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Notes:
1. done in 2008
2. enjoy!


The tiger...
It is the great orange striped cat,
Great is the roar that emerges from its mouth...
Elegant is its way of walking...
Rare is the beauty of it in the wild...

tigers are awesome.

now that i've gotten that out of the way, the poem: you mention the obvious (great orange striped cat; roar from its mouth) and state the abstract truth (elegant way of walking; rare beauty in the wild) but you never develop any emotion or paint a description of it. i suggest you take a page out of William Blake's masterpiece from Songs of Experience from the poem "The Tyger" and apply something similar. don't focus on the rhythm or the rhyme; concentrate on how the poem describes the tiger's features and try to see if you can do the same.

another thing you might want to apply is the symbolism that the tiger is lucifer. i say this because Blake's poem does it in such a subtle manner that it's hard to explain. but this is just a suggestion and you may do as you please.

think about what purpose your poem should have; if you don't want it to express emotion; i'm just trying to help your poem be effective in what you're trying to express.