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forever82900

PostPosted: Mon Aug 20, 2012 3:36 pm


An Untitled Poem:
Tears fall down my face like rain
I'm sick of hiding all the pain
That I feel and I see in the mirror when I look
No matter how hard I try my face is an open book

Tears fall down my face like rain
It's getting harder and harder to hide the pain
There's no use anymore in trying to hide
Everyone tells me it can't rain all the time
PostPosted: Mon Aug 20, 2012 4:55 pm


forever82900
An Untitled Poem:
Tears fall down my face like rain
I'm sick of hiding all the pain
That I feel and I see in the mirror when I look
No matter how hard I try my face is an open book

Tears fall down my face like rain
It's getting harder and harder to hide the pain
There's no use anymore in trying to hide
Everyone tells me it can't rain all the time


Wow this is an amazing poem smile

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forever82900

PostPosted: Mon Aug 20, 2012 5:30 pm


Thank you sooo much! I'm glad you like it smile In my opinion, it's one of my least favorite writings.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 22, 2012 8:44 pm


forever82900
An Untitled Poem:
Tears fall down my face like rain
I'm sick of hiding all the pain
That I feel and I see in the mirror when I look
No matter how hard I try my face is an open book

Tears fall down my face like rain
It's getting harder and harder to hide the pain
There's no use anymore in trying to hide
Everyone tells me it can't rain all the time


Hmm Yes it is very nice I like it :3

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forever82900

PostPosted: Thu Aug 23, 2012 6:17 am


Thanks so much!
PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2012 2:07 pm


It's really nice. So sad... crying

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forever82900

PostPosted: Tue Sep 04, 2012 12:58 pm


KuroNekoNyanNya
It's really nice. So sad... crying

That's who I am. Thanks for the feedback smile
PostPosted: Thu Sep 06, 2012 2:58 pm


I like it, it has a clear emotion and message to it.
The only thing that bothers me (that's a strong term but I'm not sure what else to use, don't take it too seriously) is that there isn't much of an ending.
I know that poetry doesn't really tend to have an ending, but I feel like there's something missing that should be wrapping it up.
I'm not much of a poet though.

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