Writing styles

[The Smoking Robot]

Hi everyone! I know you won't recognize me on this forum, but I'm here to help my friend find people to make suggestions for her book. She's trying to decide between writing styles, like what appeals most to readers and fellow writers. We would really appreciate it if you could take a few moments of your time to look at the different paragraphs and vote on your favorite or add constructive criticism.
Thank you! heart
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kO6vFR2HQc3zmbyf9q20gcwKu6--KLmBtj8JoeBr6M4/edit