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Hm, it's OK, although you'll need to fix the image, because it's being naughty.
A succubus? Clearly somebody watches Lost Girl... x) <3
Whilst her demon attributes are all fine and well, she isn't a seductress in nature, which makes me hesitant for you to use the whole succubus thang. May I suggest eliminating her sexual ability and focusing only on the demon/flying thang? It wouldn't require changing her past or fears, only her spontaneous realization that she's a seductress. Of course, if you'd really like to keep the seductress attribute, it may be worth including a sentence or two of a time when she put the ability to use, just to tie things together.
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