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Sirene Naiads

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 11, 2012 4:15 pm


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Name: Delilah White
Nickname: Dee
Age: 16
Birthday: September 13
Sign: Virgo
Gemstone: Sapphire
Blood Type:B+
Fav. Food: Spinach Salad with berries, chicken, and balsamic vinaigrette
Hated Food: Soda

School: Crystal Academy

Hobbies:
Fashion Design
Scattered around the teenager’s room are hundreds of sketches depicting nothing more than clothes. Dresses from around prom season hide under the desk while seasonal skirts and tops cover her desk. Pinned on Delilah’s wall are her favorites. Themes of color, vivid patterns, and accents of black seem to have become her favorite. Yet she stays away from fur. It brings up too many problems in her mind and people get too animated when they see it.
Piano
Since she was five, Delilah’s mother had the little girl’s fingers moving over the ivories creating ‘beautiful music’. The family’s grand piano has become Delilah’s personal expression allowing her un-judged creativity within the family walls. She would have to say that Frederic Chopin is her favorite composer.
Collecting Cameos
As old as some might be, the cameo is Delilah’s favorite item to collect. The beautiful engravings hold her attention for hours as her family found out when visiting Italy. She adores the pieces she can wear as pendants though most of the pieces she wears as jewelry are costume. The real pieces she keeps in a locked box atop her dresser.

Virtues:
Self-Confident
If there was one thing Deliah’s parents didn’t miss when raising their daughter it was instilling confidence within her being. The girl is fully aware of what she is capable of and trusts in her own talents to the fullest. It allows her to know when she should keep her mouth shut and when she should step in and offer assistance to others. Deliah’s confident nature means that she presents herself to the best of her abilities. With a head looking forward to her future, eyes alive with the possibilities, and a smile she hopes can spread to others, it is rather difficult to tell this little lady that she does not give off an aura of strength.

Hard-Working
People can say that Deliah is many things but lazy isn’t one of them. Dedication to her work and interest is rather higher than normal. She is very good at tuning extra things out and becoming focused on one thing at a time until it is complete. The downside is that she doesn’t multi-task well so if two projects need to be done around the same time, someone better express which is more important because otherwise, she will just pick the one that interests her the most.

Calming
Be it that she has confidence in herself or just the fact she offers a shoulder to cry on, Deliah tends to be a calming presence during troubled times. On a normal day she keeps a rather even temper and offers a soft smile to even those in the hallways and streets. Deliah is one to also offer her shoulder for others to cry on. With a soft word and the appearance that she always has herself together, Deliah becomes the confidant for her friends and young family members.

Flaws:
Vain
Her appearance is the one thing Deliah constantly puts time into. In the morning, she gets up at least an hour before leaving to make sure her hair is done well and her make-up is flawless. Needless to say that her mother has to roll her eyes at the fact her sixteen year old daughter is covering herself in powder and color. Deliah also has the nastly little habit that whenever she passes something large enough to see her reflection (a mirror, a tinted glass window, a spoon) she has to stop and look at herself for a moment. The problem is if she is having a conversation with someone. Then she ends up talking to the mirror.

Proud
For all her self-esteem and hardworking manners, Deliah has over time become a rather proud woman. The result of which is that she does not willingly accept help from others. If she must do so, Deliah has a tendency to hold resentment to both the person who stepped in and towards herself that she couldn’t do something. It makes her feel weak.

Spiteful
Her pride and dedication to both herself and the select few around her results in a deadly combination. Should anyone cause her some sort of pain, Deliah wishes to return it tenfold. This could be from simple annoyances to make the person’s life more difficult to downright deadly thoughts. However, Deliah keeps the dangerous ones in check. She will not kill someone but that won’t stop her from being a witch towards them.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Large Red, Protruding Eyes xXx

Hair:Jet black down to the bottom of her shoulder blades. Bangs are cut so they angle down on the left to her chin. She wears it back in a high pony-tail. xXx in black

Face: Heart shape face with high, thin cheek bones

Clothes: Uniform from Crystal
Outside of school, she is up for the latest fashions
PostPosted: Sun Nov 11, 2012 4:25 pm


Senshi: Sailor Phact, Senshi of Doves

Challenge: Do I Look Harmless?

Fuku Colour:
Main Color: White
Secondary Color: Red

Fuku: (Artist is allowed to play with design. This is just a starting idea. Please feel free to put your own touch on it!))

Collar – White one with a red dove hanging from the center
Bow – On her back and sides are white, see-through fabric done like feathers that go down to her knees.
Bodice – White top that connects to the shorts on her bottom. Sweetheart style neckline trimmed in red.
Sleeves – N/A
Brooch – N/A
Bottoms – White short-shorts. On the back and sides are white, see-through fabric done like feathers that go down to her knees.
Tiara – Red gem in the center that threads out with a pearl thread
Choker – Red chain with a white pearl in center
Shoes – Red flats with ribbon that goes up to her knees. The ribbon fades to white the high up her legs it goes
Gloves – Formal White Gloves
Accessories – Anything?

Random things to give ideas:
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Attacks:

Sailor Scout Attack: Cooing Softly
Bowing her head slightly, Phact begins to release the sounds of a dove’s soft coo. As she lifts her head upward, the white energy form of a dove appears in front of her. The creature leaves her side and flies into the face of her target acting as a distraction.
Duration: 10 Seconds
Use: Twice

Super Sailor Scout Attack: Cooing Whispers
From one dove to two, Phact now summons a pair of energy doves that work together to provide cover for others to get away. They go for the head and eyes.
Duration: 10 Seconds
Use: Once

Eternal Sailor Attack: White Dule
Deliah brings upon her enemy a Dule of rather angry white doves made up of energy. They appear from the gentle movement she makes to summon an orb above her head. From there, they fly towards their target attacking with peak and claws.
Duration: 30Seconds
Use: Once

Sirene Naiads

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Sirene Naiads

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 04, 2012 2:27 pm


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2013 12:15 pm


Before I get started on this crit, I just wanted to know if you had her Civ side stamped yet since you have art? I don't wanna crit both halves if you're good to go on her civ!

Sirene Naiads

Sylent Nyte
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Sirene Naiads

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PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2013 3:57 pm


Sylent Nyte

No Ma'am.
I won her art from the Halloween contest Raffle but nothing has been approved
PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2013 4:47 pm


Her entire civilian side is perfect! That's 100% good to go imo.

However! For her Senshi powers, I feel that they are way to close to Sailor Grus, Senshi of Feathers

Her first attack is a feather attack used as a shield and her Super attack is that the feathers get razor sharp to cause minor cuts/damage.. Which, essentially, is exactly what your Senshi's attack does.

Her Eternal attack is fine, but I'd say you can increase time from 10 to 30 seconds as the Eternal attack is meant to be much more powerful than the first two.

Maybe for the first two, she can use doves as a distraction rather than a physical attack? Or a single (or two?) doves dive at the opponent with a brief/minor attack?

Sirene Naiads


Edited to add: There is also already a Sailor Columba, so I'm gonna have to ask you to pick another Senshi name. ;;

Sylent Nyte
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Sirene Naiads

Romantic Senshi

PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2013 5:17 pm


Sylent Nyte

O.O
Well that was shocking and thank you <3

Amazing...for all the time I spent on the master list and journals I missed her....*sighs* Now I feel like an idoit.

The wonderful thing was I had another attack idea in store encase I ran into problems.

And the name is changed. I know...I got beat to it....oops >.<
PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2013 5:21 pm


Don't be silly, no need to feel like an idiot. heart It's hard to go through all the lists we have and figure out what's taken/what's too close to other things, etc. You did a great job!

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PostPosted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 8:32 am


Ohhh interesting to see you go with distracting and offensive attacks with a sphere like doves since most people tend to relate with with peace and other pleasant things.

Anyway, loving her civilian side to death and her sailor side looks neat too.

Just one quick thing before stamping.

It isn't explictly stated so I wanted to make sure you knew or mentioned in the attacks that the doves aren't real doves, but instead are just energy in the shape of doves. So in rp they also shouldn't respond as living creatures or show too much 'intelligence'.
PostPosted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 6:10 pm


Iris_virus
Ohhh interesting to see you go with distracting and offensive attacks with a sphere like doves since most people tend to relate with with peace and other pleasant things.

Anyway, loving her civilian side to death and her sailor side looks neat too.

Just one quick thing before stamping.

It isn't explictly stated so I wanted to make sure you knew or mentioned in the attacks that the doves aren't real doves, but instead are just energy in the shape of doves. So in rp they also shouldn't respond as living creatures or show too much 'intelligence'.


I added the energy.

Iris, thank you so much for the complement. It really, really means alot <3

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 30, 2013 7:01 am


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