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 Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2013 8:17 pm
- Username: here
- Character Name: Sinataro Attakata
- Pronunciation of the Name: Sin-ah-tah-ro Attack-ka
- Affiliation: Adjuchas Class Arrancar
- Character Number/Rank: [Espada: Number/Rank: Decima
- Espada Of: Psychosis
- Sexuality Heterosexual
- Character PersonalitySinataro always seems to have a smile on his face. But it's not a normal happy smile; it's more of a psychotic smile that tells a sign of borderline insanity. Sinataro is one to always kill for sport. Sinataro is a natural killer at heart and will normally spend his days just killing for sport either in Hueco Mundo or in the Human World. This psychotic sense of killing for joy is one of the reasons why his rank is so high. He could easily climb the ranks to where he could find an opponent that could stop himSinataro is a bit on the dull side but he could care less. His strength is where it got him at and that's all he could care about. Sinataro has been known to just compulsively chuckle from time to time and he even just likes to punch the wall just for the kick of it. Sinataro normally speaks with a rather subtle tone but it does show signs of insanity in his subtle voice. His eyes normally have a rather careless look to them even though he's always looking for a fight. These signs of insanity are what normally intimidate his enemies.
- Character Likes: Carnage, blood, fighting , strong fighters.
- Character Dislikes: weaklings, loud mouths,love, and crybabies
- Character Age: [Put Nothing Here]
[Human Appearance] The first thing that everyone notices about the powerful Decima Espada is his amazing height. He is about 8'6" tall with a rather lanky build that puts him at about 420lbs. Sinataro is also oddly proportioned because it seems his hands are too large for his arms. His massive hands are big enough to crush a basketball in the palm of his hand. This is a side-effect of becoming an Arrancar as an Adjuchas Hollow. Sinataro has lightly tanned skin which really brings out his hair. His hair is dark (on the verge of black) green that reaches about halfway down his neck in a shaggy fashion. His eyes are also a dark green but not as dark as his hair. The interesting thing about his eyes is that they are rather small compared to his body but one can see that the pupils of his eyes are slits rather than round pupils. Also thanks to his weird proportion, Sinataro walks with a very definite forward slouch to the point to where his massive knuckles nearly drag on the ground. Like most other Arrancars that are under Vasto Lorde level, Sinataro has markings on his face that are seemingly permanent. These appear as two small lime-green fang shaped markings facing each other at the center of his forehead and pointing down. Sinataro's mask fragments appear as two massive horns that are on his forehead. They are on each side of the forehead and are connected by a small crest that goes right between Sinataro's hairline and markings. The horns are as thick as bullhorns and they protrude forward and point upward. These horns are about a foot tall for they actually make him look taller than he actually is. The horns are rather devilish and can be a rather intimidating factor for the weak-hearted. His Hollow Hole is about the size of a basketball and it is located in the center of his abdomen. His Espada tattoo for the number "2" is tattooed in half on his front teeth. The top half of the tattoo is on his top front teeth and the bottom half is on his bottom front teeth. That way when he does his trademark smile people can clearly see his power and number.
Due to his massive size, Sinataro's has to have a rather massive uniform. Sinataro has his shirt as the only top. His shirt is like a turtleneck for the shirt reaches all the way down from his waist and it hugs all the way up his throat. The shirt has long sleeves and they stretch all the way to his wrists where they stop to reveal his massive hands. He has black stripes that go all the way up the center of his torso and down the sleeves of his torso. He has a standard but large black sash even though that's not where his Zanpakutou is held. His hakama is standard for his size and they lead down to his standard sandals and socks. Overall, Sinataro's outfit is very standard outside from its monstrous size.
[Arrancar Age] 253 appears to be in his early 30's
- Character Birthday: 12/29
- Character Zodiac Sign: Capircorn
- Character Blood Type: O]
- Bio: Sinataro , was an only child. He lived some what of a horrible life, he was often left alone simply because he kept talking to strange beings that simply were not there, but in his own eyes these creatures were as real as him or anyone else, it became more ridicules when he started giving these "invisible beings" real names saying that they were people who passed on from this world, and were not able to move on to the next. As a child both of his parents where killed of by a mysterious masked creature with a hole in the center of its stomach, Sinataro was able to see the creature as plain as day, but when he attempted to warn his parents they ignored his plea's like they usually do, only this time they would regret it. As Sinataro closed his eyes he would feel the hot sticky warmth of blood across his face, as he slowly opened his eyes, Sinataro could make out seemed to be legs, half a torso sticking out of it's mouth. The creature left Sinataro alone stating. "I'll Come back for you when your least expecting it." Sinataro lived a tormented life, not able to make friends or establish a relationship with anyone, he lived a tortured life, living in fear that the hollow would one day appear, and kill everyone he cherished.
One day as Sinataro made his normal routine back home, avoiding the various set of booby traps that had be set up for the beast, if it were to return, Sinataro came upon a small girl who seemed to be lost, she was alone crying, on the ground, begging for someone to help her find her mother. The young boy who was now in his preteens, took pity on the girl, and offered to bring her to the local police station to help her find her mother.
The young girl smiled through red cheeks filled with tears, as she stood up, the young boy noticed a small broken chain embedded onto her chest, he asked her what it was, and she had no idea. So putting the small note past him, the two reached the police station, upon minutes of trying to convince local officers that the young boy was not crazy, and that the girl standing next to him, which for some apparent reason they could not see, really existed. Sinataro was about to give up, turning around about to leave he heard a ere familiar voice.
"Sinataro, thank you for gathering up such a delicious buffet for me, I truly am thankful." Sinataro turned around to see a giant turtle like beast with a pearl white mask adorned atop its head, with yellow eyes gauging down at the small group of men sitting there laughing at the small tale Sinataro had told them.
As the young boy attempted to get the men to run away, his cries fell onto silent ears, for the beast was upon them all within a matter of seconds. Bloody screams, and wails could be heard as the men were eaten alive, a truly gruesome fate was to be held for him too, if he were not to run. So As he, and the small girl who had been terrified, took off into the streets, narrowly being hit by several cars, Sinataro finally made it back home with the small girl.
As he attempted to rethink what to do, a loud metal c***k could be heard, as the chain around the young girls chest began to dissolve. Unaware of the situation, Sinataro turned around to attempt to calm down the girl, who was now already beginning to turn into a hollowed beast herself. Kazuya fell to the ground as the small miniature hollow girl attacked him, soon his screams would attract a near by shinigami who had patrolled the area. The semi old shinigami, helped rescue Sinataro from the hollowed girl, performing the sacred sending away of her soul, so she could find peace on the other side.
As Sinataro was about to thank the shinigami for his help, the turtle hollow snuck up from behind devouring the shinigami, Sinataro did not even have a chance to warn the man of the incoming threat. As he stared certain death in the very eyes, to scared to scream or cry, he took a step forward. The hollow beast let out a monstrous roar, sounding like a t-rex mixed with a demonic wail. As Sintaro stared back at the beast, he showed no fear, and no regret. "I know I will die now, but I swear you better prey you chew me up in one ******** bite, or else I'll come back devour you myself you ******** piece of s**t!"
Sinataro stuck to that promise attacking the beast, grabbing a near by rake scratching it across its left cheek, leaving a giant indent across its face. The beast then attacked Sinataro, and within a matter of seconds he too was eaten alive, his soul becoming apart of the hollow, as it reached it's next evolution, But unlike its previous transformations, the creature, seemed to morph into something resembling a cross between a large black spire with an ivory mask, seemed to act out on rage and impulse alone, as it made it's way back to hueco mundo it was pursued by 2 shinigami who had came to avenge their fallen master. "HAaaaaaaaA" What can only be explained gruesome, does not even come close to what was witnessed, The newly born gillian seemed to have a shark like face instead of the usual pointed nose, classic appearance. Where is he! Shouted the first man, as the black giant seemed to vanish with out a trace. As the second shinigami made his way through the garganta that the gillian had made, something seemed off. Is it just me or do you fee as if we were led here... oh s**t! but both their words were of no avail as the last image either could see, would be ivory like jagged rocks falling down from the sky, and from beneath them, the gillian had buried himself beneath the sand and had waited, until it's unsuspecting victims came trampling through it's territory.
What appeared like several month seemed to pass as the gillian seemed to go on a rampage consuming anything that was in it's was, after it's last victim, a fellow gillian was finally consumed, the violent gillian began to grab it's ivory like mask and began to scream, a swirl of energy began to surround the being, other weaker hollow were scared off by the noise, which only drew the attention of the stronger Adjucha, a more elite form of hollow, a swirl of pale sand began to circulate around the gillian, which began to sink further down in size, and as the sound of bones breaking, and snapping out of place, shifting from one side to another, the shame of a new creature could be seen, something more terrifying then it's previous form it now stood on two legs, showing a more animal like appearance with the upper torso of a gorilla , and a crown of bones sitting atop its skull, its arms were the combination of bones and green skin, its eyes a dark yellow, as the screaming calmed down one of the first Adjucha came forth in a attempt to guage the new creature. "Welcome brother, you have now reached the last form of evolution" As the other hollow waited for its reply they shook their heads. Something to dumb to exist, lets kill, it." As the first Adjucha began to turn back around to make it's first attack, it halted for a brief moment, as the rest of the Adjucha wondered what was going on, the hand of the new Adjucha, could be seen reaching through the spine of the first Adjucha. "Weak" As the Adjucha's began fighting, it was only a matter of time before they were all torn to shred's, within the center of the black blood like sand stood the lone Adjucha, who simply killed, and consumed anything that he felt was strong enough to fight.
Over the course of what seemed like a century.the Adjucha finally reached it's next evolution. Into a more human like being instead of an animal, leaving its shell like exterior behind, and gaining horns instead, the hollow like man wondered through out hueco mundeo, consuming the souls of weaker hollows, until he himself became an arrancar, his body seemed more human, almost an adult version of himself, even able to remember how he was created through the melding of memories from his previous life.
The *new* Sinataro Attakata seemed to be more human like, then others, baring a large red tattoo across his left cheek, seeming to be a faded memory, of his evolution, Not even he knows how he evolved so quickly or for what reason, but he cares less about that, relaxing most of the time in hueco mundo, and finds himself sleeping most of the time, instead of going on missions. No one knows for certain who he really is, or where he attained his power. All anyone knows is that when Sin goes out, he usually is hunting for someone strong to fight.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 3:31 pm
 - Character Skin Color/Ethnicity: white
- Character Height: 8"6
- Character Hair Color: Charcoal black with shades of dark green
- Character Hair Length/ Style short trim
- Character Eye Color: emerald green
- Character Description: The first thing that everyone notices about the powerful DecimaEspada is his amazing height. He is about 8'6" tall with a rather lanky build that puts him at about 420lbs. Sinataro is also oddly proportioned because it seems his hands are too large for his arms. His massive hands are big enough to crush a basketball in the palm of his hand. This is a side-effect of becoming an Arrancar as an Adjuchas Hollow. Sinataro has lightly tanned skin which really brings out his hair. His hair is dark (on the verge of black) green that reaches about halfway down his neck in a shaggy fashion. His eyes are also a dark green but not as dark as his hair. The interesting thing about his eyes is that they are rather small compared to his body but one can see that the pupils of his eyes are slits rather than round pupils. Also thanks to his weird proportion, Sinataro walks with a very definite forward slouch to the point to where his massive knuckles nearly drag on the ground. Like most other Arrancars that are under Vasto Lorde level, Sinataro has markings on his face that are seemingly permanent. These appear as two small lime-green fang shaped markings facing each other at the center of his forehead and pointing down. Sinataro's mask fragments appear as two massive horns that are on his forehead. They are on each side of the forehead and are connected by a small crest that goes right between Sinataro's hairline and markings. The horns are as thick as bullhorns and they protrude forward and point upward. These horns are about a foot tall for they actually make him look taller than he actually is. The horns are rather devilish and can be a rather intimidating factor for the weak-hearted. His Hollow Hole is about the size of a basketball and it is located in the center of his abdomen. His Espada tattoo for the number "2" is tattooed in half on his front teeth. The top half of the tattoo is on his top front teeth and the bottom half is on his bottom front teeth. That way when he does his trademark smile people can clearly see his power and number.
Due to his massive size, Sinataro's has to have a rather massive uniform. Sinataro has his shirt as the only top. His shirt is like a turtleneck for the shirt reaches all the way down from his waist and it hugs all the way up his throat. The shirt has long sleeves and they stretch all the way to his wrists where they stop to reveal his massive hands. He has black stripes that go all the way up the center of his torso and down the sleeves of his torso. He has a standard but large black sash even though that's not where his Zanpakutou is held. His hakama is standard for his size and they lead down to his standard sandals and socks. Overall, Sinataro's outfit is very standard outside from its monstrous size.
- Character Hollow Hole Location: Belly button
- Character Number Location: his front teeth
- Character Attire: Traditional Hakama with a waist cut revealing his low cut.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 4:05 pm
- Zanpakutō Resurrección Name: Espina
- Zanpakutō Sealed Form: Sinataro has a rather intimidating and violent sealed state. The weapon is all white and it looks like the weapon is made of either bone or the material Hollow Masks are made of. The sword looks like the bones of a fish. The sword is about 5'6" long which seems normal size for Sinataro. The handle is wrapped in a dark green cloth and the handle is wide and long enough to have Sinataro's massive hand grasp it with ease. The sword doesn't have an edge but a set of long sharp rib-like spines. These spines are on each side of the sword. These spines vary in size and are the longest on the end of the sword.
There are about 10 spines, on each edge of the sword. The longest spines are about three feet long, and they each get generally shorter by about two inches as the spines travel down the sword. The sword lacks a stabbing tip for it is based on a hack and slashes technique. The sword is as thick as a human femur and the sword is surprisingly durable.
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- Zanpakutō Resurrección Activation Statement: "impale espina"
- Zanpakutō Resurrección Appearance Sinataro's Resurreccion is one of the most frightening releases when it comes to appearance. Sinataro will hold his sword behind his back in a manner where the sword is pointing vertically down his massive. He will then say in his subtly insane tone "Impale, Espina." Then the sword's spines will curve inwards and suddenly impale his body. The spines will go straight through his back and will exit through the front of his body.
Sinataro will then have a look of terror on his face and then he will just fall over. His legs will remain standing but his body is bent over like he was just killed. All of his vital's will drop, and he will enter a temporary state of death which last's for one post. This unusual act lets people think that he was actually killed by his own sword but smarter ones can figure out that something isn't right. Shortly afterwards Sinataro will start to laugh maniacally. The laughter will start as a little chuckle and then shortly it will turn into a loud and easily insane laugh as he throws his body up again.
Once his laughter has reached a high, a massive and even crushing explosion of dark green reiatsu will burst out from Sinataro's body. The blast is quick but blinding and normally temporarily blinds his enemy for a few moments. Once his enemy regains his/her senses they will see the new and terrifying form of Sinataro. He is now shorterr than before, for now he stands at about 6 feet tall.
His upper body and arms have become reduced in muscle mass to the point where he is almost half the size that he once was. His teeth are razor sharp, the green markings on his forehead have, changed to large light green markings that cover his eyes like scars. He now fires his Cero out of his mouth. His new frightening appearance can really cause some major intimidation to his enemies. In this new form, Sinataro's hierro is strengthened but his actual strength has been nearly double. A single hard punch from him can literally punch an building in two. The drawback of this form is that it restricts his speed by half. His movements are slow due to the massive amount of spiritual energy that he stores through out every joint of his body Ie, the arms and legs. . He doesn't really care for this because his massive body can take an amazing amount of damage especially with the new powerful hierro reinforcing it.
- Zanpakutō Resurrección Abilities Sinataro's resurreccion has no certain abilities but a single ability, that can be used in many different ways. Which is his increased strength. This ability is easy to control, althhough this ability might not seem enough to become the decima Espada, his new strength along with his new Hierro and this ability can make him a tank of an Arrancar that can take a lot of firepower to take down.
- Achieved? [All Arrancar get this]
- Segunda Resurrección: [Espada only if obtained]
- Segunda Resurrección Appearance: Reverts to a child like state, were the only thing that seems to stay the same is his horn size, and the size of his hole located on his belly button, which makes it appear to be bigger then what it once was. In this state both his speed and strength are increased, but his intelligence seems to be at a decrease.
- Segunda Resurrección Abilities
*oídos de destrucción (ears of destruction) : User drags one hand towards the sky, forming a black cero ball in the palm of his hands, the ball then compresses to the size of a orange once compressed the user throws the ball allowing it to travel a good 10 feet before it explodes releasing a grand cero shockwave that temporarily alters the senses of any one aside the user who is within range of it, causes fatigue, decrease in reaction time, indecision, and inability to prioritize. ((think of it as a massive shell shock.)) (lasts for 3 posts.)
*Negro de Murete (Black Death): Clenches both fists tightly, as energy can be seen engulfing both fists as if they were on fire, any living thing that comes within contact or within 3 feet of either fist becomes poisoned with a toxin fume that not only poisons the body, but temporarily paralyzes it also. [Side Effect] Loses feeling in hands for 3 posts. (Note: Paralysis lasts for 1 posts, poisonous toxin lasts for 4 posts. Example: Strikes someone in the arm with negro de murete, the arm goes limb, and the target feels a surge of pain through out their entire arm, once the paralysis fades away the user begins to feel the immediate surge of pain throughout the inflicted body part.)
Dimension Disaster: The user raises both hands up forming a circle with his fingers. The user then lets out a massive surge of energy that creates a two dimensional rifts, the first infront of him, the second any particular location within view, is able to travel through to the second portal, but once through each portals, both will close automatically. [Side effect] Once through the first, the user has about 15 seconds to get to the other, leaving the enemy able to prepare or defend the surprise attack. Only two portals can be created per usage, with a 6 post cool time. Can only send objects such as ceros, body parts, and one full body person through a portal per usage.
apuesta muerte (Death's Gamble) The user creates a ring of emerald green energy that surrounds them both.
Requirements
Takes three post's to set up.
-must do a random number between 1-4-
If the user rolls a:
1) Then the enemy loses the ability to speak.
2) Loses the ability to hear.
3) Loses the ability see.
4) Loses the ability to smell.
(No matter which ever side effect is rolled, the effect shall last 2 posts total.) [Down Side] The enemies remaining senses become sharper
- Segunda Resurrección Time Able to Hold: [How long can you hold Segunda Resurrección, All upper Espada achieved may have it unlimited.]
- Achieved? [Seek authorization from Guild Captain]
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 4:06 pm
Bala
- Color: green
- Range: [10 ft]
- Distance:250 ft
- Mastery [Yes]
Cero
- Color: [Dark Green]
- Range: [184 cm wide]
- Distance: [257ft.]
- Mastery [Expert]
- Hierro :
Mastered- Sinataro can possibly be considered the "Steel Juggernaut". His ability to harden his skin over a particular area for protection is something, that he only finds necessary to continue fighting. He is not indestructible how ever, but his Hierro can be compared to that of solid steel.
- Swordsmanship: (Zanjutsu)
Average- Sinataro is more adept at using one hand Katana's. His fighting style suggest that he likes to keep one hand free for defense, and offensive attacks. he isn't the best at swordsmanship, but wouldn't consider himself the worst either.
- Sonído :
Master-Due to his size Sinataro focused on being one the fastest of Arrancars. He hardly concerns himself on defense and offense, unlike the others. Compared to the Espada and a few Fraccion, his sonido is makes him appear to be in more then one place at a time.
- High Speed Regeneration
Master - Sinataro learned from a fellow espada that being in control of one's own body, was the key to true strength, so he made sure to focus his strength into his speed, and regenerative abilities, for Sin, it take's a matter of 3 posts to fully regain any lost limbs, and a total of 2 posts to fully heal from any cuts or bruises, granted half the time, Sinataro rarely get's the chance to use this ablitilty due to the fact that he has not found, anyone to push his to his limits.
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Puppet on a String Theory Vice Captain
Philosophizing Bibliophile
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 5:04 pm
The Segunda Espada is not a guaranteed position, as the previous holder has not been confirmed to have relieved himself of it. Nevertheless, upon conversation with Dcme [the moderator that manages the Espada], your rank may be changed as found most necessary. For the time being, I request that you choose a position below Tres, with the exception of Decima.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 5:30 pm
Puppet on a String Theory The Segunda Espada is not a guaranteed position, as the previous holder has not been confirmed to have relieved himself of it. Nevertheless, upon conversation with Dcme [the moderator that manages the Espada], your rank may be changed as found most necessary. For the time being, I request that you choose a position below Tres, with the exception of Decima. then if i may choose the rank of the fourth ?
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Puppet on a String Theory Vice Captain
Philosophizing Bibliophile
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 2:14 pm
[ Profile Evaluation ] Appearance:
-Alter "Segunda", as well as the tattoo number, to the position granted at the bottom of this review.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Background:
-Mere humans cannot visually identify beings of the afterlife. Explain why it is that he was spiritually aware.
-Provide more reason as to the background of the Hollow that tormented your character. Currently, it seems unfinished and purposeless, merely there for plot.
-Elaborate on his evolution from basic Hollow, to Gillian, to Adjucha.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Personal Information:
-In the "[Human Appearance] [Put Here]" prompt, put the age that the character seems to be, if he were compared to a human.
-List the age of your Arrancar under the "[Arrancar Age] [Put Here]" prompt.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Espada Prowess:
-A diametre of fifty feet is far too wide for a Bala.
-A travelling distance of two-thousand-five-hundred-forty-seven feet is far too long for a Cero.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Statistics:
-Elaborate on your character's prowess of Hierro.
-Respond to the Zanjutsu prompt.
-Elaborate on your character's prowess of Sonído.
-Elaborate on your character's prowess of High Speed Regeneration.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Zanpakutō:
-A bit of an unusual sealed state. I will not request that you change it, however duly note my comment.
-That is all.
Resurrecciòn:
-Perhaps provide a length for the duration of the Resurrecciòn's release [i.e. he "kills" himself in one post, and proves otherwise in a second].
-Downsize the extent of his muscle mass.
-Provide a specific decrease in terms of his speed.
-The ability of the Resurrecciòn is not entirely unique, in that another possesses the prowess of manipulation of their osteoclasts and osteoplasts. I will not request that you change the technique, however, if you are uncomfortable with the fact that your character's Resurrecciòn is so similar to that of another, the information is yours to do with as you please. The physical formes are rather different, so the two are not entirely same.
-Alter "Segunda", as well as the tattoo number, to the position granted at the bottom of this review.
-That is all.
Segunda Resurrecciòn:
-The Resurrecciòn and Segunda Resurrecciòn are very different. I suggest making one more like the other. As was previously mentioned, the former is similar to that of another user, and if you desire to change one or the other, it would be preferred that it be the initial Resurrecciòn, so as to retain uniqueness of character.
-Elaborate on the character's new size.
-Obscura mentions an ability known as "Dark Ace", however you've no other technique by that title.
-Obscura mentions a lance, however there is no previous mention of such an object in the Segunda Resurrecciòn.
-Elaborate on how frequently the abilities may be used.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Literacy:
-Many run-on sentences.
-Not pristine in that your punctual skills could be improved.
-Paragraphing can be enhanced; add more detail and sensory imagery.
-Utilisation of Spanish if not fluent or frequent [can be voided].
-Vocabulary can be widened; the repetition of words is often.
-That is all. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Other Comments:
-Having discussed with Dcme, your character is to be listed as the Decima Espada
-That is all.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 4:16 pm
Puppet on a String Theory Apologizes are all, that I can offer at this time. I have taken the opportunity of modifying each selection as instructed, if for what ever reason I have misunderstood something and require further correction, I will be more then happy to do so. Again I apologize for my lack of literacy, along with not using the correct formats that have been perfectly shown to me. Also I would like to point, that the only one at fault for all of this is me, I can only hope that I have not become to much of a bother, for anything that I have requested, look forward to the guidance of my fellow peers, and truly hope you give me a chance to prove myself as a fighter.
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Puppet on a String Theory Vice Captain
Philosophizing Bibliophile
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 4:36 pm
Your Bala cannot have a diametre of one hundred feet.
As the Decima Espada, you will not automatically begin with the Segunda Resurrecciòn. It may, however, be acquired through role-play, at a later date.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 6:30 pm
Puppet on a String Theory understood, is there any thing else that I may have missed?
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Puppet on a String Theory Vice Captain
Philosophizing Bibliophile
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 6:43 pm
That looks to be everything.
I approve of this profile.
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