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 Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2012 7:57 am
You gave birth to me and taught me how to care. you stood by me when no one else was there. I know that for me there Is limit to how far u would bend and that to your love fore me there is no end even though I am 23 u still check on me when I am sleeping at night when I am feeling down you hug me tight and tell me that its all right just in case Ive never told you how much I appreciate you thank you mom and I love you
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2012 2:52 am
How sweet. May I give some constructive criticism?
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2012 11:08 am
sure constructive criticism never hurts
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2012 2:19 pm
It's just on your grammar and spelling. I'm not sure if you proofread your post or not either. Typos do happen lol. But don't forget to capitalize the beginning of sentences like with the second one. Is shouldn't be capitalized where you have it, and I think you meant "there is no limit." In this context you want for not fore. Also, you have some run on sentences. Add more punctuation.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 10:24 am
I will keep that in mined for sure thanks for the advice
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