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 Posted: Thu Jan 24, 2013 4:55 pm
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Posted: Thu Jan 24, 2013 5:19 pm
x Translate any Japanese words into Spanish. I'd like to keep the Spanish motif within the espada.
x There should be a sort of cool down phase to the shape shifting ability. For instance, it takes one post to transform completely, and you can't shift back for one post after that. It's just a little thing to help keep things under control.
x I suggest making some abilities more powerful in either form. For instance, Wrath of the Nine Tails should be more powerful in beast form, but Eclipse is more powerful in the human form. That way, it displays the different pros and cons of the forms.
x I don't like the wording in the ability section of the segunda Etapa. You make a point of saying that it is near unmatched in both speed, strength, and defense.
That is way to many things to just be good at. I'd say you have levels that are unprecedented in a single espada, but I wouldn't go so far as to actually say that it is nearly unmatched. It's just wrong.
After all, other cells have their specialities, and the orden is meant to be the one to shape them up. You are one of the stronger espada, but you dot blow these people out of the water.
x All of your techniques need more information, pertaining as to range, and the effects if the attack can make contact with an enemy. Adding a cool down or two would definitely help.
Quote me when you are finished, not when you begin working on it.
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Posted: Thu Jan 24, 2013 6:05 pm
Ok, I sorted out most of the information but I would like to know what do you mean by effects if the attack can make contact with an enemy the most part all the attacks are reiatsu based so they're all basically just strong energy attacks, so they don't really have an effect aside from really strong damage YummyBiscuits x All of your techniques need more information, pertaining as to range, and the effects if the attack can make contact with an enemy. Adding a cool down or two would definitely help. Quote me when you are finished, not when you begin working on it.
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Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2013 3:47 am
Done YummyBiscuits
x Translate any Japanese words into Spanish. I'd like to keep the Spanish motif within the espada.
x There should be a sort of cool down phase to the shape shifting ability. For instance, it takes one post to transform completely, and you can't shift back for one post after that. It's just a little thing to help keep things under control.
x I suggest making some abilities more powerful in either form. For instance, Wrath of the Nine Tails should be more powerful in beast form, but Eclipse is more powerful in the human form. That way, it displays the different pros and cons of the forms.
x I don't like the wording in the ability section of the segunda Etapa. You make a point of saying that it is near unmatched in both speed, strength, and defense.
That is way to many things to just be good at. I'd say you have levels that are unprecedented in a single espada, but I wouldn't go so far as to actually say that it is nearly unmatched. It's just wrong.
After all, other cells have their specialities, and the orden is meant to be the one to shape them up. You are one of the stronger espada, but you dot blow these people out of the water.
x All of your techniques need more information, pertaining as to range, and the effects if the attack can make contact with an enemy. Adding a cool down or two would definitely help.
Quote me when you are finished, not when you begin working on it.
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Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2013 5:35 am
x the wording in both fox fire and thousand year curse techniques are way off. You can state they would deal large amounts of damage, but we can. To have insta kill attacks. That's simply just not how things work.
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Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2013 12:46 pm
YummyBiscuits x the wording in both fox fire and thousand year curse techniques are way off. You can state they would deal large amounts of damage, but we can. To have insta kill attacks. That's simply just not how things work. I changed it so that fox fire when shot the same post as large amount of damage and thousand year curse to do a substantial amount, if that would work
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Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2013 1:02 pm
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