outcast You are the underdog You are The one that must rise to be at your best.
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Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:57 pm
I'd title that one "The Untouchable" or something like that. I like to title things.
I think I'd drop the "be at" in the last line, so it would better match the length of the other lines.
Good, good, otherwise good.
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Posted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 8:08 pm
w/o the be at it wouldn't make sense and the tyitle is the title of the thread
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