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Posted: Sun Jun 23, 2013 8:10 pm
Judgement day has come to pass but not a soul to tell of it. All are condemned. The angels of wrath have come to rain Holy fire down on all. Demons and reapers are burned, eyes gorged out and throats ripped out. The hearts ripped out and fed to the pure of heart so that they may burn too. No one , no thing shall be spared from Dante's Inferno. The smell of burning flesh shall please the gods. The angels spare no one. Their wings spread the rain and their hearts clean the past. They weave false faces to the dead, to "free" them. Snuff out the unclean and pure, and watch in fear as the demons fall and the angels win. The screams echo off crumbling walls and the world sighs as all goes quiet. And time goes straight again. The nightmare of a demon, no more tortured souls to eat and a world ruled by Holy Fire. As the world spins back to normal filled with death and torture. What better way to celebrate the pain, than an un-pure soul. For there is nothing better then the look of pure pain and suffering in their eyes. And that is exactly what the demon did. He snuffed out an unclean soul. So who is truly evil? The one who kills for fun? Or the one who kills all? Which is the lesser of two evils?
So? Thoughts? Not one of my best but i wanted to see what people though.
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Posted: Thu Aug 15, 2013 8:37 am
"Demons and reapers are burned, eyes gorged out and throats ripped out. The hearts ripped out and fed to the pure of heart so that they may burn too." I think it would be best if you substituted one of those "ripped" for something else.
I liked it but I believe it can flow better.
"So who is truly evil? The one who kills for fun? Or the one who kills all? Which is the lesser of two evils?" That was my favorite part c:
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Posted: Thu Aug 15, 2013 9:10 am
Thanks I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
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