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DeadPool91

PostPosted: Mon Apr 15, 2013 3:42 pm


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How long have you been in the guild? I just recently joined

How active are you in the guild? I can be very active meaning I can be on every day.

Why do you want to hold the rank of Captain? I love the feeling of holding a high rank and power. I'm not saying that I would abuse it, I just mean that being able to be in such a high rank gives me a reason to be a part of something great such as the 13 Gotei. I am also reliable, a very understanding guy, and easy to get along with.

Why do you think you will do well as a Captain? Well first off I am pretty active and I can help as much as possible on what you will need. Like the last question I answered, I stated that I am reliable which means whatever task you give me I can do right away. I believe that I am also a born leader so I can keep my squad in tip top shape.

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You lead a raid to Hueco Mundo to recover a lost member of your squad, who is currently under attack.

Sitting silently in the ninth division barracks, Levithan Sato was drinking tea with his Lieutenant Takun Takarashi. He took a sip of his jasmine tea and setting it down afterwards. With a loud sigh, he turned to look out the door "we must start to prepare to invade Hueco Mundo" he said to his Lieutenant in a distressed tone. Once his Lieutenant left to get the squad ready for a raid to recover one of their members back, Levithan stood up and stretched. He walked over to his table and stared at all the magazines that him and his men all published. Smiling at this and thinking back when those times were not as rough as it is now. Suddenly his Lieutenant walked in and informed him that the squad is ready. Levithan nodded not looking or turning to see his Lieutenant "I'll be there in a second" he said calmly. Looking up towards the ceiling, his eyes started to roll back and only white could be seen. His hands began to raise towards the sky and with a shout his eyes returned back to normal, but this time his pupils becoming bright red. With that done and over with, he started to jump and down while cracking his neck and stretching his arms more. Once his blood was flowing, he turned to face the door where his Lieutenant came in and rushed towards it, making his way out to his squad.

Seeing his squad up and ready, he shouted towards them "ARE YOU READY!!?" and with a response of "YES WE ARE!" the captain grinned "we are to raid Hueco Mundo and bring back our man that is being under attacked by thousands of Hollows.. CAN WE DO IT!?" he shouts while preparing his men for a very dangerous battle "YES WE CAN!" they respond back to him "let's move out!" he raises his hand towards the sky and marches out.

Arriving at Hueco Mundo, they witness many hollows attacking several of their squad members. They wait for further instructions before advancing. Waiting for several minutes, Levithan calmly raises his hand "this is it men.. we either die here or leave victorious and also, whoever kills the most hollows won't have bathroom duty for a month" Levithan said with a grin and knowing very well that his men are not too fond of bathroom duty which made them even more pumped up "YOU EITHER KILL OR BE KILLED, NOTHING ELSE! GOOOOOO!!" and with that every squad member in Division nine moved towards the fight. Huge hollows came from different areas of Hueco Mundo to stop Division nine from rescuing the other members of the squad. The Captain noticed right away and directed his Lieutenant "Takun! Take the left flank and divert the hollows away. I'll take the right and rescue the lost members" he directed instructions towards his Lieutenant and with a simple nod the Lieutenant was on his way with the other squad members. Leviathan took the rest of the group and rushed towards the hollows that were cornering the men that they came to rescue. Leviathan jumped in the air to use Dark wave at the hollows. While he was distracting the hollows, the members that came with him went to rescue the lost members. By taking down hollows one at a time, more and more hollows were ganging up on him. His men saw how much were cornering him and tried to save him, but he shouted towards them "rescue the men and head back! Go Now!" he ordered them while cutting down each hollow. The division nine didn't know what to do, but the Lieutenant knew that they had to follow orders which he led them away back to the portal. Once Leviathan knew they got away, he summoned his zanpakuto and made him target his Lieutenant. When the spirit reached the Lieutenant, Leviathan used 'Calling of the dark moon' making the sky pitch black. Levi could sense his spirit and rushed towards where his spirit is at. Once reaching the location, he calls back his spirit making the sky turn back to normal. "let's head back" he told his squad while leading the rest of the way back to Soul Society.
PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 2:18 pm


In my Opinion not to sound like little B**** buut I say good emotions and feeling, but you really didn't give action to your character. You gave us a view on what your squad did which not much was seen except the battle was won. You never explained how it was won, nor how did you character as a captain in handling the situation. So in my opinion I would say Denied unless another Mod says different.



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DeadPool91

PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 4:02 pm


Axzaki Heroki
In my Opinion not to sound like little B**** buut I say good emotions and feeling, but you really didn't give action to your character. You gave us a view on what your squad did which not much was seen except the battle was won. You never explained how it was won, nor how did you character as a captain in handling the situation. So in my opinion I would say Denied unless another Mod says different.


I understand what you mean. I apologize for that. Could I possibly edit it to make it to your expectation?
PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 4:35 pm


Axzaki Heroki

I have re-edited. Hopefully it's to your expectation. ^^

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 6:00 pm


I guess this will do on my end, though I say it still could be better but I see potential so I'll say Approve unless another Mods says different.

PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 6:15 pm


Axzaki Heroki
I guess this will do on my end, though I say it still could be better but I see potential so I'll say Approve unless another Mods says different.


Thank you! ^^ I promise I'll improve ^_^

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 17, 2013 6:39 pm


DeadPool91
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I guess this will do on my end, though I say it still could be better but I see potential so I'll say Approve unless another Mods says different.


Thank you! ^^ I promise I'll improve ^_^


You are welcome and good luck on your quest.
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