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 Posted: Mon Aug 13, 2012 10:28 pm
This is something I just came up with a few minutes ago. It isn't the best but I wanted to hear what you guys have to say about it since I might use it for something. The title is not official or anything so feel free to give me suggestions on that because I am terrible at titles.
Hush now my darling,
Be still, don't cry
As I sing to you this,
my last lullaby.
Under the trees
that rustle in the night,
Surrounded by monsters,
That fill you with fright.
Here I must tell you,
Do not forget,
My love for you darling,
I will never regret.
And as I sleep soundly,
I hope you do too
But not in the way
That I do.
This is supposed to be sung like an actual lullaby so if any of the syllables seem off or whatever, that is why. Anyway, tell me what you think!
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 8:52 am
I view it more like a woman teller her loving goodbye. Maybe long time friends turned lovers and she always sang lullabies to him.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 9:25 am
Snowblazer I view it more like a woman teller her loving goodbye. Maybe long time friends turned lovers and she always sang lullabies to him. Thanks for commenting. When I wrote it, I was thinking of a death scene for a character so it is them saying goodbye to their loved ones. Any title suggestions?
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 9:36 am
Girl on Fire 12 Snowblazer I view it more like a woman teller her loving goodbye. Maybe long time friends turned lovers and she always sang lullabies to him. Thanks for commenting. When I wrote it, I was thinking of a death scene for a character so it is them saying goodbye to their loved ones. Any title suggestions? I love Last Lullaby. It's her last lullaby...so...Last Lullaby fits lol
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 9:46 am
Snowblazer I love Last Lullaby. It's her last lullaby...so...Last Lullaby fits lol Yeah, I guess haha
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2012 9:44 am
Well, Dear, it seems to be in the same format as the lullaby Kella sings in War Maiden. Have you considered using it thus? After all, she says she doesn't know the rest of the song... perhaps before/during/after an important battle in the story, she overhears someone singing it? After all, if you put the two together, it would make sense as a sort of war song...and Kella's mom would know it, because of her husband being in the war and all. Just a suggestion...
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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2012 10:01 am
Theory Vale Well, Dear, it seems to be in the same format as the lullaby Kella sings in War Maiden. Have you considered using it thus? After all, she says she doesn't know the rest of the song... perhaps before/during/after an important battle in the story, she overhears someone singing it? After all, if you put the two together, it would make sense as a sort of war song...and Kella's mom would know it, because of her husband being in the war and all. Just a suggestion... Hmmm, honestly I made it for a Hunger Games rp that I ended up quitting. That is a good idea though and I will definitely consider it.
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