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 Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2012 9:42 pm
From time to time I'll be posting slowly. Due to my council responsibilities. Here are my characters:
Timothy Fahrenheit
Llewelyn Curt Lee
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Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2012 9:48 pm
Timothy Fahrenheit
- He's literally a bad guy from the start.
- I'll always remind myself to RP him base on his personality like being a dirt-hater. I always fail to do this.
- I need to RP him more
I'll add later:
- Being obsess with Ayu
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Llewelyn Lee
- I need to RP him more too.
Basically, over all. I need to RP my characters more often, I'll add things and tried to furnish everything once I've got time to RP again.
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Posted: Mon Jul 02, 2012 6:52 pm
Hi, Kyouh! I just thought I'd drop by and do some evaluations and talk to you about your characters.
First, let's talk about Timothy. Since there were a lot of changes in Rosentale since Timothy came along, some of his flaws won't be able to work as flaws. Being scared of flying cockroaches is more of something that should go in the dislike area rather than the flaws. Sure, it might make him look like a wimp when cockroaches pop up and that would impact him negatively, but it's not like Rosentale has an army of flying cockroaches flying around all the time. ^^
Being easily distracted by beauty isn't much of a flaw because by the way you word it, only beautiful things can distract him, right? But it would work if you just said that he was easily distracted and that would mean that he would have trouble getting his work done all the time because of how easily distracted he is.
The other two flaws are fine and we just need one more for you to add for Timothy. ^^
Also, there's the question about his fast running. Exactly how fast can he run because running as fast as the wind is a bit too vague for a description of how fast he can run. ^^
Also, I wanted to talk to you about Timothy being a prefect. I heard that you were busy with things in real life, so your activity can't be as active as it used to be so if that's the case, we would like to take Timothy off of the prefect list since prefects have to be people who can be active all the time. ^^
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Then there's Llewelyn. Some of his flaws actually wouldn't be considered flaws and you might have to make some changes. People can be "sometimes" arrogant depending on the situation. For it to be a flaw, it would have to be arrogant all the time. As for his being a subtle pervert, does that mean that he'll be a pervert to everyone or just Colleen. Anyone could be a pervert and notice things and think things, but when they act upon it and do something that other people wouldn't like and make them think he's a pervert, then that's when it's a flaw. Now if he's just a pervert to Colleen, that would fall under "Being Obsessed with Colleen" and wouldn't stand out as its own flaw.
Being disturbed upon seeing blood is probably something that should go under the dislikes category. Reckless when using his weapons is not a flaw. I don't think he should be running around with weapons anyways since he's not a security guard and is just a substitute teacher. Being just reckless can be a flaw too, but you have to remember his other personality traits that you have listed. It's hard to roleplay a character that's calm as well as reckless. So you might want to think a bit about the last flaws and how they mesh with his other personality traits. ^^
And I think that's all I was concerned about. =D You just need to fix those a bit and I'll take a look again. ^^
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