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acewonder1

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 1:42 pm




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Personal Name: eve
Alias: the huntress
Nick Names:
Universe: dc
Alliance: young justes
Age:14
Height:6'2
Weight: 90 pound
Physical Characteristics: she look like a noumal human girl ectpte she has scars on her face
Personality: fun love a bich we u get her pissed
Likes: nature animals friends
Dislikes: mean people
Fears: die by her weakness
Bio:eve can for a diffent world her plant get desrode by aline invaders. So her father and mother set her to eath the rest se does not reamber
Powers/Abilities Powers: all of her human bio in inhased 10 fold she can bot miss a shot she has an arrow hold that never run out of arrows she has super human traking and superhuman traping and hunting skills
Weakness(s): the stone from the home world that loked up
Abilities: she can call animal to her side to help her
Skills: she master at sixiy two diffent weapons and six fighting stilese
Other Favorite Motto/Saying:
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 1:53 pm


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Srsly?

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 2:22 pm


What
PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 2:56 pm


"What?" "What?" You honestly don't see any problems with this? This is the definition of illiterate; there is nothing passable about this. This isn't even a character, this is a gathering of lower-cased letters without any sort of direction or purpose. I've seen you before, and you have absolutely no semblance of an idea what you're doing when it comes to roleplaying. Nearly everything is misspelled, and there isn't an attempt to use correct punctuation... or any punctuation as it were.

That doesn't even begin to touch what's wrong with the actual "character" attempt here.

Ignoring all the blatant capitalization mistakes, "Eve" is one name... last I checked, people have two, even if this is just a moot point, it's a point nonetheless.

It's "Young Justice"... "Justice"... not "justes"... "Justice."

Since I'm certain this character is supposed to be of an anatomy similar to a human's, let me just say that none of the height, weight, age numbers work. If a person were to be 6'2" and weigh only 90 pounds (also, pounds) they would be bedridden because their anatomy couldn't support its own meager weight under the strain of its height. Not to mention that your character is only supposed to be 14 years old, and a girl for godsake.

For all of the sections where a list is called for, it's generally a good idea to use these nifty little devices called "commas". They look like this: , and they are located just above the "alt" key on your keyboard. Go ahead, press the key and see for yourself... I can wait.

You back? Excellent, let's continue. Your "biography" here. It isn't a biography. Even if your character can't remember her life before, it still happened, and still needs to be relayed. I think it also goes without saying that there isn't a correctly spelled word in the bio, but we're well past the need for me to say that.

A master of "sixiy two" weapons, eh? Impressive. What does a "sixiy" look like? And what's a fighting "stilese"? Also, how has someone who came from a different planet so young mastered so much? Her only "power" seems to enhanced physical ability, nothing of a better grasp on training, and having an unlimited supply of arrows without any particular explanation seems a bit... ridiculous, to put it nicely. Also, just a heads-up, saying you "can't miss" is complete god-modding. Everyone can mess up. Your character sheet is proof.

One last note... this "stone" from her planet that "loked up"... why does it matter to her? If it's her only weakness, where is it? How could someone find it? Your character is essentially unkillable, as no other weakness has been specified. Plus, she doesn't seem to have any sort of energy-based ability, so what's a f*cking stone going to do, anyway?

I wont bother pointing out all of the grammar, punctuation, and other errors here, because I would like to have free time for the next week.

I think this adequately answers your query... even though I'm still not certain it was a query, as there wasn't a question mark at the end of it...

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 3:06 pm


Sorry I am dislaset so could u help I suck at spell sorry and I not good with bio sorry
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