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 Posted: Wed Dec 18, 2013 11:33 pm
- Username: kesuke uchiha
- Character Name: War
- Pronunciation of the Name: wôr
- Character Squad: 7th squad
- Character Rank: captain
- Affiliation: N/A
- Sexuality non sexual
- Character Personality straight forward and logical, void of most emotion, intelligent and focused yet indifferent to most happenings other than duty and art
- Character Likes: order, perfect patterns, neatness, music, art, and synergy.
- Character Dislikes: disorder, liars, dishonor, waste of talent or potential, the color blue, and violence.
- Character Age:
[Human Age] 42
[Shinigami Age] 800
- Character Birthday: may 12th
- Character Zodiac Sign: (dont know what this one means)
- Character Blood Type: AB negative
- Bio:
When the country of Sweden invaded paganistic tribes of the land that became finnland during what is known as the false crusades of 1200 AD or the Swedish crusades, a Druid was called to help barter a peace to keep the christian nation of Sweden from the slaughter of the defenseless tribes of Finland.
This man had no name and was simply referred to as wisdom. He came to the Swedish military camp to speak of peace, even surrender just to save the lives of those who could not fight. in turn they attempted to kill him. The next morning a nearby village fearful of the Swedish troops they expected to invade at sunrise were met with only the man known as wisdom, battered but in one piece, yet drenched in blood he informed the village that they were safe from the troops that WOULD HAVE invaded that morning but they could expect no peace or cease fire from the Swedes.
When they had decided to kill Wisdom they had not known his talent as a fighter or despite his affinity for peace and roll as an advisor, his will to survive and protect the land he knew was far greater than they could comprehend, expecting to simply kill an old man they just used three men, he killed them all then moved into the camp laying waste to everyone he came across. the camp only numbering in 200 was not prepared and in the confusion broke into a panic. Not knowing who or what was attacking they began to fight among themselves and he ended up able to escape as less than 30 of the Swedes were able to leave with their lives.
Gathering all the local villagers into a small militia he taught them what he could and migrated them into a valley that would protect them from ambushes. The people he was watching over took to calling him Honor, instead of his traditional name. Though after three attacks his name changed again, they called him War.
Only a month passed before War was captured and his militia of farmers and peaceful families were destroyed by sheer overwhelming numbers. Taken into captivity and used as entertainment gladiator style, he was forced to fight until the final night when he saw his chance to free dozens of captured men, freeing them and holding off the soldiers as they fled he died in his battle only to awake in the soul society.
His soul was so utterly powerful that he had to live away from most others. many soul reapers told him he should join, he would always refuse in favor of a peaceful existence instead of the constant conflict and battle the shimigami faced.
Finally the day came when he was outright drafted by the soul society and following the duty of higher power as he referred to it as. War gained considerable power and before he even touched a seated position had control over his Shika AND his Bankai. Not wanting the position which he would be facing even more battle he was again ordered to take up the position of captain.
despite his dislike for conflict and that he was forced into every position he ever took up, War had always shown great care for those around him, dedication and honor to his responsibilities no matter how much he did not like them.
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Posted: Wed Dec 18, 2013 11:53 pm
- Character Skin Color/Ethnicity: pale white - Character Height: 6 foot even - Character Hair Color: snow white. - Character Hair Length/ Style Shoulder length and unkept - Character Eye Color: dull gray - Character Description: thin yet physically fit, lightweight. - Character Attire: light color robes, preferably white and a light gold with black trimmings. - Character Tattoos/Markings/Scars: N/A
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Posted: Thu Dec 19, 2013 12:26 am
- Zanpakutō Name: muodonmuuttajaksi - Zanpakutō Spirit Appearance:  tall and quiet prefers not to speak at all, face covered at all times by a thick bone mask, all clothes appear to be old barbarian style. - Zanpakutō Sealed Form:  very plain and simple, no special markings or grip. - Shikai Status: mastered - Zanpakutō Shikai Activation Statement: Bleed muodonmuuttajaksi - Zanpakutō Shikai Name: muodonmuuttajaksi - Zanpakutō Shikai Appearance  sword multipies and becomes a stream of 8 cubic meters liquid metal bending to his will in infinite shapes, like a water shika only this blade is capable of solidifying back into a blade to assist him in an advantage of weapon type. - Battlefield Changes: N/A - Zanpakutō Shikai Abilities muodonmuuttajaksi exists in two forms. solid and liquid its powers and techniques range from the two forms. Liquid form: liquid form arts require a massive amount of spiritual energy and drains War's reserves quickly. though weightless it still carried incredible mass allowing him to strike quickly and efficiently. the relationship between the volume of the technique and the energy used is important. War could potentially create a mass that would drain his power so quickly he would die before he was capable of reducing it. the normal volume of liquid form is just enough to flow through his bloodstream and maintain about three cubic feet of liquid metal, expanding anything past that for techniques strains him and can only be done 10 times total in a fight without putting him in danger dying from lack of energy. (such techniques vary in size and shape so much its impossible to put a label on every one of them, these techniques have a two turn cooldown.) solid form: once in solid form the liquid metal is extremely durable. with the only real weakness of quick changes from cold to hot, cold being from around -100 degrees F and hot being over 300 degrees F. this will shatter the effected areas and deplete the energy stored within, this weakness is shared in all forms including bankai. Most forms associated with solid form is armors and weapons, though barriers and traps can be created, however if War ventures away from the left behind metals over 50 meters in distance, it burns up the spiritual energy inside it until the metal simply crumbles. ((the only restrictions on solid form techniques is that large constructs must be made with liquid form and any large solid form techniques that are destroyed by its weakness counts as one large liquid form attack and shares cool down)) - Achieved? yes - Zanpakutō Bankai Name: muodonmuuttajaksi jumala - Zanpakutō Bankai Appearance:   not only his sword but his body becomes the same liquid metal able to gain or reduce his own weight to unbelievable levels, the picture just above is his favored combat form it is solid form and has no cooldown. liquid form consumes a massive amount of spiritual energy and must be used sparingly. - Bankai Battlefield Changes: ONLY to War, there is a 200 meter barrier he cannot pass through without deactivating the bankai, this does NOT effect his enemies, ONLY War suffers this handicap. - Zanpakutō Bankai Abilities solid form: in solid form War near ALWAYS takes up his favored combat form, any injuries to this form are reduced seeing that he is made of metal at this point, after injuries the outer shell is repaired with liquid form and drains spiritual energy. this form grants him impressive strength and speed, but most importantly quadrupled density. there is no cool down for this, in bankai it is basically his natural form. however this form STILL shares the weakness of his shika liquid form: in liquid form bankai War's body is counted among the liquid. requiring only 10% of the energy previously needed and the mass limitation before it starts to require an effort to use it 5 times the previous 40 cubic feet. as well all the mass must return when bankai ends damage to the liquid form is difficult without energy or element based attacks, heat based attacks will reduce his attacking power and sap away at his spiritual energy reducing the amount of time he can spend in liquid form and cold based will force him back into solid form preventing attacks and making his actual body capable of being injured (any large scale moves over 40 cubic feet can only be used 5 times and has a cool down of three posts.) weight manipulation: During bankai War can fully manipulate the weight of his boy and weapon from 0% to 10000% original weight which is the same as mercury.( any manipulation of his weight going up has a 2 turn cool down, going down has 1 turn cool down.) (additional rule: when bankia is activated there is a 200 meter radius that he cannot leave without deactivating his bankai, like a barrier but ONLY for him. if his foe wishes to run off they are perfectly capable of doing so, once they get out of that radius he cannot follow without his bankai failing.) - Zanpakutō Bankai Time Able to Hold: for War's bankai it is not a matter of how long but how much it is used, this bankai quickly drains his spiritual energy when in liquid form so it could be anything from 0.0001 seconds to four days. - Achieved? (seeking authorization.)
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Posted: Thu Dec 19, 2013 12:27 am
Kido
- Bakudō: War knows no skills outside his own sword
- Hadō: War knows no skills outside his own sword
- Healing spells: War knows no skills outside his own sword though any serious injuries can be cured or repaired by activating bankia and repairing his body with liquid state.
Other
- Hand-to-hand combat: grand master (amplified by solid state bankia)
- Agility: medium
- Swordsmanship: medium
- Shunpo: moderately high skills in Shunpo
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 9:15 am
I'll be reviewing your profile (aside from your Zanpaukto to which Puppet on a String Theory will do) today, dear sir.
Personal Information
Well, as far as this section goes, I believe that you should be a bit more detailed with your explanations. Everything seems so brief and concise. A Zodiac sign is the astronomical sign according to your birthday. This should help you with that section
Also,
Quote: he died in his battle only to awake in the soul society. His soul was so utterly powerful that he had to live away from most others. many soul reapers told him he should join, he would always refuse in favor of a peaceful existence instead of the constant conflict and battle the shinigami faced.
I believe you rushed through his transition from human to soul. Did he not dwell in Rukongai for some time? According to his age of 800. he would've come to the Realm of Souls just roughly 200 years after the Great Ash War. I think things like this should be expanded upon so there is a clear understanding of how your character came into this world and became who he is.
Quote: Finally the day came when he was outright drafted by the soul society
Soul Society has never had a draft for officers. You either enter the academy or a higher ranked official brings you into Seireitei. The only time a draft would happen is in times of war.
Quote: War gained considerable power and before he even touched a seated position had control over his Shika AND his Bankai
This is far to concise for my liking. It's highly unlikely that someone can just master both stages of the blade without an extended amount of time [especially considering your character is only 800 years old]. Not even a skilled Captain could do this. In summary, the entire last few parts of the bio will need some work. There isn't any mention of the Second Ash War which happened only fifty years ago roughly. You'll need to somehow explain how he came to Captaincy so recently due to the last Captain retiring just after the war.
Furthermore, Squad Seven is the engineering faction of Soul Society. Your character does not reflect these qualities. As the Captain, you'd need to reflect those duties in some way in order to gain captaincy of this squad. I suggest you check here for more information.
Lastly, an application will need to be sent in order to qualify for the spot. This can be found here.
Shinigami Abilities
As said before, to be apart of Squad Seven, you need to have some engineering/blacksmithing background and attributes.
In terms of your character being the "grand master" is a bit far fetched.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 2:38 pm
oks...I will speak on behalf of my character and change him up as we go though please note I am a very respecting person...and even if my words SEEM mean...they are indeed not.....I am simply trying to ask questions give examples and help other draw conclusions. though I am very confused why we need a zodiac sign.....if its determined by birth day....then..why do we need to put it AND birthday.... should be either or. but your guild...your thing...moving on. would you prefer me to go into every last near nonexistent detail of how he went from being who he is to...the exact same person he is? and from what I gathered from the manga...the soul society is the place where everything soul reaper exists... the Rukongai is inside the soul society all of it is there....him going there is just his leaving the real world. though if you prefer...I can be more specific...and just say he went to the soul society and lived in Rukongai for a while. they drafted Ichigo giving his powers back and hitsugaia....true he did go willingly, but he was told that he must go, his power was killing those around him, even after he over and over again said he did not want to but he finally left. its not unrealistic.... if there was some supreme Godlike power floating around they would secure it before someone else got the chance to. perhaps drafted was the wrong word to use.....I will change it to sound more realistic... kenpachi AND hitsugaia both had considerable power....and potential to either rival a captain with ease or to unlock the secrets of their blades for ages before they joined up and became seated members the reason I put this down was simply his potential was so great that his ability with his zanpakuto was so great that he could do it very quickly....unlocking it was easy for him hitsugaia went from third seat to captain in less than 15 years....ichigo went from a simple human able to see ghosts to bankai in less than a single year. dont get me started on kenpachi.... renji ichigo and even that hat and clogs guy achived their bankia in 3 days as for the ash war....I will look into incorporating it into his bio....I really didnt quite understand anything about it but I will look closer been meaning to ask about the squad thingies....its fine if you are building your guild like this....but 7th squad has never had duties involving black smithing.... or creation of any kind, the only groups that have actually been assign any actual duties as far as the manga shows is 1, 2, 4, 11, 12, and possibly 13, all others simply have been hinted at with various things though again.... your guild...your thing.... and yes...originally this was for squad 6 but due to some confusion and failure to upkeep the list of what possitions are taken and what is not, I failed that part. we could just say there was a vacancy and seeing he did not want anything to do with the combat and he was volunTOLD to be a captain....they would have just thrown him here.... I will throw something about some blacksmithing skills in here. grand master was simply for his hand to hand skills...and nothing else. he is quite good at fighting with his hands seeing he does not enjoy killing people, he would by far prefer to simply capture them and hand them off to whomever is responsible for it, and in life he always fought with his hands.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 3:33 pm
To start off, my Bleach is not completely based off of the anime/manga. So to directly cite the show/manga doesn't quite work.
The zodiac sign will come into play sometime later; all things on the skeleton are there for a reason.
Quote: I can be more specific...and just say he went to the soul society and lived in Rukongai for a while.
A biography is a documentation of someone's life. Don't you think including some background of his living in Rukongai as important or at least good to have? To just brush over it (which the majority of your bio does) is really a cheap shot for lack of better terms.
Quote: They drafted Ichigo giving his powers back and hitsugaia....true he did go willingly, but he was told that he must go, his power was killing those around him, even after he over and over again said he did not want to but he finally left. its not unrealistic.... if there was some supreme Godlike power floating around they would secure it before someone else got the chance to.
Again, the guild doesn't directly correlate with the anime/manga. So, here in our guild a draft never happened. I'll agree, it's not unrealistic but, as the person RPing the Captain-Commander, is hasn't happened. I'm not saying that in can't happen but it hasn't yet.
Quote: kenpachi AND hitsugaia both had considerable power....and potential to either rival a captain with ease or to unlock the secrets of their blades for ages before they joined up and became seated members the reason I put this down was simply his potential was so great that his ability with his zanpakuto was so great that he could do it very quickly....unlocking it was easy for him hitsugaia went from third seat to captain in less than 15 years....ichigo went from a simple human able to see ghosts to bankai in less than a single year. dont get me started on kenpachi.... renji ichigo and even that hat and clogs guy achived their bankia in 3 days
Again, we're taking a new aim on Bleach here. I feel like you're hyping up your character quite a bit like the golden prodigy. I could understand this case if you'd expanded more on his background but you didn't. There was no inclusions on when or how he even got a Zanpakuto, first heard it speak, achieved Shikai (or for that matter how he achieved it), and how he so drastically achieved the highest level of technique a Shinigami has. I can't really lean towards agreeing with you if you don't have the specifics. Your character isn't Hitsugaya, or Ichigo, or Kenpachi.
Quote: as for the ash war....I will look into incorporating it into his bio....I really didnt quite understand anything about it but I will look closer
The Ash Wars are fundamental pieces of this guild. If there were any questions concerning what it was you can always PM a mod and we'd help you to understand it. I understand it can he confusing since we're now transitioning from one arc to the next.
The First occurred roughly 1,050 years ago and the Second occurred 50 years ago. We are fresh out of the Second Ash War.
Quote: been meaning to ask about the squad thingies....its fine if you are building your guild like this....but 7th squad has never had duties involving black smithing.... or creation of any kind, the only groups that have actually been assign any actual duties as far as the manga shows is 1, 2, 4, 11, 12, and possibly 13, all others simply have been hinted at with various things though again.... your guild...your thing.... and yes...originally this was for squad 6 but due to some confusion and failure to upkeep the list of what possitions are taken and what is not, I failed that part. we could just say there was a vacancy and seeing he did not want anything to do with the combat and he was volunTOLD to be a captain....they would have just thrown him here.... I will throw something about some blacksmithing skills in here.
I am fully aware of the Bleach anime/manga layout of the Gotei 13. Here, as continuously stated, our system is different. Squad Seven is tasked with blacksmith work and engineering. It's to give some diversity to the Squads and give each Squad some type of responsibility.
& as far as him "being thrown" into Captaincy is unlikely. There are three ways to become a Captain, as I'm sure you're aware of, and it's really unlikely the Gotei would simply throw in someone to take the spot of a major part of Seireitei. As for the list, we are still in transition period and getting everything organized and changed.
Quote: grand master was simply for his hand to hand skills...and nothing else. he is quite good at fighting with his hands seeing he does not enjoy killing people, he would by far prefer to simply capture them and hand them off to whomever is responsible for it, and in life he always fought with his hands.
Understandable. A description like this would definitely be great to include in that section. But seeing how he is a member of Squad Seven/Six, he wouldn't be the Grand Master. Squad Two, which leads in hand-to-hand combat and assassination would be more suited for such a skill. He could be a master of hand-to-hand, but proclaiming him grand master denounces Captain Tomoyo of Squad Two since that's the reason she leads the Covert Ops. and Squad Two itself. I'll accept that he rivals her in the skill, but that's as far as I'll allow it.
In summary, I think you're overpowering his personality fields. Without having the details that I mentioned it's really hard for me to clear these fields because you don't give me reason to.
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