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 Posted: Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:01 am
Name: Ruan Ruan (阮阮) Qiuyue (秋月)
Nickname: Qiu-er, Yue-er
Age: 20
Birthday: 2nd June
Sign: Gemini
Gemstone: Pearl
Blood Type: AB+
Fav. Food: Chilli crab
Hated Food: Sea cucumber
School: Destiny City University, majoring in Music
Hobbies:
Playing the piano
Having taken formal lessons in playing the piano since the age of 5, Qiuyue attained Grade 8 when she was 15 but was made to give it up shortly thereafter in order to concentrate on her pop idol career. It is her aspiration to become a professional pianist in the future and she has been working hard on her school curriculum as well as practising whenever she can ever since her move to Destiny City in order to make that come true. She is working on developing a natural inclination to play the piano by ear and will listen mostly to classical pieces, maybe an occasional video game or movie soundtrack that has caught her eye at the local music store or on the Internet when she feels up to trying something different. She currently works as a part-time pianist at a hotel bar on Saturday nights but is not adverse to invitations to play the piano for various events like weddings and parties so long as these don't clash with anything on her schedule. She would otherwise usually hole herself up at home or in the university Music Room to practise for long hours on the piano.
Zumba
One of the things that Qiuyue misses from her days as a pop idol is the dancing. Something that she hardly has time to pursue actively nowadays in view of the amount of effort she has to put in on the piano in order to realize her own future aspiration. A Columbian dance fitness program that Qiuyue has been making do with for the past year for the upbeat Latin music and the dancing, Zumba is the sole reason that will make her step into the gym twice a week in addition to being a great and fun way for her to stay fit.
Charm making
Something that Qiuyue sets aside time for on Sunday mornings and afternoons after a long night at her part time job. What started out initially as a simple past time she could indulge in on top of being a source of personalized gifts for her close friends, eventually became an alternative minor source of income when she sells them online to interested parties. She uses coloured clay and is able to make colourful rudimentary charms for handphones and keychains.
Virtues:
Amiable
No stranger to social gatherings with the mass media interviews and meet-and-greet sessions with her fans back when she was a pop idol, Qiuyue has become accustomed to maintaining her image in line with what others want to see, tucking her personal thoughts and feelings into a corner of her mind in favour of a sunny disposition. Although she doesn't have to do this anymore now that she has a new identity, she has a tendency to lapse into the habit, making her an approachable and pleasant person to hang around with.
Courageous
Qiuyue does not fear anything in life other than thunder and lightning. Things that go bump in the middle of the night, cemeteries, horror movies, pain, creepy crawlies. She can face all that with a straight face and doesn't get cold feet over them. She is the type who will willingly talk a friend through facing a fear, even do whatever is necessary in order to prove that there really was nothing to be afraid of in the first place. Not one who will back down from a challenge, Qiuyue is always ready to jump into the fray of things, especially if it involves her friends and dark mirror court members. Even get her hands dirty if necessary. She tends to get anxious, moody and clingy whenever there is thunder and lightning involved and this stems from the memory that it was on a long and stormy night when her parents were involved in a major car crash that took them both permanently away from her life.
Diligent
Once Qiuyue has her mind set on something, she will work relentlessly at it until she achieves whatever she wants eventually. Even more so if it is something she personally desires or one that she perceives as being important to her friends and 'family'. She does not cut corners and the amount of effort and due care with which she had put into the process can usually be seen when she subsequently unveils the end result.
Flaws:
Blaming Others
Whenever something goes wrong, Qiuyue has a habit of pointing the finger at and blaming the circumstances or other people for it. No matter what happens, it is never ever her fault in her eyes. She strongly believes that so long as she has put in her best effort in something, whatever undesirable outcomes that occur subsequently has to be a result of other factors rather than her own deficiencies. This is mainly because she was brought up in an environment in which failure or making mistakes are unacceptable outcomes and therefore, is afraid of assuming responsibility and having to cope with them when such situations present themselves.
Messy Messy
Everything around Qiuyue is literally a mess, from the rented apartment she stays alone in right up to her tendency to make a mess wherever she goes, be it a friend's house or in public. The household chores are done only on an absolutely necessary basis when she runs out of clean plates and clothes. Things are left all over the place instead of returned to their designated locations and spilt food/water are left as they are, attracting common household pests and posing potential health hazards in the form of slips or falls. It is not uncommon for her to be unable to find her things and she has absolutely no qualms at all with wearing previously worn stinky clothes on days when she needs to head out but has ran out of clean clothes.
Self-Centered
Whatever Qiuyue does, it is always done in a way that would cater to her own interests first and foremost, with her 'family' and friends coming in second and third respectively. She is like this because of the circumstances in which she was brought up by her foster mother, having been taught that if she wanted something so hard then she must do whatever is necessary so as to secure it. Even to the extent of tossing aside her friends and 'family' for it was only she herself that matters at the end of the day. She is not adverse to working in a team with other people but it is this aspect of her that will make her prone to conflicts with the other members of the team when they subsequently realize where her priorities lie.
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Almond-shaped brown eyes with long lashes
Hair: Long reddish brown hair that spans down to mid-back and is usually tied in 2 loose pigtail braids (Reference: x, x)
Face: Oval-shaped face
Clothes: A one shoulder figure hugging party dress like this with heels similar to this (colours to be decided by artist and please feel free to simplify the dress design ^^)
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Posted: Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:02 am
Senshi: Sailor Elnath, Dark Mirror Senshi of Hair
Challenge: I'll give you a really bad hair day!
Fuku Colour: (Reference: Something similar to this or this)
Main Color: Red
Secondary Color: Gold
Fuku:
Collar -- Red with one line
Bow -- A bow that starts out like this then becomes more elaborate like this as she upgrades, the one behind is bigger in size with 2 long red sashes attached to it
Bodice -- A black corset bodice with gold trimming somewhat like this and a red transparent overlay
Sleeves -- Nope
Brooch -- A simple star shape initially then becomes something like this later on
Bottoms -- Tiered pleated school girl skirt like this
Tiara -- Beaded like this or similar to the one here
Choker -- This with a red jewel
Shoes -- Knee high boots with heels
Gloves -- Black with gold trimming along length of forearm initially then lengthened in future stages to the length and style as in this, fingerless
Accessories -- Nope but feel free to add anything that might fit with the theme~ =3
Attacks:
Sailor Scout Attack: Tangling Tresses
Elnath is able to alter the properties of her hair and extend its length at will. With this attack, Elnath will plunge her hair into the ground only to have it emerge anywhere within a 4 feet radius around her when it will wrap tightly around up to 2 targets of her choice and anchor them to the ground in order to hamper their movement. Despite the strengthened nature of her hair, it remains susceptible to fire and separate body parts (arm, leg) from the same person will count as separate targets. Her hair can't be cut but higher staged powered characters (eternal senshis, generals, knights) will be able to tear through it, rendering it only effective for 5 seconds at most. This ability lasts for 10 seconds and can be used up to 3 times per battle with a cooldown period of 1 minute.
Super Sailor Scout Attack: Split Ends
An upgraded version of Elnath's previous attack with the ends of her hair forming sharp edges through which she could hurt her targets with (sensation of it cutting into the skin). She can only attack up to 2 targets within a 4 feet radius around her with the ability lasting for 10 seconds. It can be used up to 3 times per battle with a cooldown period of 1 minute.
Eternal Sailor Attack: Elnath's Malice
An area of effect attack. Elnath uses her hair to form a large ball that is 6 feet in diameter which she can directly hurl (think like a catapult) anywhere within an 8 feet radius around her to knock back her enemies for 3 feet. This attack requires her to remain immobile and focused for 5 seconds prior to its use and has a cooldown period of 2 minutes. The ball of hair will disappear upon impact with its intended target(s) and this ability can only be used twice per battle.
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Posted: Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:04 am
Significant Life Events
~ Orphaned at the age of 4 when both parents died in a major car accident on Christmas
~ Adopted at 5 by her foster mother Yulan, a retired songstress who intended to groom her into an idol - taught to sing, dance and play the piano
~ Made her debut as a Chinese pop idol at 15 when she won the idol competition in Taiwan
- With a successful Chinese pop idol career based in Taiwan, she was easily recognizable by most adolescents and young adults on the streets in her own country. A vast majority of people in other countries (especially non-Chinese speaking ones) would not know who she was nor heard of her name, save for the occasional individual with an ardent interest in the Chinese pop industry. It was deemed that it would be in her best career interest to make herself known in other countries, hence the organization of various promotion events first in the Asia region and then to foreign countries like Destiny City (which was the very first stop and where she decided to attempt her escape after months of planning)
~ Was happy initially since singing and dancing made her and her fans happy but subsequently came to the realization a year and a half later that the life of an idol was probably not for her since she couldn't be her true self nor do the things she wanted to do without considering the possible detrimental consequences they might have on her idol image
~ Finally saved enough to run away at 19 after a promotion event held in Destiny City. Her foster mother and manager lodged a police report on her 'sudden disappearance' and had them on a look out for her, but no large scale campaigns were embarked upon to hunt her down as those could lead to detrimental consequences to her career with the possibly bad publicity
- Despite having come up with a plan to run away and remembering to take her passport with her, she eventually misplaced it as a result of both her own carelessness and messy trait and has been keeping a low profile since until Ares found her and offered a chance to start life afresh as a member of the DMC with a new civilian identity
Why the DMC?
When the DMC approached Ruan Ruan with the promise of a ticket to a new life afresh with a new family who would welcome her with open arms, it was akin to a dream coming true for the Taiwanese who abandoned her Chinese pop idol music career and has been barely getting by on her own on her own for the past one month. Reborn as Quiyue, she would answer to no one but herself and her new family, and she would fight tooth and nail to defend it from those who would seek to threaten and destroy it.
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Posted: Wed Jan 09, 2013 8:01 pm
Hey Gwing! Quiyue looks like a really interesting character, so I'm glad to have been able to nab her for crit! I'm going to apologize in advance for the wall of text, hopefully some of it will be helpful!
Her hobbies, virtues and all but one flaw look spectacular to me! For Messy Messy, though, I had just a few things to ask about. I feel like " it is not uncommon to find her flitting from one task to another just because she suddenly feels up to doing something else entirely" kind of contradicts with her diligent virtue, just because I got the impression that she was the sort to try her hardest to complete a task/stick through to the end. Additionally, I think the last line ("She manages to get everything done…people around her") doesn’t quite fit here; I feel like this isn't talking about her being messy, but more about her getting tasks done. Instead of a sentence like that, I think the trait might better be expanded on by discussing how being messy is negative—is she unorganized and can't find things? Is her mess harmful (ie, would she make herself sick? Or has she hurt herself in her mess? Friends are embarrassed to come over because of the state of her environment? Does she embarrass her friends by leaving trash all over the place when they are out in public?).
Other than that I think her hobbies and traits look good! One thing I would like to ask about for her civilian life stems from her significant life events. While you are more than welcome to play a character who has been orphaned and adopted (as these are fairly believable!) I'm not totally sure how her being a Chiense pop idol is acceptable. So I'd just like to get some more information to make sure that this is a profile I'd be comfortable trial stamping! Primarily, what I'd like to know is how famous do you intend her to be? In her home country, would she be easily recognizable on the streets? And would she have a lot of foreign fans, as well? I think you could definitely play her as having been a Chinese pop idol, however this is a far more glamorous lifestyle than many characters in the shop, and while I know you intend for this to be a life she is leaving behind, it still warrants a little scrutiny! I was hoping you could maybe expand more on this, and if things need tweaking, I could work with you to make it shop appropriate!
Additionally, there is one other significant life event—that she ran away after a promotion event in Destiny City. I am just wondering what sort of lengths she would have had to go through in order to do this? She would have been a foreigner, and if she ran away, this would make her an illegal immigrant. Would there have been large campaigns to find her that she managed to hide from? Did she have a fake ID that allowed her to buy a house/car/get a job—anything she needed in order to survive?
While this sort of thing isn't really related to profile and is more related to plots, an alternative suggestion to avoid the issue of how she survived in a foreign country with only herself for a year, maybe Ares could instead come across her being miserable just after her promotion event while she was by herself? If living on her own for that year is pivotal to her history though, we can try and work that out, too!
One final thing to note, just for clarification, is that in order for her to lose her identity as Ruan Ruan and attain the glamour that would allow her to be reborn as Quiyue, her civilian identity as Ruan Ruan will need to be compromised. This means that, in being awakened as a Dark Mirror Senshi, someone from order (or a civilian who might be able to identify her) would need to be present. There are a number of plots would could incorporate someone else in her awakening [maybe a senshi attempts to intervene/stop Ares or something—or maybe even an order cat is attempting to awaken Ruan Ruan but Ares steps in (since Ares needs a cat's help to identify if someone can be awakened as a senshi)]. There are a lot of possibilities, so the options are endless! I just wanted let you know so you could plan for that when you're working on getting her awakened!
That in mind though, her civilian looks good! For her powered, there are only a few things to go over—starting with her name. Unfortunately, I don't think Zosma is available as a senshi name since both it and Duhr are the traditional names for Delta Leonis and we already have a Senshi named Duhr. The sphere looks good, though!
Her outfit might need some tweaks to fit with the DMC guidelines [ie, just to make sure she has the transparent overlay, the metallic bracers, sailor collar and sleeves detached from her bodice], but mostly it looks good to me!
For her attacks:
Sailor Scout Attack: Tangling Tresses
This attack looks pretty good! The raidus, duration, number of usages and number of targets sound very reasonable and fair to me! My only question is, if her hair is strengthened but not invincible, does this mean it can be cut? And how strong would someone have to be in order to tear it? [ie, would an eternal senshi or knight be able to tear her hair if she casts this as a basic senshi?] And, what happens if her hair does get damaged during this attack—does it reflect when it returns to normal length or is it only the extra length of hair that is damaged?
Super Sailor Scout Attack: Split Ends
I'm hesitant to approve the serrated edges part of this attack since this could wind up being very deadly. If her hair severed a vein or artery, it's possible for someone to bleed out. Typically, magic attacks are best if they don't leave any effects after a battle, so I would recommend swapping the serrated edges to maybe it feels like the hair is cutting into their skin? It could be just as painful to the target, however wouldn't cause any long term effects and there is no risk of death.
Eternal Sailor Attack: Zosma's Malice
I have a few questions about this attack! Now, for this attack, her hair grows to form a large spiked ball? There might be the same issue with the serrated edges, so would a normal 'ball' work? I assume it could knock the breath out of someone, but it probably shouldn't be strong enough to knock someone's head off if it hit them. Also, you say that she must remain immobile and focused for fifteen seconds prior to its use, however how long does the attack actually last? When she is throwing the hair, I mean. And, does she swing it around in a circle [like a hurricane of hair around her?] or does she have the ability to hurl the hair at an opponent?
Other than that, she looks good to me! I'm sorry for giving you this wall of text! If you have questions, concerns or make any changes, give me a quote and I'll be back as soon as possible!
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, 2013 7:52 am
Hi Kyu! Thank you so much for going through Qiuyue's profile and offering your opinion on what needs to be tweaked and how I could go about it. No worries about the wall of text though since it certainly did give me quite a bit to think about that I probably should have done so prior in order to make your job easier. ^^ I've expanded on her Messy Messy trait with some of the pointers you have suggested so I hope that it looks better now without the contradictions. Also elaborated on her significant life events with the requested details so hopefully that all makes sense and is acceptable now. I've shortened the time period from her running away to Ares coming across her from 1 year to 1 month. I have to admit that while I don't have any concrete plots with anyone yet with regards to her losing her identity as Ruan Ruan, I am hoping to possibly have someone take pity on her and take her in for at least a week or two prior to Ares finding her and making her an offer to get her out of her predicament. I might also have a plot in mind for Ruan Ruan to have a long distance childhood pen pal in Destiny City whom she will attempt to locate later on as Qiuyue, but I'll have to see if anyone is keen to take me up on that or leave it as a NPC to be mentioned in her introspective solos. ^^; Switched her powered name to Elnah so here's hoping that that'll be fine! Also tweaked her attacks as suggested. If her hair ever gets damaged during the course of using her attacks, it is only the extra length of hair that is damaged so her own hair will not reflect the damage at all when it reverts subsequently. I'm absolutely open to working with the artist in order to make her outfit more in line with the DMC guidelines (it might just be me but I really don't recall coming across any guidelines on the DMC outfits anywhere so thanks a lot for mentioning all that and making it clearer... =3) so yeah, I think that that should be about it for now. Please feel free to let me know if there're any other things require more working on and tweaking and I'll get right on it! =)
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Posted: Thu Jan 17, 2013 8:45 pm
It's not just you, don't worry! I don't think we have the DMC outfit guideline listed anywhere at present, so you haven't missed anything!
The edits you made to Messy Messy are perfect and I think the changes to her attacks clarify my concerns! I am comfortable with the changes you've made to her personal life, but a GM will be in to give the final verdict!
Other than that, I really can't think of anything else to tweak; her profile looks good to me, and it has been a pleasure to go over it! I wish you the best of luck in attaining her! I think she looks like a lot of fun and I'll be very eager to RP with her! If you ever need help working out plots, I'd love to help in any way possible!
I'm going to drop off a trial stamp, and a GM will be in as soon as possible to look over your profile!
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Posted: Fri Jan 18, 2013 7:00 am
Thanks Kyu! ^^ I had a lot of fun creating her and I'll certainly think long and hard on some plots for her so that I can snag a couple of RPs with you when I get her eventually! <333
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2013 7:35 am
I really really LOVE her flaws. heart Those type of people that either feel that nothing is ever their fault or always play the victim are one of my huge pet peeves irl, so it's really kind of neat to see someone actually incorperating that into a character, since it definately is a real life flaw that can easily turn people off. :3
Anyway the character as a whole looks very good. I just have one quick question and one small change that needs to be made.
Question - For the eternal attack what happens to the ball of hair? Does it immediately poof upon impact or will it hang around for a few seconds to continue and roll and/or be manipulated by the enemy or Elnah?
Small change - The growth from regular attack to super attack should really only have one upgrade. Either an added buff (the cutting sensation) or the added length/strength (bigger radius + the extra target) but not really both. So you'll have to choose one or the other to upgrade.
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2013 7:57 am
Hi Iris! ^^ I'm really happy to know that you love her flaws since I do have to admit that this kind of people puts me off in real life too so I'm hoping that I'll be able to pull it off with her subsequently. I have re-worked her abilities as suggested: opting for the additional effect of the cutting sensation for the Super ability and having the ball of hair disappear upon impact with the intended target, so here's hoping that everything looks alright for her now. If not, please feel free to let me know. =3
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2013 8:02 am
Thank you dear!
You're ACCEPTED. Good luck getting her.
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