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 Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 9:54 am
I wanna write this song
it may come out wrong
but I'm doing it wrong
My pen moves
my mind reels
the brusie on my leg heals
never let a friend kick you
even if they have issues
I have this beat in my head
better hurry before its dead
my dad is still in bed
He works at night
and its not right
he comes home tired
and expired
his job trained him
more like drained him
hes a blue collar guy
Till the day he dies
which might be soon
hes in his room
go to sleep dad
be there
for Bobby or Noah
I'm not the only one now
You're our dad
be one
I'm glad I wrote this song!
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 7:18 pm
a bit confusing at first, but good, notheless. 3nodding
please add apostraphies (spel?) to "hes" and such.
-Sakura
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Posted: Sun Mar 05, 2006 11:39 am
Ritz_Freak I wanna write this song it may come out wrong but I'm doing it wrong My pen moves my mind reels the brusie on my leg heals never let a friend kick you even if they have issues I have this beat in my head better hurry before its dead my dad is still in bed He works at night and its not right he comes home tired and expired his job trained him more like drained him hes a blue collar guy Till the day he dies which might be soon hes in his room go to sleep dad be there for Bobby or Noah I'm not the only one now You're our dad be one I'm glad I wrote this song!
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Posted: Sun Mar 05, 2006 3:54 pm
I wrote this for my dad!!
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Posted: Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:25 pm
interestingly written, good message, i would give it a 7 of 10.
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Posted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 6:01 pm
very sweet. i enjoyed... a bit random, but dads need more credit these days. 3nodding
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