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endejester

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 22, 2012 11:46 am


Name: Absinthe

Nicknames: Abbie, Green Fairy, little pointy paws, PuffButt, bunny-butt, her eternal pointiness.

Breed: Japanese Bobtail

Attached to: N/A at this time? May attach during RP

Alignment: Negaverse

Blood Type: -AB

Fav. Food: Pizza (who doesn’t like pizza)

Hated Food: Sardines

Hobbies:

The Cat gets around! - While she 'lives' with a very near sighted very old woman who is just as likely to feed the shrubbery as the cat, she makes a point of making rounds about town. She’ll explore anywhere that she can fit, sometimes this has lead to some haunting meows coming out of the odd ventilation shaft, rain pipe or seeing a small white stubby tailed cat sitting on someone’s chimney looking more than a little pleased with herself. Other times, she just gets stuck and needs saved from somewhere that she’s gotten up to, but is having a far harder time getting safely down.

A Cat named Sue – Since she likes so much to travel she’s picked up another odd hobby. She likes collecting nicknames from people. Other people collect everything from stamps, thimbles or even buttons. She’ll adopt a person long enough to earn a name. Sometimes she’ll move on to get another name never to return, but sometimes she’ll show back up after a month or two just to help herself to the family larder.



Virtues:

Ok, let's start from the top"
- patient – She’s pretty easy going, tease her tail, tease her bad jumping skills and she’ll just use it as an example on using what’s available to you without getting caught up on what you can’t do. She tries hard to maintain this level of patience with everyone, and considers it one of her ‘fine points’.

How does it influence her thoughts and feelings? Well – She’s patient, she’s pretty ok if you tease her about what she can’t do because there are a lot of things she CAN do. Other people will either appreciate her high levels of tolerance with their own flaws (teasing or otherwise), or they may find it all the more aggravating that they can’t seem to get under her little kitty skin.

For example! – If DMC Senshi ‘Cowboys and Aliens’ – tugs her tail and teases the fact she took three tries to jump up onto the table to get the slice of unguarded pizza she’d laugh at her own failure and chow down. Senshi ‘Cowboys and Aliens’ might find this aggravating that she’s not bothered and try mocking her further or pulling her tail for a reaction. Where as ‘DMC Ssenshi of Mt. Dew’ might laugh with her, and then share pizza of her own knowing that Absinthe would be just as forgiving of their own flaws.


"Science and Imagination go hand in hand!" –Logical – How she thinks: She likes to take a rational approach to everything, but is willing to allow for things outside the world of what we can immediately see or understand.
She believes in magic because she sees it every day, she’s a talking cat for heaven sake. But she believes firmly that all magic is rooted in science. Light bulbs might have once had you burned at the stake after all. Everything in the world can be defined with enough thought.

Actions: if someone is confused or frustrated by the fact that senshi exist, some can travel through mirrors, all have powers that seem to fly in the face of science, Negaverse can teleport from one point to another almost instantaneously. She’ll sit down and try and put it into perspective by using human history as a perspective citing things like the light bulb example previously stated to try and soothe them. After all, everything has an explanation even if we don’t understand it.

How it effects others – Some people will likely find it soothing to have things explained to them this way, it’s easier to swallow a spoonful of ‘that can’t be real’ if you put it into some kind of perspective. Others will likely see her rationalizations as absolutely ridiculous or as an excuse for what is happening. One could say she is using Science and logic as a sort of religion, and while many may find this a very rational worldview there will always be people who want all the facts, and want them ‘right now’.



"Pff, it's ok! Shake it off you’re doing fine!" - - Optimist- Like the "Maneki Neko", Absinthe will often 'wave off' bad fortune saying, "It'll be alright", she has great faith that things -will- be alright. Because things always work out in the end, don't they? Part of this is faith in those she surrounds herself with, and part is just blind optimism. But the state of mind is half the battle -right?
How does it affect her actions? – For better or for worse she’s sure things will, in the end turn out in her favor. She’ll dive into risky situations believing in the best outcome. This does not always mean that she’ll get the outcome she desired, but she does seem to understand that. Sometimes the ‘best’ is simply making it out alive. Sometimes it comes down to learning something you didn’t know before (Hey I didn’t realize that was flammable!), so she won’t let bad days get her down because no matter how bad it gets, things will change.

How does this affect others? – You’ll love or hate her optimism. Some may see her as ignorant because she’s so faithful to the idea that things will work out, that the glass is half full.
However, others may ultimately need someone with this kind of positive outlook. When you’re contending with a city full of senshi, that outnumber the native Negaverse population by quite a bit, someone needs to stay positive. Someone needs to help you looking to the bright side and hoping that things will in the end go your way; that the raid on the latest senshi meeting was –not- a fluke and that it can, and will happen again.



Flaws:

"Just a taste, you don’t mind right?"
How she Thinks: Absinthe is very much into sharing, particularly if people share with HER.
They don’t have to say they’re willing to either, of course they are.
Who could say no to a face like hers? Your drink your food, your notebooks, your bed. She’s more than happy to make herself at home and finds it quite odd when people are bothered by it.

How she acts: If she wants it, she’s going for it, like a small time ‘cat burglar’ to be pun-ny about it, she will wander over and start helping herself. Most frequently she’ll do this with food and drinks, but if she needs to write something down she’ll confiscate pen and paper. If she wants to read that book, she’ll probably pick it up when you set it down if she even waits for that.

How people will probably react: I think most people, short of the most easy going of senshi will find this a very irritating. She’ll infringe not only on ‘personal property’ but gleefully will ignore your personal space as well to reach her current desire.

It should very much be noted that her idea of people sharing is strictly a one-way street. “What’s yours is hers and what’s hers is…exceptionally hers.” Much like her utter inability to sit still HER personal space can be regarded as sacred where your own is irrelevant. Your possessions, no matter how necessary or personal are ‘just things’, where hers are ‘her treasures, her food, her stuff and are not to be taken without asking. If confronted on this issue she’ll likely ignore you, attempt to change the topic, or if cornered, say it’s her prerogative ‘as a cat’.


"Nuuuu that’s BORING! – How she thinks: She dislikes periods of long inactivity; she needs to be doing something almost all the time. Talking, reading, moving, eating, just something to keep her active as though she were some kind of small perpetual motion machine. Not doing anything for too long makes her feel twitchy and a little anxious.

How she acts: Always on the move she can sometimes be hard to deal with, if she’s not actively doing something then she’ll start finding things to do, even little things. As a cat you may find her starting to ‘pick’ at your socks, or the crease of your pants. As a human you might find her hopping up beside you to braid your hair, or paint your nails (regardless of gender) depending on what’s available. Lord forbid that anyone fall asleep around her if she’s bored with a pen, at that point only rank (might) save you.

How others react: While this might be amusing so long as you weren’t being subjected to the worst of her outlets for activity (like drawing mustaches on some poor sleeper), there will likely be something she does that just drives you crazy. Maybe flicking a pen back and forth till it’s snatched away, or maybe unraveling the better part of your sock and you just can’t take it anymore. Sooner or later it’s going to become a source of frustration.

Subjectively, it may seem like a minor flaw to some, they may be used to people who can’t stop flicking a pen or tapping their foot, may not realize just how terrible a flaw this can be when it’s –really- a flaw not just a bad habit. If your companion in a battle can’t hold still when you need them to, can’t focus when you need their undivided attention the ramifications can be huge. It would be ill advised to find yourself in a situation where you need to stay quiet and hidden with Absinthe by your side.


"Are you kidding!? I've been doing stuff like this since I was a -kitten!" (CRASH-clatter-roll-rollroll-rollTHUD) - Overconfident: How she thinks: if anything, once she gets moving she's a little 'brash'. She's so sure (optimism) that things are going to work out that sometimes she'll keep pushing at a problem and ends up making it that much worse, (or harder to get away).
She’s found herself stuck in places that are perhaps a little ridiculous because she was so sure that if she just kept going it would ‘open right up’.

How she acts: Between her Optimism and her Brash attitude she’ll charge into some of the most ridiculous spots believing that ultimately things will work out. This doesn’t mean she’s suicidal, but it can seem that way when she’s charging after a squirrel and climbs out onto branches that are only just thick enough to hold her.

How others react: you’ll either see her as very brave, or more likely, just a bit thick. Anyone who’s seen her charge whole heartedly into a bad situation before might find themselves feeling rather like a babysitter to keep a semi rare asset safe, though keeping her out of trouble may be more trouble than its worth and a rescue mission with the hopes she’ll learn from the consequences could be more the flavor of the day depending on who she was dealing with.



Challenge: Defaults is : “This is not your lucky day”

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : CAT FORM
X ← Japanese bobtail!

Face/Ears: White with a vague grey cast.
Body: Adult
Slender but not over thin

Fur: White fur with a small black ‘point’ on her left cheek. (Black star for corrupted)

Eyes: Bright pale green

Accessories: A chain of ‘pearls’ with a silver key.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : HUMAN FORM

Eyes: Same color as Cat form, slightly upturned and amused.

Hair: Black hair with a choppy short to medium style, small green streak on the right side.

Face: Oval-heart mix for her face, amused and mischievous

Clothes: Ren faire style shirt, corseted top, under sleeves to cover the majority of her arms, cute ‘page’ style shorts, tall stockings and spats that leave her toes free (because shoes are bad)

Please see the following link for clothes and human form!
Appearance - purchased design from Sara Grey.
PostPosted: Fri Sep 07, 2012 11:47 am


endejester


Hello! I'd love to give you a crit, but first of all I'd like to ask you to please use the form for guardian cats. <33 Once you've got that filled out, you can quote me and I'll zoom right back here to take a look! c:

[b]Name:[/b]

[b]Nicknames:[/b]

[b]Breed:[/b]

[b]Attached to:[/b] Cats often have a senshi or negaverse agent they are attached to, or they can move in between multiple senshi/agents if you wish. Guardian Cats awaken and upgrades senshi, and Corrupted cats upgrades Corrupted Senshi.

[b]Alignment:[/b] Senshi or Negaverse

[b]Blood Type:[/b] Do note that cats do not have a O blood type

[b]Fav. Food:[/b]

[b]Hated Food:[/b]

[b]Hobbies:[/b] What does your character do outside of school during their civilian life? Note that this is an activity that they do on a regular basis, and reflects their personality. How often do they do this activity? Why? Note that if it's a once-in-a-blue-moon activity, then it's most likely not a hobby. List at least two, just try not to go overboard.

[i]e.g. [/i]

[i]Reading[/i] - Matt McMat loves to read joke books in order to come off as a funny guy. He doesn't like to read mystery, romance, or horror books because of the serious tone they take, and thinks they're most useful for making paper airplanes out of. In fact, this is why Matt McMat can't visit the Destiny City Library unattended.

[b]Virtues:[/b] These are positive aspects about your character's personality that affects them on a daily basis. Specifically, these are non-physical traits (such as 'generous', 'kind' and 'outgoing') that other people will look up to your character for having. These are used not only for role-play, but to also help the artist decide on expression and personality. Two traits minimum, four maximum.

[i]e.g. [/i]

[i]Outgoing[/i] -- Matt McMatt is an outgoing guy. He's always the life of the party, and tends to love organising parties for no reason but having parties. He's an effervescent party animal. When it comes to answering a question, Matt McMatt is usually the first to offer an answer even if it isn't correct of what someone is looking for.

[b]Flaws:[/b] Second verse, same as the first. Things that are not flaws: 'stubborn', 'hates seeing people hurt their friends', phobias, mental illnesses, diseases, being 'too nice' (unless they are SO NICE that it is an ACTUAL FLAW), etc. Like the virtues, these are non-physical traits about your character that affects them daily, however these are attributes about your character that give other people reason to look DOWN on your character. We'd like two of each, try to keep to four maximum. This helps the artist decide expression, personality.

e.g.

[i]Selfish[/i] -- Matt McMatt can be really self-centered. He thinks about himself long before any of his friends, and whether or not things impact on him. If he finds something boring or not worth his time, he rarely goes through with it to help out a pal. He can be a bit of a fair-weather friend, because he first and foremost thinks about himself.

[b]Challenge:[/b] Defaults is : To Protect and Serve!; Can be whatever you wish.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : CAT FORM

[b]Face/Ears:[/b] Should fit the breed you decided on for your cat.

[b]Body:[/b] Is your guardian an adult, or a kitten ? Underweight ? Pudgy spoiled housekitty ?

[b]Fur:[/b] Fur color and length, as well as the color of the forehead star.

[b]Eyes:[/b] What color are your kitty's eyes ? No heterochromia (different-coloured eyes), please!

[b]Accessories:[/b] Does your cat wears a collar ? A bell ? Do note that accessories are limited in cat form, and they should not be clothed - a small hat is fine, as is anything similar, but don't go overboard !

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : HUMAN FORM

[b]Eyes:[/b] Colour, shape. No heterochromia (different-coloured eyes), please! Should be the same as cat form.

[b]Hair:[/b] Colour, style, accessories. Some artists prefer references, others prefer being given style words - you might want to keep this in mind

[b]Face:[/b] Shape, features -- tell us if your character has a round or oval or heart-shaped face, freckles or not, etc

[b]Clothes:[/b] Anything too complicated might be rejected, but feel free to try ! Keep in mind that all cats are now on two templates - one for males, the other for females, unlike other powered characters who have a great number of poses at their disposal.

Ephebe


endejester

Feral Cat

PostPosted: Fri Sep 07, 2012 12:14 pm


Ephebe


Fixed! Sorry I was using the template of my old stamped cat quest <3
PostPosted: Fri Sep 07, 2012 1:04 pm


Haha, no worries! <33 Now, on to the crit!

Absinthe sounds super cute, but there are a few general things I'd like to address before we get more into the flesh of this crit!

You need at least two hobbies for her, and right now you only have one. c: I'm not entirely sure what the hobby is actually about, either? Collecting names? The name of the hobby makes me think it's some sort of exploration hobby, but that doesn't quite fit with what's written right now. Do you mean she makes rounds of houses to beg food? If so, I'm not quite sure that counts as a hobby, since it's more of a survival thing - unless of course she really does make it into a hobby, continuing to get food from people long after she's stopped feeling hungry. In any case, you need to be a bit more specific about what this hobby actually is!

And quite generally, you need to add more info to pretty much all your traits! Right now I feel that there's not a lot to crit, because I don't really know a whole lot about Absinthe - you have an awesome basis here, but that's all it reads as right now, a basis. You need to flesh out your trait descriptions; the rule of thumb is at least four good, long, descriptive sentences for each! And the more info you can add, the better. The Stamper's Guide has some good tips for what to think about when writing your traits:

Quote:
Another way to think of it is that ideally, any virtue or flaw should have answers to the following:

1. How does it affect their THOUGHTS OR FEELINGS? What's their motivation with this?

2. How does it affect their ACTIONS? What are they doing with their motivation? How are they expressing it?

3. How does it affect OTHER CHARACTERS? If it's a virtue, how can this lead to making them liked or respected? If it's a flaw, how can it earn them dislike or disrespect?

The first part is not as necessary, but still helpful. In the end each trait should tell you something about what it would be like to interact with the character in a general sense.


I can't really see any disrepancies between your virtues/flaws right now, they seem well-chosen and work well together! But as said, more info, please. <33

endejester

Ephebe


endejester

Feral Cat

PostPosted: Fri Sep 07, 2012 4:27 pm


Ephebe


WORD BOMB! - possibly over simplified but... hopefully now split out and wordified in a good way?
PostPosted: Sun Sep 09, 2012 1:12 pm


WORD BOMB = SECOND ONLY TO THE LOVE BOMB. heart I LOVE the stuff that you've added, absolutely fantastic! I feel like I know much more about Absinthe now, and you've really done well explaining all the different things! c: Much kudos. <33 I think everything looks good now! Your flaws and virtues work well together, I can't see any contradictions, and Abbie really seems to come alive in her profile, now. <3

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endejester

Ephebe


endejester

Feral Cat

PostPosted: Sun Sep 09, 2012 1:58 pm


YEEE <3 trail stamp love!! <3
PostPosted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 7:52 am


She reminds me a little of a dark *********. XD heart

Onto serious critting though!

Her virtues are super cute but at the moment her flaws seem a little overly tame to me. While her stealing stuff could get obnoxious it seems like the kind of thing that would take many occurances of it to make someone genuinely dislike her over it (thinking they own everything as a trait is also fairly common among cat characters, just in case you wanted to go bit more unique). Fidgety as well seems like something that would have to be built up upon unless it's taken a little more to the extreme. Like her accidentally breaking stuff when she romping around fidgeting, or if she perhaps gets very loud talking/singing/whatever when she's trying to keep away the boredness.

Both of those two (unless you ramp up fidgety) also seem like things that wouldn't neccesarily even come up except in very specific 'just hanging around chilling' rps. Like I don't see any of them but the last one coming into play during a normal awakening/battle rp.


Also, you're going to need more then just her toes visible art wise. Straps are fine however, so you can still keep with the same design for the most part, simply making both her toes and heels visible. heart

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endejester

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 2:34 pm


Added further clarification! (elaboration?) to distinguish them as flaws not bad habits!
PostPosted: Tue Sep 11, 2012 9:19 pm


Your additions are very helpful, thank you!

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