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 Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 8:53 am
What Do You Look Like: 
What Were You Named: Death's Knight
Do You Have Another Name: Drake
How Old Are You: 150
What Are You: Draconian
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What Is The Color Of Your Eyes: Change from, blue, green, red, and gold
How Tall Are You: 7 feet tall without armor
How Much Do You Weigh: 168 pounds without armor
What Is Your Job: Hero
Where Did You Live: Unknown
Do You Have Any Family: No
Do You Have Any Pets: None
What Are Your Favorite Things: Helping people, slaying monsters, hanging out with Prophet
What Are Your Least Favorite Things: Monsters, evil people, stuff like that.
What Type Of Weapon(s) Do You Use: Shield with a cross on the front, a large sword, and a bow and arrows
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What Do You Like: Females.
What Of Your Past: Well, I'll tell you about myself. So, I'm called Death's Knight. Don't let the cross and colors fool you. I am a killing machine. But, I'm a Hero, so, I kill evil things. As for what I do when I'm not killing things. Don't have a family, but, I do have Prophet. We're like Knights in shining armor. Well, I am, anyway. As for my past, you'll have to ask my friends that are dead with that, because I don't really have good memory. I do remember most things though. I kill Thieves, monsters, and other evil thing in many ways, accidents, battle.That's just what I do. And that's my job description too, I kill things for honor. Other than that, I don't know if I could get another job. As for the rest of my past, let's just say that I'm a killer for a reason. I was raised by humans. I lived with humans. One day, a man killed my 'Mom' and 'Dad'. After that, this armor crash lands infront of my house. So, I took it, and put it on, then, I meet King Owen. He's kind of a pain once you meet him, but, you get used to him after awhile. So, that's all I can really say for me. As for how Prophet and I met, that's a different story. While in battle, I saw a armored man being surrounded. Behind him, two children. They were Draconian. So, I stepped in to stop the fight. I have never in my life seen so much anger for one species. As you know, a Draconian is part human and part dragon. So, one thing led to another, and the armored man helped me fight off the humans and hunters. I ended making a friend that day. After the battle was done, he said his name was Prophet. That's how we met.
What Are You Able To Do: Control electricity
What Is Your Song: (Theme/Optional)
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Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 4:47 pm
I... don't be thinkin so.
Death isn't a god that needs another to 'help' him make souls. People die plentiful without this guys help. On the flip side, death understands the importance of life also, which is why he reaps souls in the first place. Your character actually conflicts with a reapers belief system. They believe that souls are taken to the under world for judgement so that they can find their own world that fits their consequences of life. Effectively bringing them to the under world. They do that so the dead don't disrupt life. They don't need you running a muck and killing people for no good reason. Death is a neutral force, only stepping in when called upon by natural forces. Other than that, they don't go about killing people. (I could use this character completely... but I don't think you want me too.)
As for a god? Your far to young to be a god. Also to consider a Dragon as a 'pet' is a joke to it's kind. Dragons are companions at the very least. They don't want to be downgraded to 'pet'. You also don't even mention a giant snake in your back ground...
Also nobody has permission to be a god outside the captains. Revise this...
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Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 6:01 pm
godofwar1337 I... don't be thinkin so. Death isn't a god that needs another to 'help' him make souls. People die plentiful without this guys help. On the flip side, death understands the importance of life also, which is why he reaps souls in the first place. Your character actually conflicts with a reapers belief system. They believe that souls are taken to the under world for judgement so that they can find their own world that fits their consequences of life. Effectively bringing them to the under world. They do that so the dead don't disrupt life. They don't need you running a muck and killing people for no good reason. Death is a neutral force, only stepping in when called upon by natural forces. Other than that, they don't go about killing people. (I could use this character completely... but I don't think you want me too.) As for a god? Your far to young to be a god. Also to consider a Dragon as a 'pet' is a joke to it's kind. Dragons are companions at the very least. They don't want to be downgraded to 'pet'. You also don't even mention a giant snake in your back ground... Also nobody has permission to be a god outside the captains. Revise this... I asked the captain If I could have one, and he technically said yes, but, I have to be crew. Oh, and I fixed the errors. Anything else?
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Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 6:19 pm
"I kill 'people' in many ways, accidents, battle, daily routine. That's just what I do. And that's my job description too, I kill things for honor and wisdom."
'people' need to be changed to something else. As well as your methods. As at this point, I doubt your working for the king in a vigilante fashion.
Change that to maybe: Criminals, monsters, bandits, and rogue wizards.
and just leave your methods out of it, as I doubt your going to be killing any of them by accident or by a daily routine.
Also control over shadows and electricity is imbalanced. As they both can attack against anyone, and defend against anyone instantly. Pick one or the other, or something else. We do have characters with more controls than that, but they have limitations or they require another person to reach their full potential.
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Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 8:00 pm
godofwar1337 "I kill 'people' in many ways, accidents, battle, daily routine. That's just what I do. And that's my job description too, I kill things for honor and wisdom." 'people' need to be changed to something else. As well as your methods. As at this point, I doubt your working for the king in a vigilante fashion. Change that to maybe: Criminals, monsters, bandits, and rogue wizards. and just leave your methods out of it, as I doubt your going to be killing any of them by accident or by a daily routine. Also control over shadows and electricity is imbalanced. As they both can attack against anyone, and defend against anyone instantly. Pick one or the other, or something else. We do have characters with more controls than that, but they have limitations or they require another person to reach their full potential. Alright, fixed that. Any more errors?
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Posted: Fri Jun 07, 2013 8:20 pm
I Approve of this character.
However in the future, try not to use a bright color... hurts the eyes when I have to squient to read it. Also i'd like to see you make a character that isn't relevant to prophet as many of them have come to do so. This last bit, is just a thought. You don't have to abide by it by any means.
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