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Posted: Mon Jul 02, 2012 8:51 am
So I was writing a book but it failed, and I came up with this idea. I just worte all of this in like 1 hour, so if I messed up, not my fault. Blame Word. I still don't have a title so if you have suggestions I'd like to hear them. Please and thank you!
Chapter One: I woke up at 7:55a.m. so I could wake my younger sister Myra up at eight o’clock. It was her eighth birthday, and she was excited about it. I brushed my teeth and went into her bedroom, checking the flower clock on the wall as I walked in. 8 a.m. sharp, perfect timing. I walk over to her bed, but she is not there. I pick up the blankets thinking she might be hiding, still no Myra. It’s not like her to be up before me. I hurriedly take a look around the room and run out into the hall. She wasn’t in the bathroom earlier, so I suppose she’s not there now. I run down the hall stopping to look in closets occasionally, then head for the stairs. I frantically run through the house and into the family room tripping over my dog in the process. I finally stop to breath in the dining room where my mother and father look worried. Mom has the phone up to her ear, and Dad is pacing back and forth mumbling something like, “Where could she have gone?” I sit down to eat my breakfast while Dad explains that we will be going out to look for Myra soon. Mom is still on the phone describing what Myra looks like, “8 years old today, blue eyes, golden hair, umm…about four feet maybe. Close to fifty pounds. She doesn’t talk, so if you find her, she won’t answer any questions.”
I quickly finish my cereal, and Dad tells me to go take a shower. I’m quick about it because every minute Myra could get farther away from us. I come back downstairs finding Mom has moved over to the couch, but she’s still on the phone. “Trenton and I are going out to look for her,” Dad tells her, “Don’t worry too much.”
Just as we are about to open the door, Myra walks in wearing a pink and yellow sundress, pigtails crooked, singing in the angelic voice of hers, “Do, a deer a female deer. Ra, a golden drop of sun.”
I hear Mom say, “Never mind, we found her,” and she hangs up the phone. We all just stare at Myra who is still singing her song. Suddenly she realizes we are watching her, and her song trails off. Dad walks over to give her a hug, but she doesn’t return it. She never does. Myra is, let’s just say, a little different. She doesn’t talk to anyone, but she sings like an angel. If you stop to listen to her song, she’ll stop singing. If you start singing the song with her, she just looks at you like you’re crazy. She never tries to be the center of attention. Not that she’s shy, she just think about other people first. Myra also doesn’t touch people. She allows them to give her a hug, pat her on the back, etc., but she never returns any of those. It’s almost as if she has no care in the world. Myra definitely has a way of expressing herself, and if you’re not careful you won’t catch on. Usually the song she sings expresses how she feels, but you have to act like you’re not listening or she’ll stop singing.
Doctors suggested she has Autism, but then took that back because she is social. She’ll laugh at you’re jokes and cry with you when you’re sad. She smiles when something makes you happy, but never if something makes her happy. She never screams because she’s scared, never stomps when she’s mad. She just keeps it all to herself, and she’s always energetic. Doctors also suggested sending her to a special school, but Mom said there was no need for that. Mom’s little angel is “special” in a different way.
After Mom and Dad release they’re hug and back off, I lift my arms in the air and say, “Well, happy birthday!”
“Oh, yes,” Mom says, “Almost forgot. We got you ice-cream cake.” Ice-cream cake is Myra’s favorite, and instantly her eyes light up. She skips over to the refrigerator and looks and the freezer door as if saying, ‘I want some now.’
“Not yet, little miss,” Dad says. “We have to wait for Aunt Etta and Uncle Bruce to get her. And I don’t think you’ve even had breakfast yet.”
Myra looks down at the ground and wiggles her toes. She turns on her heel and heads for the stairs singing, “Birthday” by the Beatles. It is amazing for an eight year old to actually know that song. Myra is like a walking jukebox.
I decide to follow and head to my room for some nicer clothes. I her Myra come out of her room singing, “Splish splash, taking a bath…” and figure she’s going to take a bath. I sit on my bed and think long and hard of where she could’ve gone this morning. I didn’t hear her wake up, and if she’s awake before me she usually wakes me up by singing. Our house is pretty isolated. We have neighbors, but they are farther away because we all own acres of land. There are some woods behind our house, she could’ve gone there. I figure that’s where she went, maybe to make an early birthday wish, and head back downstairs.
Mom says she’s going into town to get food for the birthday dinner and I decide to go with. Aunt Etta and Uncle Bruce won’t be here for another three hours, so why not? I have to sit in the backseat because Mom still thinks the front seat is unsafe for a 12-year-old boy. I don’t see why, but I’m not going to argue.
We get to the store and I ask Mom if I can go to the toy section. She thinks about it and finally says yes and that she’ll be with in the food section. I “fast-walk” over to the toys because it’s rude to run in a store. I’m not getting a toy for me; I’m getting one for Myra, even though she doesn’t touch half her toys. I look around and come across a doll that is wearing the same sundress Myra was wearing but in purple and blue. It’s kind of hidden, so I have to reach in to grab it. I pull it out and figure it will have to do. As I walk to the food section, someone bumps into me and I drop the doll. I pick it up to hear it singing “You are My Sunshine.” That makes the doll perfect because that used to be the only song Myra sang.
We check out and Mom pays for the doll. “You might want to pay me back or do some housework for that.” She says. I just nod in agreement.
I am very careful when we get home so that Myra doesn’t see the doll. I run upstairs and grab the red flower bag that I picked out last week. I put the doll in and add some orange tissue paper. Colorful is the best way to describe this gift. I hide it in my closet and head back downstairs not sure what to do for the next hour and a half. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
(This is not the end of Chapter One.)
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Posted: Mon Jul 02, 2012 5:23 pm
Its good so far. Only, change the 8 to eight. I'm a little tired to notice and grammar or spelling mistakes though...sorry sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Jul 02, 2012 6:01 pm
So far so good to me! I must point out that in the first few sentences you are writing in past tense then seem to permanently switch to present but that is easy to fix. There are a few spelling errors but those are quick too. As for grammatical errors, I didn't see any. Honestly though, I am not the one to ask about grammar... or spelling I guess. Oh well. Keep posting please!
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 6:54 am
Snowblazer Its good so far. Only, change the 8 to eight. I'm a little tired to notice and grammar or spelling mistakes though...sorry sweatdrop thx! oh ya the 8 thing, I typed it in as "eight" but Word kept changing it for some reason. I thought I had it at eight but it must've changed again...Ugh!
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 7:11 am
Girl on Fire 12 So far so good to me! I must point out that in the first few sentences you are writing in past tense then seem to permanently switch to present but that is easy to fix. There are a few spelling errors but those are quick too. As for grammatical errors, I didn't see any. Honestly though, I am not the one to ask about grammar... or spelling I guess. Oh well. Keep posting please! Thx for pointing that out. I changed it and will be posting all of Chapter one as soon as I finish. Btw this book turns kind of mysterious later. If my plot works that is.
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 8:46 am
13 Mockingjay Snowblazer Its good so far. Only, change the 8 to eight. I'm a little tired to notice and grammar or spelling mistakes though...sorry sweatdrop thx! oh ya the 8 thing, I typed it in as "eight" but Word kept changing it for some reason. I thought I had it at eight but it must've changed again...Ugh! lol dontch just love word "For the nth time word I know how to spell my NAME!!!" lol had that fight a few times
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 9:43 am
Snowblazer 13 Mockingjay Snowblazer Its good so far. Only, change the 8 to eight. I'm a little tired to notice and grammar or spelling mistakes though...sorry sweatdrop thx! oh ya the 8 thing, I typed it in as "eight" but Word kept changing it for some reason. I thought I had it at eight but it must've changed again...Ugh! lol dontch just love word "For the nth time word I know how to spell my NAME!!!" lol had that fight a few times Ya thts when you go through and type in every name of your family and friends then click "add to dictionary" lol had to do tht at school a couple times.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2012 6:20 pm
Chapter One: I wake up at 7:55a.m. so I could wake my younger sister Myra up at eight o’clock. It is her eighth birthday, and she is very excited about it. I brush my teeth and go into her bedroom, checking the flower clock on the wall as I walk in. Eight a.m. sharp, perfect timing. I walk over to her bed, but she is not there. I pick up the blankets thinking she might be hiding, still no Myra. It’s not like her to be up before me. I hurriedly take a look around the room and run out into the hall. She wasn’t in the bathroom earlier, so I suppose she’s not there now. I run down the hall stopping to look in closets occasionally, then head for the stairs. I frantically run through the house and into the family room tripping over my dog in the process. I finally stop to breath in the dining room where my mother and father look worried. Mom has the phone up to her ear, and Dad is pacing back and forth mumbling something like, “Where could she have gone?” I sit down to eat my breakfast while Dad explains that we will be going out to look for Myra soon. Mom is still on the phone describing what Myra looks like, “Eight years old today, blue eyes, golden hair, umm…about four feet maybe. Close to fifty pounds. She doesn’t talk, so if you find her, she won’t answer any questions.”
I quickly finish my cereal, and Dad tells me to go take a shower. I’m quick about it because every minute Myra could get farther away from us. I come back downstairs finding Mom has moved over to the couch, but she’s still on the phone. “Trenton and I are going out to look for her,” Dad tells her, “Don’t worry too much.”
Just as we are about to open the door, Myra walks in wearing a pink and yellow sundress, pigtails crooked, singing in the angelic voice of hers, “Do, a deer a female deer. Ra, a golden drop of sun.”
I hear Mom say, “Never mind, we found her,” and she hangs up the phone. We all just stare at Myra who is still singing her song. Suddenly she realizes we are watching her, and her song trails off. Dad walks over to give her a hug, but she doesn’t return it. She never does. Myra is, let’s just say, a little different. She doesn’t talk to anyone, but she sings like an angel. If you stop to listen to her song, she’ll stop singing. If you start singing the song with her, she just looks at you like you’re crazy. She never tries to be the center of attention. Not that she’s shy, she just think about other people first. Myra also doesn’t touch people. She allows them to give her a hug, pat her on the back, etc., but she never returns any of those. It’s almost as if she has no care in the world. Myra definitely has a way of expressing herself, and if you’re not careful you won’t catch on. Usually the song she sings expresses how she feels, but you have to act like you’re not listening or she’ll stop singing.
Doctors suggested she has Autism, but then took that back because she is social. She’ll laugh at you’re jokes and cry with you when you’re sad. She smiles when something makes you happy, but never if something makes her happy. She never screams because she’s scared, never stomps when she’s mad. She just keeps it all to herself, and she’s always energetic. Doctors also suggested sending her to a special school, but Mom said there was no need for that. Mom’s little angel is “special” in a different way.
After Mom and Dad release their hug and back off, I lift my arms in the air and say, “Well, happy birthday!”
“Oh, yes,” Mom says, “Almost forgot. We got you ice-cream cake.” Ice-cream cake is Myra’s favorite, and instantly her eyes light up. She skips over to the refrigerator and looks and the freezer door as if saying, ‘I want some now.’
“Not yet, little miss,” Dad says. “We have to wait for Aunt Etta and Uncle Bruce to get her. And I don’t think you’ve even had breakfast yet.”
Myra looks down at the ground and wiggles her toes. She turns on her heel and heads for the stairs singing, “Birthday” by the Beatles. It is amazing for an eight year old to actually know that song. Myra is like a walking jukebox.
I decide to follow and head to my room for some nicer clothes. I her Myra come out of her room singing, “Splish splash, taking a bath…” and figure she’s going to take a bath. I sit on my bed and think long and hard of where she could’ve gone this morning. I didn’t hear her wake up, and if she’s awake before me she usually wakes me up by singing. Our house is pretty isolated. We have neighbors, but they are farther away because we all own acres of land. There are some woods behind our house, she could’ve gone there. I figure that’s where she went, maybe to make an early birthday wish, and head back downstairs.
Mom says she’s going into town to get food for the birthday dinner and I decide to go with. Aunt Etta and Uncle Bruce won’t be here for another three hours, so why not? I have to sit in the backseat because Mom still thinks the front seat is unsafe for a 12-year-old boy. I don’t see why, but I’m not going to argue. We get to the store and I ask Mom if I can go to the toy section. She thinks about it and finally says yes and that she’ll be in the food section. I “fast-walk” over to the toys because it’s rude to run in a store. I’m not getting a toy for me; I’m getting one for Myra, even though she doesn’t touch half her toys. I look around and come across a doll that is wearing the same sundress Myra was wearing but in purple and blue. It’s kind of hidden, so I have to reach in to grab it. I pull it out and figure it will have to do. As I walk to the food section, someone bumps into me and I drop the doll. I pick it up to hear it singing “You are My Sunshine.” That makes the doll perfect because that used to be the only song Myra sang.
We check out and Mom pays for the doll. “You might want to pay me back or do some housework for that.” She says. I just nod in agreement.
I am very careful when we get home so that Myra doesn’t see the doll. I run upstairs and grab the red flower bag that I picked out last week. I put the doll in and add some orange tissue paper. Colorful is the best way to describe this gift. I hide it in my closet and head back downstairs not sure what to do for the next hour and a half. I accidentally fall asleep on the couch and wake up to the sound of Aunt Etta and Mom talking. Thomas, my 10 year old cousin, is leaning over me. I don’t know how long he has been there, but as I sit up he says, “Finally! You’re awake.” “Yeah, sure,” I say wiping my eyes, “How long was I asleep?” “Umm…I don’t know. I just got here about a half hour ago.” Thomas replies. I don’t necessarily like hanging out with him, but it’s expected of me to at least be nice. “Oh, ok. Where’s Myra and Annie?” Annie is Thomas’s five year old sister. We can tell she really annoys Myra, but since Myra doesn’t talk she’s pretty much stuck with the girl. “I think they’re in her room.” Thomas replies. “Want to go up to your room?” “I guess.” I say starting to walk towards the stairs with Thomas following me. I stop in front of Myra’s room to see toys thrown all over the floor, and Annie is digging out more. Myra is just sitting in the corner of her bed, curled up in a ball, hands over her ears, singing to herself. “Um, Annie, how about picking up some of these toys,” Thomas says in a light voice. “No!” Annie replies throwing a stuffed bear at us. “Go away! We’re having fun, right Myra?” Myra doesn’t shake her head or anything, just sits there staring at the little girl. I walk over to Myra and whisper in her ear, “Just keep her away from the breakable stuff. You can come in my room if you want.” Myra jumps up, grabbed her four collectible rabbits, and runs to my room. “Come on,” I say leading Thomas out of the room. We walk into my room and find Myra lying on my bed. “Hey, do you guys want to ride bikes? I have an extra one; you could ride it, Thomas.” I suggest because right now I just want to be outside. “Yeah, that sounds fun.” Thomas replies, “You coming Myra?” Myra gets up and walks two steps behind us. As we walk down the hallway, I hear her close my bedroom door. I’m pretty sure Annie knows how to open doors, but if that makes Myra feel better, I don’t care. We get downstairs and I tell Mom we are going out to ride bikes. “All right,” she says, “Just don’t be too long, dinner will be ready soon.” She pauses to look at us for a minute, then asks, “Where’s Annie.” “Up in Myra’s room,” I say and immediately Aunt Etta stands up and jogs upstairs. She must know Annie is destroying the room. Once we get to the garage I show Thomas the bike he can ride. Myra jumps on her purple bike and starts pedaling away. “Wait, Myra, we aren’t ready.” I jump on my bike and go after her with Thomas trailing behind. “Don’t we need helmets?” He asks. “No,” I reply, “Just hurry up.” We start pedaling after her as fast as we can. I can hear her singing, but I’m not sure what song. “Myra, stop!” I yell because we are three blocks away from our house. Mom usually never lets us go farther than one block. Myra turns to look at me then stops her bike. She turns back around and keeps riding. I follow with Thomas next to me. We turn the corner and I have no clue where Myra is leading us. Before I know it, we are riding our bikes up our driveway. Thomas and I are panting as we put the bikes back, and Myra walks inside like nothing happened. Once we get inside Aunt Etta tells us to wash up for dinner. Thomas grabs Annie’s hand and leads her to the bathroom with us. I grab a stool for her and as soon as Thomas lets go of her hand she runs off. “Oh, well,” I say, “She really has no need to wash her hands anyway. She didn’t go bike riding with us.” “True.” Thomas replies rinsing the rest of the soap off his hands. “Let’s go, I’m starving.” I follow him back to the dining room where Annie and Myra are already eating. “Smells good, let’s dig in!” I say to Thomas who laughs as I grab the bowl of mashed potatoes and take a big bite. “Trenton Greene!” Mom yells, “Get a plate please.” “Fine,” I reply grabbing a plate and loading it with food. I sit down between Uncle Bruce and Myra and start to eat hoping the day will start to slow down.
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2012 10:35 am
Chapter Two: Things did slow down after dinner. Mom announces it’s time for Myra to open her presents. Myra jumps up and grabs a present from Dad. Annie quickly pulls it away and places a different package in Myra’s hands. “Open my present first, Me Me.” Annie says. I have no clue where the nickname “Me Me” came from, but Myra doesn’t seem to like it too much. “Our present,” Thomas corrects Annie who just sticks her tongue out at him. Myra opens the present to find little plastic ponies of all colors. I can tell she’s not very interested, but she politely holds them up when Mom wants to take a picture. Myra finishes opening presents, and Annie complains she wants to go home. Uncle Bruce says it’s time to go and immediately Annie wants to spend the night. This girl needs to make up her mind. “Sorry, Annie, but we have to go to church in the morning,” Aunt Etta says. Annie starts crying. Aunt Etta picks her up and carries her to the door, “Somebody’s tired,” she says. “See you guys later.” “Bye, Thomas,” I say, still being nice. He gives me a smile and a wave and turns to walk out the door. Myra looks at me with a look of either anger or disgust on her face. She’s probably really annoyed by Annie. Then I realize I didn’t give her my present. I run up the stairs skipping a couple steps and head to my room. I see Myra left her rabbits in here, so I place them back in her room first. I go back to my room to retrieve the present from my closet and run back downstairs. I try skipping steps but end up sliding down half of the stairway to the bottom. I sit there for a while and realize Myra is still standing by the door probably making fun of me in her head. “Well, here ya go,” I say holding out the present to her.
Myra takes the colorful bag and rips out all the tissue paper. She pulls out the doll, and her eyes grow big. She looks at it as if there’s something suspicious to it. Then she must realize it has the same dress on she was wearing earlier because her eyes relax a bit.
“It sings,” I say even though I don’t know how to make it sing, last time I just dropped it. Myra squeezes the doll’s stomach, arm, hand, and leg until she finds a button on the foot. When the doll starts singing, Myra looks so happy and starts swaying to the song.
I stand up in the middle of the song but have nowhere to go because Myra is standing in front of me. When the song ends, she takes a step forward, and I move over to the side supposing she wants to go upstairs. But instead of going upstairs Myra wraps her arms around my stomach and hugs me. I’m so shocked at the moment that I don’t even hug her back for a while. When I wrap my arms around her is when she decides she’s done hugging me.
Myra walks past me and goes upstairs while I just stand there not believing that in eight years this is the very first time she’s hugged anyone. I walk into the kitchen where Mom and Dad are still cleaning up. “Did you see that?” I ask hoping for eyewitnesses.
“What?” Dad replies, “Is there another spider? Those darn things won’t go away no matter how much bug spray I use.”
“Umm, no spiders, Dad, calm down.” I answer awkwardly not knowing our house had spiders in the first place. “No, Myra just hugged me.”
“Really? Well that’s different,” Mom says with a tone of shock in her voice. “She must’ve really liked the present you gave her. Here, clean the dishes,” She says while handing me a sponge. “You are still working off that money for the doll, correct?”
What am I supposed to say? “Yes, I am,” I finally say and take her place at the sink.
“Well then, for the next week I shall be addressed as Ma’am and your father as Sir.” She says, and I hope she’s joking.
Dad kind of chuckles and says in his best military voice, “Attention!” I stand, back straight, hand in salute, facing him. “I need these dishes clean and dried within the twenty-first hour, Soldier! Once that is done maybe you can have some more cake!”
“Yes, Sir!” I say, saluting him and turning back to the sink. It’s already 8:30 now and the twenty-first hour is military time for 9:00 p.m., so I have about thirty minutes.
I quickly finish washing the dishes and dry them completely. After I’m done is when Mom decides to tell me I have to put them away too. I finish five minutes after the hour, but Dad still gives me another piece of cake.
I finish my cake and decide to go to bed. Myra is already in the bathroom brushing her teeth, but I don’t feel like brushing mine tonight. I just want to lie down and go to sleep. Normally it takes Myra about fifteen minutes before she actually lies down. She has a routine of using the bathroom for about five minutes, then going to bed and reading for about ten minutes.
You would think she keeps me awake because the bathroom is right next to my room, and her room is at the very end of the hall, but she’s surprisingly very quiet. Usually I’m still awake when I hear her light click off, but tonight I fall into a deep sleep before she is even done in the bathroom.
Pictures of Myra, starting when she was born, slowly flip through my head. Going by slow enough for me to know what the image is from. Once I realize what day the picture was taken, it flips to a new picture like a calendar flips to a new month. One by one they flip through her first, second, third year, flipping so slowly it feels like forever. The images suddenly stop flipping landing on the last picture taken today. I take in the picture of everyone gathered around Myra as she smiles before blowing out the candles on her cake. Everyone, including Myra, looks so happy.
Then, pictures start flipping through my head so fast I can’t see what they are from. They stop on a picture of Myra I’ve never seen before. She looks older in this picture, hair in a single ponytail instead of two, wearing jeans and a tee-shirt instead of a dress, and she’s smiling wide for the camera. She is wearing a key necklace, not just any key, but a key to a door. How can I be seeing this image, looking into the future? How is this possible? I try to remind myself I’m just dreaming and that’s probably not Myra. I notice she is standing in front of the woods by our house. Then I see the trees in the background catch on fire. I hear singing, Myra’s voice to be exact.
Then out of nowhere comes a knife that hits the picture right in the center. The fire in the background engulfs the whole picture and the knife falls. Just as it hits the ground, I hear a door slam and I spring up. I can still hear Myra singing, but I don’t know why. It’s five o’clock in the morning, and she should still be in bed. I look out the window and see her, walking towards the woods with the doll in one hand and a basket of flowers in the other. That’s where the singing is coming from. Quickly, I put on a jacket and shoes and run out the door. I follow her at a distance so she won’t her me, if there were bushes to hide behind it would be so much easier. Myra occasionally stops to pick a morning glory from the grass, but continues on toward the woods. Once we are in the forest I conceal myself behind a thick tree. She walks a little deeper into the woods then stops and sits on a log. I watch closely wondering what she will do next. She’s still singing, and she’s looking around her as if she were trying to find something. Is this where she came yesterday morning? Why would she come here by herself? How long has she been coming here? The questions fill my head. We were always told not to come here unless we had permission. I’ve been back here a couple times with some friends, but I don’t think Myra has. Confused, I watch her closely, not letting her from my sight. After a couple minutes she stands up and walks around, then disappears behind a tree. I should get up and follow her, but there is no place to conceal myself. To my advantage, she returns to the log, her basket not only full of flowers but vines too. She sits down and spreads the brightly colored spring flowers to her left. Then she spreads the lengths of vines on her right. Still singing, she cautiously takes two vines and twists them together. She adds some orange marigolds and purple morning glories she picked up earlier. I watch her tiny hands twist the vines and flowers into a crown, and as she sings two squirrels gather in front of her to listen. Then a rabbit hops up from behind and sits listening to her song. It’s like a fairy tale. By the time Myra is done with the crown, she has rabbits, squirrels, birds, and even deer gathered around her. She rises and places the crown on her head. Then she takes the remaining flowers and makes a bouquet by tying them with a short vine. Before she can leave the woods I stand and block her way. She looks up at me and I can tell, she knows she is in trouble. “Why are you here?” Is the only question of thousands that comes out of my mouth. But I know that question won’t be answered. Instead she just shrugs at me. “You know you’re not supposed to be here, and it’s six o’clock in the morning! You should be in bed! We have to go to church today too.”
She makes me furious. She just stands there and looks up at me with eyes that show no emotion. How can she be so resistant to this? When I was her age and got yelled at, it made me upset and sometimes I would cry. But instead she just stares.
“All right, come on,” I grab her wrist and drag her to the edge of the woods where she breaks free. She doesn’t try to turn around and run away, but she walks back to the house by herself, crown on her head, doll in one hand, basket with bouquet in the other. I watch her walk away frozen by how she dealt with that. Then I realize I should get back to the house to, and I start to follow.
(End of Chapter Two...maybe. Not sure if I want to add more or not.)
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2012 10:37 am
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2012 7:17 am
Wow, your chapters are pretty good! I wonder what happens next.
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2012 8:36 am
OhhBissh Wow, your chapters are pretty good! I wonder what happens next. Thanks! I'm really happy on how far I've actually gotten this time. I usually don't have time to write, so when I do I try to get as much done as possible.
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2012 11:08 am
I love it so far! There are a few grammatical problems in there, but other than that, it's fine! I wonder what happens next! c:
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Posted: Sat Jan 19, 2013 6:01 pm
Snowblazer 13 Mockingjay Snowblazer Its good so far. Only, change the 8 to eight. I'm a little tired to notice and grammar or spelling mistakes though...sorry sweatdrop thx! oh ya the 8 thing, I typed it in as "eight" but Word kept changing it for some reason. I thought I had it at eight but it must've changed again...Ugh! lol dontch just love word "For the nth time word I know how to spell my NAME!!!" lol had that fight a few times lol I get that all the time, but I guess that's what happeneds when you have a weird name, and almost all of the characters I create have weird names too lol.
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