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 Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2012 11:39 am
I'm not much of a short-story person, so I'm going to go for poetry for all of these, if I can. I HAVE been telling myself I need to write more poetry... biggrin
I SURVIVED TWO WEEKS!!! heart
Week III
015. Explosion
016. Money
017. Traveling Alone
018. Irony
019. Lust
020. Identity Crisis
021. Being Replaced
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Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2012 9:14 pm
I'm also starting tomorrow. Anyways, I'd be waiting for your pieces. emotion_c8
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2012 12:25 am
Day 001 - New Beginnings - 04/15/12
There is something to be said
For the setting of a goal.
The beginning of a story
Is encouraging to the soul.
The wish that it will go well,
The hope for perfect change,
That maybe you will discover
The beautiful and strange.
Maybe your life will settle
Around the perfect choice.
Perhaps in writing every day
You will find your voice.
To those of you who start anew,
I wish you all the best.
I pray that you will find your hope
And pass this daunting test.
Though a tale can begin
And end so great and old,
It can also fall apart-
A story never told.
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2012 5:49 am
I really enjoyed how... relevant this was, in a way, to the challenge and the prompt, but how still very personal it was. I also really enjoyed how it was pretty hopeful and optimistic the whole way through, save for the last stanza, which is a tiny bit bleaker, almost like a warning that stories should be written/shared and not kept and untold.
It's going to be interesting to read from you. Can't wait to see more.
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2012 10:19 am
xVoldie I really enjoyed how... relevant this was, in a way, to the challenge and the prompt, but how still very personal it was. I also really enjoyed how it was pretty hopeful and optimistic the whole way through, save for the last stanza, which is a tiny bit bleaker, almost like a warning that stories should be written/shared and not kept and untold.
It's going to be interesting to read from you. Can't wait to see more. Thank you very much! biggrin Obviously some of the prompts aren't going to turn into poems this easily. But I'll try to keep doing well 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2012 11:51 am
Kudos to you for taking on the challenge of a more structured format. I think it flowed well, and certainly its message was relevant to the challenge. Good luck!
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 12:14 am
Day 002 - Cause/Effect - 04/16/12
A consequence to every choice
Is what I learned in school.
"Bad decisions have bad effects,
So don't you be a fool."
Though I always knew the words,
I didn't really see
That all those simple warnings
Were also meant for me.
I never truly realized
The wisdom I could gain,
Right until I first slipped up
And caused a friend much pain.
The warning is not only for
The deliberately coarse,
But also for the kinder ones
Who are quick to feel remorse.
A consequence to every choice:
Remember these words well,
For innocent intentions
Pave the road to Hell.
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:53 am
Lea Fealith Kudos to you for taking on the challenge of a more structured format. I think it flowed well, and certainly its message was relevant to the challenge. Good luck! Thank you! I tend to be quite critical of freestyle poetry myself, since more often than not it seems like it's just prose divided randomly into lines to make it look more like a poem.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2012 1:19 am
Day 003 - Peace of Mind - 04/17/12
My memory is a cruel thing,
For easiest to recall
Are not the happy moments
But the failure in it all.
All the things that I've done wrong-
And nothing I've done right-
Are always there to taint my thoughts
And cause me sleepless nights.
I wish I could forget the places,
The things that I have done,
But I can't escape these memories
However far I run.
I simply want to look back once
And feel somewhat proud,
But my cruel mind has deemed that is
A privilege not allowed.
Memories without pain
Are impossible to find...
I would give most anything
For a little peace of mind.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2012 7:11 am
Unfortunately, the last one is much too relateable. >< Heh. I guess it's not really unfortunate. Writing tends to bring people of similiar ideas and thought patterns together.
I think I like the second stanza most of all, but all, though they rhyme, seem very organic and natural - not forced is what I mean. *nod* And I enjoyed the slip of the prompt in there to tie it all together.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2012 11:28 am
xVoldie Unfortunately, the last one is much too relateable. >< Heh. I guess it's not really unfortunate. Writing tends to bring people of similiar ideas and thought patterns together.
I think I like the second stanza most of all, but all, though they rhyme, seem very organic and natural - not forced is what I mean. *nod* And I enjoyed the slip of the prompt in there to tie it all together. Thank you! I know there are a couple things that could be fixed, but I don't know how to fix them and I won't worry about it unless I someday decide to compile my poetry into a book. 3nodding Thanks for reading and for the comments!
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2012 1:50 am
Day 004 - Childhood Memories - 04/18/12
In reliving childhood days,
I waste so many hours.
Life was simpler as a child-
School, friends, and flowers.
My relatives were always great,
Far better than the rest.
Pokémon cards and video games-
My cousin was the best!
Those times were so much simpler,
Smiling, friends, and birds,
Before I learned the hardest way
Of the pain of words.
I long for such simplicity as
Dreaming angels' wings.
Throughout all these older years
I've lost so many things.
The contrast between then and now
Is like pure white and black...
It's hard to not just waste away,
Wishing to go back.
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Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2012 12:12 am
Day 005 - Speed - 04/19/12
Maybe you need to speed up -
Life should not drag on.
But remember to have some fun
Before it is all gone.
Don't just crawl through all the days-
Slow time wastes life, too.
Just take the world at the pace
That feels most right to you.
Sometimes life is like a dance-
You need to start it slow.
But as you learn all of the moves
The faster, then, you go.
So take the world at your own pace,
And try to live life right.
Make all the best decisions you can
To sleep well each night.
But just make sure that you do not
Let it go too fast,
For life can feel so very short
And good times never last.
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Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 1:26 am
Day 006 - Mayhem - 04/20/12
It doesn't make much sense-
She should be just fine.
Her life is not more difficult
Or threatening than mine.
But when I take a moment
To figure how she works,
I learn that maybe her dark words
Are not just little quirks.
She and I have the same world
But she has different eyes.
Where I praise every truth,
She fears all the lies.
Where I might see the sunshine
Glowing as days go well,
She sees all the shadowed holes
Where evil things may dwell.
Take a look at how she thinks
And I know you will find
That there could never be an end
To the mayhem in her mind.
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Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 8:24 am
You definitely have a great sense of how words should flow within a poem. I feel like you have major potential. I like your Mayhem & Speed. I feel though you should include some different vocabulary to help spruce things up. Pick the perfect words for each line. The perfect word changes everything. & I also wish your poems contained more emotion. Other than that. 365 Poetry is a brilliant idea for this challenge. I cannot wait to see how your writing develops & learn something for myself about poetry.
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