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PostPosted: Tue Oct 22, 2013 12:47 pm


Visored Application


Link to Profile: Here

How long have you been in the guild? Just accepted, pulled an all-nighter to finish profile and this so it could be ready to submit if accepted into the guild.

How active are you in the guild? I just pulled an all-nighter to finish this and a profile, I plan on being pretty active! xD

Why do you want to hold the rank of Visored? My character is rather dark in feeling, those who are Visoreds are even further outcasts from society and even abandoned by the ones they held and thought to be friends. It furthers the darkness that is in both his abilities and his personality and fuels the hatred in his heart for this world.

Why do you think you will do well as a Visored? Both by being active, having experience, and by furthering the story line of my character. The Visoreds also seem to need more members.

Your Sample: Fighting Inner Hollow without the Ability to use Hollowfication/Kido/Hollowfication Abilities, Shikai, or Bankai.

Zephyr awoke calmly into his inner mind, inside his inner hollow had been awaiting him. His hollow looked deeply into his eyes and said little before rushing forth with immense speed and a reverse Zanpakuto in hand. With only the briefest of moments before being run through, Zephyr brought up his Buraddo Sakenomi but only barely in time to deflect the blade to a ninety degree angle, his own blade going at a thirty-five degree angle down and to the right, his hollow’s was high and to the left, in theory completely in a North West position, with his left hand Zephyr grasped his face and made his own Visored mask over his face which came off with a small black reitsue. With his right hand he brought his blade upwards in an arc from the south east towards his Hollow in an attempt to slash through his left rib cage but the hollow did a rather acrobatic back flip to just avoid the blade going in front of his nose. Lunging forth after his hollow, he swung his Zanpakuto again towards the hollow but this time from the ninety degree position that was the high left to the right and only slightly down in an order to make a diagonal cut across his hollow's back however as the hollows head came face to face with Zephyr's, the Hollowed version of Zephyr raised his left hand to grasp Zephyr's face and arched his back shoulders to increase the potency of the throw, lunging forth in a sonido while holding onto his face, Zephyr would feel his body bury into the ground as blood would spit out of his mouth. The hollow would stand victoriously over Zephyr, raise his own version of the Zanpakuto and stab it straight down into Zephyr's sternum.

A sudden laugh came from Zephyr. The hollow looked at him and spoke, in a very confused voice. "Why are you laughing? You have your own sword ran through you. You can't use bankai, shikai, kido, or hollowfication." He smirked but his cockiness seemed a bit disturbed, "You are useless, helpless, and injured. Why are you laughing at your inevitable fa..." Suddenly, during his speech, Zephyr had gripped his own Zanpakuto and stabbed it right through his own Hollow's throat at the same time his free hand had grabbed the Hollow's Zanpakuto that was in his chest and pulled it in further to pull the Hollow closer and to ensure that he could not escape, it would even throw him off balance at the risk of slicing his hand to hell. The hollow would gurgle as black blood would spill from around its throat, "You talk too much.. if you plan on killing someone... you should do it." He stated as he twisted his Zanpakuto which was lodged in his Hollow's throat. "I can't use my abilities against you... so instead... I waited for you to get in a position to where you just couldn't get away. I win." He stated in a calm demeanor as his Hollow would begin to dissipate and return back inside of his own body. The hollow's Zanpakuto would also dissipate, standing up, he would sigh as he would begin to exit his inner world. He had won and his hollow could never claim him.
PostPosted: Sat Oct 26, 2013 4:13 pm


𝓛𝓾𝓼𝓽...𝒫𝓇𝒾𝒹𝓮...𝔇𝔬𝔪𝔦𝔫𝔞𝔫𝔠𝔢...

Guy, you are handsome. I mean, really. You're attractive.
Then again, So am I. ;D We're gunna take the guild by storm cool

Flattery aside, the won't exactly do. and it seems you have some things confused. In your Inner world, combating your inner Hollow, you would not be able to don your Hollow Mask as it draws on the Hollow's power. And you're fighting them for control. So that wouldn't.
Bala isn't that power. Powerful? Yes. But only (if I recall correctly) about 1/10th the power of Cero even if ten times the speed.
A Shinigami cannot fire Cero. Period. A Vizard/Visored wearing their Mask could, but not from the mouth. And, again, Only while wearing their Mask.

It's not a bad try, but do a bit of brush up and try again. You don't have to be so technical either (with degrees and such), but that's just my own recommendation and it won't stop you from getting approved. However, what does matter is paragraph formation, so remember, minimum of 5 complete sentences for a paragraph.

Oh Yes, and the word is "reiatsu". I know you know what it is and what it means, now you know how to spell it properly.

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PostPosted: Tue Oct 29, 2013 12:03 am


Prince Caelum Tsukiyo

Oiy, phone post. Thank you for the compliments mate. Name isn't guy though, it is Jay haha. Sorry for the mishaps, will fix it tomorrow after classes. I apologize about the delay, college and the Navy have been keeping me on edge what with classes and trying to set up an appointment. Oiy, we can take it by storm, so long as the winds dont blow us away, eh?
PostPosted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 2:17 pm


Prince Caelum Tsukiyo


Sorry about the delay. Fixed I do so believe. Also, the Leader of Visoreds never answered me in chat and has been over 48 hours. Let me know if I need to fix anything else, mate.

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2013 9:07 pm


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Sorry about the delay. Fixed I do so believe. Also, the Leader of Visoreds never answered me in chat and has been over 48 hours. Let me know if I need to fix anything else, mate.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2013 10:53 pm


looks good to me. Approved (Sorry took so long)

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 10, 2013 12:25 am


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looks good to me. Approved (Sorry took so long)


Thank you, and its quite alright, people get busy and he was more than helpful as were you mate.
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