Welcome to Gaia! ::

- Username: Happywho
- Character Name: Kenton Williams
- Pronunciation of the Name: Ken-ton Williams
- Character Squad: 3
- Character Rank: Leutenant
- Affiliation: n/a
- Sexuality: Bisexual
- Character Personality:
Kenton is a playful young soul reaper that likes to have fun and will not take much seriously. He likes to flirt with boys his (appearance) age and will always remind his elders how old and ancient they are and has no respect for women in particular. He keeps his past a secret and trains himself to have the superior Zanpukto.
~ Character Likes:
~ Shopping
~ pranking
~ Bankai training
~ Guys
~ eating meat
~ sarcasm
~ Character Dislikes:
~ Women
~ being called short
~ losing
~ hollows
- Character Age:

[Human Age] 17

[Shinigami Age] 186

- Character Birthday: 12th July
- Character Zodiac Sign: Cancer
- Character Blood Type: O-

- Bio:
Kenton was born into a wealthy family in England in the year 1925. He grew up as an only child and was pampered 24/7. Although this seemed like a perfect childhood, Kenton was put under pressure after joining secondary school to takeover the family business. His farther was a cold hearted man that paid no attention to Kenton whatsoever and his mother always seemed distant from Kenton. As the months went by, the pressure on Kenton grew and grew until arguments between Kenton and his farther were a regular pattern.

A year after all this, Kenton had enough and decided to run away from his family and away from London. However this plan went wrong as he was killed within the first week of running away by a mass murderer within a forest. As a soul he tried to look for his killer but in doing so he ran into the captain of squad 5 of the seiretei. This encounter lead to Kenton finding himself in the soul society as an orphan child like most kids.

He began training himself with like-minded children, Kenton entered the soul reaper academy a few years later and excelled in most classes. When it came to graduation Kenton immediately wanted to ascend through the ranks and become a captain. that was his dream and it will happen.

He started as a 10th seat within squad 5 but his captain thought he would be better suited in squad 3 and Kenton agreed to this and joined as a 3rd seat officer there. He annoys all the women in the squad (on purpose) and cossies up to the captain with ease, trying to understand the guy so the captain does not stay lonely for much longer.

Kenton now Serves under his captain faithfully and has recently Fully mastered his shikai. After the rogue incident he knew he had to become more serious as a soul reaper for the sake of his squad.

- Zanpakutō Name: Arashin no hasshin (caller of the storm)

- Zanpakutō Spirit Appearance:


- Zanpakutō Sealed Form:


- Shikai Status: Mastered

- Zanpakutō Shikai Activation Statement: "Surge from the heavens above, to the earths below!" Once the activation statement has been spoken, wind will curl around the whole blade and arm of the user. while this is happening clouds gather (if outside) and thunder can be heard in the distance. As the wind becomes faster, electricity forms within the current and the wind will break apart revealing Arashin no Hashin.

- Zanpakutō Shikai Name: Arashin no Hasshin

- Zanpakutō Shikai Appearance



Arashin no Hashin is a lightning bolt shaped scimitar. It's edge has a golden gleam and the there's a pulsing blue light running through the middle of the blade. The guard is 2 curved arms that are also gold coloured. The handle is wrapped in bandages which also wrap around the users hand, this doesn't merge with the user's hand but it helps keep the blade stable when using abilities.

- Battlefield Changes: Creates a thunder storm upon release (if outside)

- Zanpakutō Shikai Abilities In lameman terms, Arashin no Hashin can generate and manipulate electricity and use it to atttack. It is a pure offensive zanpakuto.
~(passive) Kentons speed increases upon shikai activation. When he uses a flash step he leaves eletrical sparks behind.
~(Kaminari manto) Kenton can emmit electricity from his body from any part of his being, this is a close range attack and is not a full offensive ability as it can be used to keep enemies at bay.
~(Inazuma bīmu) kenton can produce a high density energy beam from the blade tip. This can blast through an average sized building however it fires in a strait line only and becomes weaker if the user moves.
~(Hikari o sashi) When Kenton stabs the ground with his blade, blue cracks appear in the ground. Kenton can shoot small lightning bolts at the target, even if the target is in the air.

- Achieved? yes



- Zanpakutō Bankai Name: Arashin kyojin

- Zanpakutō Bankai Appearance:


When Kenton activates his Bankai, his whole body lights up. A lightning bolt will come down on him and strike his body. After the light fades from the inpact, Kenton will appear in a blue mecha-like armour. On the back of the armour there are bladed wings (used like captain hitsuguia) that he uses to asend quickly and fly in the air. Norse runes are engraved all over the armour and two blue eyes glow through the helmet. A blue short blade is chained to the right forearm of the armour, the chain curls round the arm and disappears into the armour plating. The blade itself has cracks running down the blade which are part of an ability. The whole armour looks bulky but Kenton's movements are not restricted as much as a person would think. The torso is almost triangular shaped.

- Bankai Battlefield Changes: Creates a dark lightning storm upon activation.

- Zanpakutō Bankai Abilities

~( Sēji Inazuma) can produce a powerful lightning blast in a straight line. like Inuzuma bīmu it weakens if the user moves and it covers a wider space of 8 meters in diameter.

~(passive) Kentons speed increased majorly and he has an almost 360 degree sight (except the universal blind spot, the back of the neck). The sight is more sensory based rather than visual.

-(Hitei bakudan) Kentons last resort and his most leathal ability. Arashin is a pure lightning type zanpakuto that generates eletricity and weaponizes it. It can also use external electricity in Bankai form. Kenton sacrifices tree quarters of his remaining spirit energy to break apart his blade and use the fragments to form a barrier. Using the barrier he can create an electrical field that burns the target severely (forth or third degree burns) on an atomic level. Kenton is also in the field upon activation so he himself can be burned in the process, the major risk to the move is the barrier braking. If it brakes then the energy will definitely break loose and cause unknown damage to the surrounding area, the damage depends on the potency of the attack.

~( Kaminari gitai-lightning mimicry) Like his shikai ability, Arashin Kyojin mimics eletricities traits as the whole armour becomes the energy itself for a limited amount of time (3 minutes) less harm can be done to kenton and his speed increases alost to the speed of light.

- Zanpakutō Bankai Time Able to Hold: Kenton is able to re-form parts of his bankai but not so well at this time.

- Achieved? no

I would really appreciate more detail from you.
The bio needs to tell me more about your character and must be at least four well written paragraphs.

Considering your character wants to be a third seat officer, Shikai would have been learned in order to receive the seat. Your Shikai abilities need names, post durations, and information on counteracting them.

Same goes for Bankai.

Ok I did best I can with tidying it up, if there is anything else I cant see it ( which i do apologies for) and i'm sorry for being a pain with this bio :s

Hello there. I'll be continuing the review of your Shinigami profile.
Before I do that, however, I will provide yourself with the knowledge that, as it is not publicly evident that this character has been previously approved, you should not have been posting. An OC must first be successfully put through the acceptance process prior to the owner being allowed to role-play with it. Part of this is for safety reasons, as a precaution that there might be any flaws to be found that were missed by the creator of the character, or even misunderstandings that may have occurred. This system is designed so people need not encounter future issues in their experience. That is merely fair say, though. Your reasoning for posting preemptively may have simply been nothing more than a miscommunication.

-

With a quick overview of the profile, things seem to majorly be in order. Your writing looks a bit slim, and as was previously stated, it would be appreciated for there to be more information provided, however it's not an absolute necessity. The bare minimum does lie within the boundaries of acceptance, so do with that as you please.

-

Looking into the actual functionality of this character, there are, however, many difficulties. I'll begin with the background, which is the first problematic piece of the profile.
Bits and pieces of what you included cause a severe conflict with the overruling storylines that have taken place within the Guild, though more specifically, this:

The major issue that's found here is that, for your character to be able to freely and safely do this, would require him to be at least three-hundred-sixty-four years of age. As a result of the Time Rogue War, as well as the timeskip that recently took place, your OC would not have been capable of achieving the feat without having been injured or killed. As of right now, chances are that the settlement that you mentioned is in shambles in our Guild. The two major fixes that can be made here are that you either alter the background or make Kenton's age fit the necessary criteria.
That's all that's wrong in those regards.

-

The next problem is actually a contradiction, on your behalf. This exists here:

Naturally, this would be perfectly fine. There is no problem here. However, upon scrolling down to the section of Bankai for your character, I encountered this:

I feel that there's no further explanation necessary, other than the fact that your character would have needed to have acquired Bankai to be able to sustain a scar prior to first activating it. The more preferable option here is that you simply either remove the scar in entirety, to be later attained during role-play, or change the reasoning for its existence.
That's all, here. Moving on.

-

The next couple of issues are in the Bankai, itself. I'll start with the first, appearing chronologically.

There are two problems with this ability. The more significant of these being the fact that this technique is very overpowered, and with little restriction. Losing three quarters of a character's Reiatsu is quite depleting, however in relativity to the intensity of this ability, it does not amount to much of anything. I suggest that if you would like to keep this technique, make the drawback riskier.

Moving on to the systematic functionality of this ability, however, there are more difficulties that are to be found.
The most major of these being the fact that it would require your character to be capable of manipulating electromagnetism, as well as the strong interaction, to accomplish this feat. While possessing dominion of electricity would be one step in achieving this, it is not quite the same as electromagnetism, which, relatively, is very different, being one of the four fundamental forces of nature, alongside the strong interaction. You could, yes, electrically charge the surrounding area, but because your Zanpakutou only controls electricity, you would be incapable of actually tearing atoms apart. The Law of Conservation of Energy also states that you cannot turn these atoms into "nothing".

If you desire to have it retain the same basic effect, I suggest that you merely state that the current transfer is immense, to the point that the electricity does something such as killing cells upon contact, which electricity is capable of accomplishing. Keep in mind that the lethal current is approximately twenty milliamperes.

-

The next problem is also found in the Bankai, being your OC's last ability.

The difficulty here is similar to the previous, in that your character is incapable of accomplishing this with only manipulation of electricity. Essentially, the reasoning is precisely the same as the last. Because Kenton cannot control electromagnetism nor the strong interaction, he can do nothing in regards to the interaction of atoms.

-

The final problem with your profile is the custom Kidou that you created.

This Hadou is simply overpowered, and I haven't much else to say. You might like to tone down its capability extensively, especially due to how close-range it is. For any normal person, this may also electrocute the user. It honestly seems more like a Shikai ability than a Kidou, simply because of this.
I also suggest that you change your wording. The amount of voltage is not what injures a person. It is, in fact, the transferred current. This ability would not do what you want it to do with its current use of terminology, because of this. Your OC could strike a target with five thousand volts, but due to the fact that you don't specify, there's the possibility that your character is only transferring .0000000000000000001 milliamperes, which would hardly injure any entity.

Alright, there's only one concern that I have before I can fully approve this profile.

I recommend that you make it so that the targets are severely burnt, but not to the extent that they turn into dust as a result. Perhaps immediate contact can cause fourth degree burns. Of course, with an extended interval, damage would increase.
Also, instead of destroying any object nearby, I suggest that you leave the wording vague in that the barrier breaks, and releases its electricity uncontrollably into the immediate environment, due to lack of manipulation. Hypothetically, this could cause anything between a second to fourth degree burn, depending on the potency of the electricity. Again, this is not definite, and there still remains the variable that is time.

Seeing as that could potentially alter the entirety of the Bankai's capabilities, it would be best that it remain same.