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 Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 6:52 pm
This is my first time doing this and I'm not sure exactly how to get started but hopefully I'm doing this right.
It was a freezing cold night. The snow was falling hard. I wished my pitiful little flame would blaze up into a giant bonfire. My name is Bella. I don't have a last name because I don't know my parents. I grew up an orphan living off the streets. I think I might be about 14 Lately, the insults from the rich kid's became too much so I decided to live in the forest.
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 7:11 pm
This is an okay starter post from a first person perspective, but what the first posts in any RP should look like is more of a description of the RP itself. Start by choosing a genre (Action/Adventure,Sci-fi/Fantasy, Romance, etc.) Then start a thread for your new roleplay. Then give it some spice, say, a name, and setting. Give it plot that makes others interested in joining. Once you have the idea set up, you then specify what information you want other people's characters to have, called a "character skeleton", or "skelly" as many call it. A skelly looks something like this: Gaia Username: Name: Age: Sex: Personality: Bio: Pic: Other Info: For more info, check here.Then, once you have other people's skeletons for their characters posted, you can start the roleplay! Hope this helps!
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 7:17 pm
thanks Z4nz1b4r This is an okay starter post from a first person perspective, but what the first posts in any RP should look like is more of a description of the RP itself. Start by choosing a genre (Action/Adventure,Sci-fi/Fantasy, Romance, etc.) Then start a thread for your new roleplay. Then give it some spice, say, a name, and setting. Give it plot that makes others interested in joining. Once you have the idea set up, you then specify what information you want other people's characters to have, called a "character skeleton", or "skelly" as many call it. A skelly looks something like this: Gaia Username: Name: Age: Sex: Personality: Bio: Pic: Other Info: For more info, check here.Then, once you have other people's skeletons for their characters posted, you can start the roleplay! Hope this helps!
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 7:25 pm
No problem. If you have any questions, lots of these guildies should help you out if you ask them in a PM. And don't forget, the crew, captains, and leaders practically ask you to PM them from time to time sweatdrop so don't hesitate to ask them for help either. Oh, and welcome to the world of roleplay! You're gonna love it ^~^
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Angstbucket Edgelord Captain
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Posted: Wed May 09, 2012 10:32 am
Z4nz1b4r This is an okay starter post from a first person perspective, but what the first posts in any RP should look like is more of a description of the RP itself. Start by choosing a genre (Action/Adventure,Sci-fi/Fantasy, Romance, etc.) Then start a thread for your new roleplay. Then give it some spice, say, a name, and setting. Give it plot that makes others interested in joining. Once you have the idea set up, you then specify what information you want other people's characters to have, called a "character skeleton", or "skelly" as many call it. A skelly looks something like this: Gaia Username: Name: Age: Sex: Personality: Bio: Pic: Other Info: For more info, check here.Then, once you have other people's skeletons for their characters posted, you can start the roleplay! Hope this helps!
*blushes* I had no idea anyone actually read that, though~
yum_puddi
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Posted: Wed May 09, 2012 12:15 pm
Alright, let me start by welcoming you.
Roleplaying is fantastic fun and can really build a skilled writer. I credit it with all my skill that I currently possess.
As long as you want to be a better writer so that you are always striving to produce quality and intrigue with your posts, then you will definitely grow as a writer and get the most out of your RPing experience.
Now, I am a very literate roleplayer, but I didn't start out that way.
I'm ashamed to say that I started out as one of the horrid ones that used *action* -type writing.
I would say, the first thing you should do is to start by writing in the third person, past tense.
Your character is not you, so you use 'he'/'she' when writing. And you are writing about what they did so 'was' instead of 'is'.
Very few RPs allow for first person present and it is often considered a lesser form of writing.
Some novels are written in first person but, also, it is often frowned upon by agents and publishers.
So that would change your post to:Quote: It was a freezing cold night. The snow was falling hard. She wished her pitiful little flame would blaze up into a giant bonfire. Her name was Bella. She didn't have a last name because she didn't know her parents. She grew up an orphan living off the streets. She thought that she might be about 14. Lately, the insults from the rich kid's became too much so she decided to live in the forest.
Your first two sentences, are about on par with 'It was night. It was cold.' except you say, 'It was cold. It was snowing.'
Instead, try something like this.
Remember, it isn't just conveying what the weather was, but how it effects your character.
If she were inside they weather would be of small note, but she is outside, alone in the forest.
The weather is a huge part of the setting, her current motivation, her current conflict, and possibly a driving force behind what happens next.Quote: Bony, bare hands rubbed futilely at the arms of her threadbare jacket as Belle rocked back and forth. Perched on a small stump, dwarfed by the colossal forest around her and shamed by her total lack of survival skill, she thought, not for the first time, that this might have been a poor decision. Her tiny flame licked at the twigs she had intended as tinder with no real interest or hunger. How could a house burn down in minutes but dry wood seemed to be flame retardant when she needed it to burn? In less than twelve hours this plan had quickly diminished in appeal. The kids in school though, they just wouldn't leave her alone. Bethany Richards, blonde, beautiful and a total b***h. She had the whole package. A rich family, head of the cheerleading squad and the object of every middle school boy's crush. Why would Belle even register on her radar? Why couldn't she just leave her alone? For whatever reason, Belle had become her personal punching bag for verbal and emotional abuse. And where the popular girl led, others followed. Even that group of socially inept trombone players of halotosis and acne. Belle was safe from no one. New to the school this year, the result of being placed with yet another foster family, she had no ties to anyone and no history in the school. The teachers were upset that she was behind and her past disciplinary issues in school made her unpopular with the administration. Her newest set of foster parents were no different from the last, they just wanted her for the money. She didn't feel bad about leaving. She had long ago lost home in ever being adopted. The freezing wind raked over her skin like razor blades. drawing a shuddered breath from her lips. The small flame flickered once. Twice. And extinguished with a small hiss and snake of smoke from beneath the still perfectly unseered pyre that she had constructed. All that she had suceeded in was burning some dry leaves and seering the ends of some twigs. Nothing that she couldn't have done by sitting next to a Bic lighter. Winter winds howled through the trees laughing at her plight. The small girl. No idea who her real parents were, what her last name would have been, or even where she was going. A girl with no history. But she couldn't help but wonder if she would have a future worth fighting for. Fourteen years of disappointment weighed heavy on her shoulders as she dropped her head to her bent knees, wrapping her arms around her legs and cried. Soul-deep sobs that were swallowed in the fury of the coming storm.
What I did, when I began writing, was to find other people whose writing styles that I liked, read their stuff and analyzed how they did it. So, if you have any questions, feel free to ask. I hope that this has helped. I'd also be willing to tutor you if you would like.
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Angstbucket Edgelord Captain
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2012 7:05 am
Robotic KiaKat Alright, let me start by welcoming you.
Roleplaying is fantastic fun and can really build a skilled writer. I credit it with all my skill that I currently possess.
As long as you want to be a better writer so that you are always striving to produce quality and intrigue with your posts, then you will definitely grow as a writer and get the most out of your RPing experience.
Now, I am a very literate roleplayer, but I didn't start out that way.
I'm ashamed to say that I started out as one of the horrid ones that used *action* -type writing.
I would say, the first thing you should do is to start by writing in the third person, past tense.
Your character is not you, so you use 'he'/'she' when writing. And you are writing about what they did so 'was' instead of 'is'.
Very few RPs allow for first person present and it is often considered a lesser form of writing.
Some novels are written in first person but, also, it is often frowned upon by agents and publishers.
So that would change your post to:Quote: It was a freezing cold night. The snow was falling hard. She wished her pitiful little flame would blaze up into a giant bonfire. Her name was Bella. She didn't have a last name because she didn't know her parents. She grew up an orphan living off the streets. She thought that she might be about 14. Lately, the insults from the rich kid's became too much so she decided to live in the forest.
Your first two sentences, are about on par with 'It was night. It was cold.' except you say, 'It was cold. It was snowing.'
Instead, try something like this.
Remember, it isn't just conveying what the weather was, but how it effects your character.
If she were inside they weather would be of small note, but she is outside, alone in the forest.
The weather is a huge part of the setting, her current motivation, her current conflict, and possibly a driving force behind what happens next.Quote: Bony, bare hands rubbed futilely at the arms of her threadbare jacket as Belle rocked back and forth. Perched on a small stump, dwarfed by the colossal forest around her and shamed by her total lack of survival skill, she thought, not for the first time, that this might have been a poor decision. Her tiny flame licked at the twigs she had intended as tinder with no real interest or hunger. How could a house burn down in minutes but dry wood seemed to be flame retardant when she needed it to burn? In less than twelve hours this plan had quickly diminished in appeal. The kids in school though, they just wouldn't leave her alone. Bethany Richards, blonde, beautiful and a total b***h. She had the whole package. A rich family, head of the cheerleading squad and the object of every middle school boy's crush. Why would Belle even register on her radar? Why couldn't she just leave her alone? For whatever reason, Belle had become her personal punching bag for verbal and emotional abuse. And where the popular girl led, others followed. Even that group of socially inept trombone players of halotosis and acne. Belle was safe from no one. New to the school this year, the result of being placed with yet another foster family, she had no ties to anyone and no history in the school. The teachers were upset that she was behind and her past disciplinary issues in school made her unpopular with the administration. Her newest set of foster parents were no different from the last, they just wanted her for the money. She didn't feel bad about leaving. She had long ago lost home in ever being adopted. The freezing wind raked over her skin like razor blades. drawing a shuddered breath from her lips. The small flame flickered once. Twice. And extinguished with a small hiss and snake of smoke from beneath the still perfectly unseered pyre that she had constructed. All that she had suceeded in was burning some dry leaves and seering the ends of some twigs. Nothing that she couldn't have done by sitting next to a Bic lighter. Winter winds howled through the trees laughing at her plight. The small girl. No idea who her real parents were, what her last name would have been, or even where she was going. A girl with no history. But she couldn't help but wonder if she would have a future worth fighting for. Fourteen years of disappointment weighed heavy on her shoulders as she dropped her head to her bent knees, wrapping her arms around her legs and cried. Soul-deep sobs that were swallowed in the fury of the coming storm.
What I did, when I began writing, was to find other people whose writing styles that I liked, read their stuff and analyzed how they did it. So, if you have any questions, feel free to ask. I hope that this has helped. I'd also be willing to tutor you if you would like.
emotion_awesome Could you tutor me?
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2012 1:24 pm
PoppiHollaPuddelz That's amazingly in-depth 4laugh If you'd like to tutor someone, check out the Tutorial Subforum~
emotion_awesome Could you tutor me? Of course. And I'll go check out the tutorial forum as well.
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High-functioning Snowflake
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2012 10:13 am
I agree with you about the third-person speech of any roleplay post, but at the same time it interests me how many renowned authors used first-person speech for some of their most significant creations. For example: Most of the mystery stories by Poe, Dracula by Bram Stoker, Rebecca ny Daphne Du Maurier and Jane Eyre by Bronte. On closer inspection, I somehow felt that using first person may seem more challenging than third...I'd like to try out first-person speech sometime...
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2012 10:21 am
Vruez I agree with you about the third-person speech of any roleplay post, but at the same time it interests me how many renowned authors used first-person speech for some of their most significant creations. For example: Most of the mystery stories by Poe, Dracula by Bram Stoker, Rebecca ny Daphne Du Maurier and Jane Eyre by Bronte. On closer inspection, I somehow felt that using first person may seem more challenging than third...I'd like to try out first-person speech sometime... It depends on what ur shooting for. third person is more suitable for roleplaying because of what it is. it allows for the inclusion of others easier. but a first person perspective could be really *really* in depth for a 1x1, as a person's thoughts can be included a whole lot easier. plus, it'd be more personal that way. like i said, it really depends on what ur shooting for, but everyone would have to be on the same page from the start. Ive done it a few times, some didnt work out, some did-when they did, they were incredible biggrin
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High-functioning Snowflake
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2012 10:32 am
Z4nz1b4r It depends on what ur shooting for. third person is more suitable for roleplaying because of what it is. it allows for the inclusion of others easier. but a first person perspective could be really *really* in depth for a 1x1, as a person's thoughts can be included a whole lot easier. plus, it'd be more personal that way. like i said, it really depends on what ur shooting for, but everyone would have to be on the same page from the start. Ive done it a few times, some didnt work out, some did-when they did, they were incredible biggrin Exactly what I meant. First person allows more intense emotions, and all those precious sporadic thoughts that goes amiss when you use third-person. But is it really that difficult to include others ? Because first person would allow you to describe exactly how you feel and not just what you imply... Woww....would definitely like to see some of those. Bet they were well on the originality route. :3 And yep, a first-person 1x1 would probably be something to watch out for. Especially if the story is more..psychological. biggrin
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2012 5:40 pm
well, i guess it wouldnt be that difficult, you'd just have to have some really devoted roleplayers, so it's probably a good idea to stick with the lit group with those.
And yeah, lol reading those 1x1's really gets you into it, you start thinking like the characters and stuff....pretty epic 3nodding
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