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kona_chan159

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Posted: Mon Feb 04, 2013 6:21 pm

this is something i threw together o-o i still need to do work on it heart
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Don't judge me if you cant handle half of what ive delt with
There's a reason why I do the things i do
There's a reason i am who i am
There is a reason to me
But maybe not to you
But in the end
I never did it to impress you

Posted: Wed Feb 06, 2013 7:59 am

There is good rhythm in your poem, which is something I can appreciate. It gives your words strength.

I do wish it was a bit longer maybe hinting more at your struggles so that it doesn't come off so aggressively. Strong and self assured versus angry, you know what I mean? I'm sure a lot of people can relate to your words, I know I can.

Keep it up mrgreen

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kona_chan159

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Posted: Wed Feb 06, 2013 12:01 pm

Thanks biggrin 3nodding

ValkaEmirin

There is good rhythm in your poem, which is something I can appreciate. It gives your words strength.

I do wish it was a bit longer maybe hinting more at your struggles so that it doesn't come off so aggressively. Strong and self assured versus angry, you know what I mean? I'm sure a lot of people can relate to your words, I know I can.

Keep it up mrgreen

Posted: Thu Feb 07, 2013 2:47 pm

The only thing wrong was that there was not more of it to read. I really liked it and can relate.

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