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Personality:

"I wish to make the world better, not worse." [Approachable >> Restrained]
Seraphan is generally easygoing and easy to approach. He likes speaking to people and hearing what they have to say, and he's generally willing to hear people out, though he generally does not tolerate speech that promotes the harm or oppression of others. He's quiet and not frightening or unfriendly, despite his intimidating appearance, and he tends to find humor in the people around him and in his immediate situation. And while he sometimes causes offense due to his lack of understanding of modern society, he usually means well at heart; he doesn't try to hurt others for fun.

However, he has difficulty displaying emotion, even when it's warranted or expected. This is a necessary check that he imposes on himself; if he were to become angry and lose control of his powers, he could cause a lot of damage to innocent bystanders. So he controls his displays of emotion, acts calm even when he feels anything but, and tries to resolve arguments quietly or reasonably, preventing them from escalating. It's difficult (though not impossible) to provoke him into so much as raising his voice. This restraint also extends to emotional displays in general; while he might sympathize with someone, he won't do so emotionally and tearfully -- and if he were to strike down an enemy, it would be with as little outward emotion as possible.

"Much has changed. Better to stay quiet and be thought a fool, than to speak and prove it." [Naive >> Inquisitive]
Seraphan has only been back on the ground, interacting with people frequently, for a few months. While he had the opportunity to watch people from within the clouds he hid in, watching did not prepare him for actually interacting with them, and he's surprisingly ignorant of many things people might consider commonplace. For example, he would be curious about piercings, not understanding why people would do something painful for aesthetic purposes. He is still learning the unspoken rules of interacting with people in general; having spent so long in self-contemplation, he doesn't understand why some of his questions would be considered offensively personal or upsetting. For example, he would ask someone why they say one thing and act another way, and then simply not comprehend why it might upset them. He also has difficulty understanding jokes that rely on things like societal norms, or stereotypes, as he simply doesn't understand them.

Having stepped on a few toes in the past with questions he never meant to be offensive, he prefers to look, listen, and learn first, rather than simply diving headfirst into a situation. When he's actively interacting, not just watching from afar, he often asks questions about people's opinions and viewpoints on a variety of topics, both philosophical (the nature of good and evil) and mundane (why another person acts the way they do). While he's sometimes satisfied by short answers, he really prefers long debates and discussions, though he tends to listen more than he speaks, or to volunteer to take the opposing position just to get more information. He's honestly interested in hearing everyone's opinion, and he's willing to listen to all perspectives in the name of furthering his understanding. After all, one of the ideals he believes in is freedom -- and that includes freedom to believe anything, so long as it doesn't harm anyone and others can have the same freedom.

"The laws of this region were made for the protection and betterment of all. I may follow the spirit of the law, but I am not a slave to the letter of it."[Contemplative >> Good Intentions]
Seraphan engages in a lot of philosophizing and deep thought. He's had a very, very long time to simply ponder what is right and what is not, and he continues to do so as a gijinka. If he can, he will take his time making a decision, and ponder at length about the morality and consequences of his choices. His set of ideals are the result of many years spent thinking carefully about right and wrong, as they appear to him, for example. He generally doesn't rush into decisions, and will usually hear out both sides of an argument before he settles on a conclusion.

However, he formed his ideals without much caring about the laws of the regions he now inhabits. To him, actions that promote the happiness and welfare of others are just and right -- whether or not those actions break the law. He considers both law and freedom to be necessary so that the most people can be happy, and has no bias for or against either. But, though he follows the law when he can, he does not feel beholden to it, and he will not hesitate to break laws if he thinks it would bring about greater good for others. For example, if he caught a man stealing bread to feed a family, he would return the stolen bread, then give the man some money to legally buy food and let him go, because following the law and calling the police on the man would just hurt him and his family more. He would also not hesitate to break a law if he found it to be cruel, oppressive, or harmful.

"When I think about it, I wonder...is the world we once sought to create now out of reach? Or was it never within our reach?" [Virtuous >> Doubtful]
As a Pokemon born of ideals, Seraphan believes wholeheartedly in the capability of humans and Pokemon alike to be good, to learn to embrace their differences along with their similarities, and to work together to improve the world. He also believes that he should act to uphold his beliefs and make the world a better place, whether his actions are big or small; he's willing to intervene to prevent a crime, share a meal with someone who had no food, or even just listen to someone who's had a bad day. While he's not a vigilante -- he doesn't go out and search out wrongs to right -- he won't just watch a crime he could prevent, and if someone comes to him for help, he'll do everything in his power to help. It's less about compassion, and more about his dedication to his ideals. For him, it's easier to simply help people, no strings attached, than it is to actually become friends or make a real connection with them.

However, while he's confident that the ideals he follows are right for him, and he believes that he's doing the right thing in helping others, he is no longer certain whether others share his conviction. He envisions a world where cooperation and acceptance are practiced as well as preached, but he knows that he could never achieve such a world by himself, no matter how powerful he is. He's been rather dismayed to find out just how few people share his ideals, and he's come to doubt whether such a world could ever be possible.

"The good must be protected; the wicked must be punished. I will not falter." [Protective >> Dutiful]
Seraphan's first goal is to help people -- and sometimes he must do so by protecting them from others. Though he does not go out looking for wrongs to right and crimes to prevent, he will not hesitate to step in if he sees one, or if he's asked for help. He is still a warrior at heart -- after all, he was born from conflict -- although he will try peaceful methods if possible, and he considers force and lethal force to be last resorts. If he's pushed to that point, though, he will not hesitate to use them. For example, he wouldn't try to kill a small-time pickpocket, but if killing a person will save a victim in immediate danger of being killed, he will do so. He does not hold his own well-being above that of others, and will intervene even if he must put himself in danger.

Although he is normally confident in his decisions, he doesn't want to let that confidence become prideful stubbornness, which could cause harm instead of good. If he's been wrong -- and despite his best efforts, he sometimes is -- he feels a great deal of remorse and concern over his error, and will immediately attempt to repair any damage done.

Strengths: Seraphan is a very powerful fighter; his combat instinct was honed through long battles against his own brother, with whom he was evenly matched. He is physically strong and sturdy, and although he's not particularly fast or agile on the ground, he's a strong flier. He learns quickly, and his transition back into the human world is going (relatively) smoothly; he has a surprising talent for cooking, even though his wings are often a hindrance in the kitchen.
Weaknesses: He hates the cold and, as a Pokemon used to reigning over the skies, he's actually very claustrophobic. Though he's fine with buildings as long as their rooms are fairly large, he gets uncomfortable with small rooms, where he can touch the walls with his wings if he spreads them; closets are worse. Both situations leave him distracted, unfocused, and performing at far less than his best, and he becomes agitated and restless more easily; in an extreme situation (e.g., a space so small he could barely move), he would probably be too panicked to think rationally. Also, although he's fairly good at watching and learning from other people, he finds it difficult to make actual friendships, which would benefit his mental state in the long run.

Hello! o uo I will be your friendly crit staff representative today~ If you have any questions, feel free to ask!

I'll be moving right along to personality, obviously, haha-- no need to critique art information for art you already have > A>;;; Not that I usually do anyway- ah, rambling. I won't be critting the history today, because I see that you want to change it potentially at a later date.

Personality
Overview: It doesn't seem like he should have to be "brave," or that the trait suits him particularly; as a zekrom, I feel like it should be a given that there's not a whole lot that's gonna freak him out, unless you specify that there is (which doubtful covers). Perhaps consider swapping it out for Observative, or even Cognizant, to reflect his skill at analyzing situations or others. At the moment, his personality seems really divided: it looks like you've written his personality both pre-doubt and post-doubt, so it muddles all the traits together. I would say pick the side which is most current (the doubtful side, I imagine) and write his personality only from that perspective. You can, in his history, perhaps talk about how he used to be, but this section would ideally show how he is now. So, for example, with all the doubt and all the things he has seen about beings "tearing the world apart," why would he honestly still be idealistic? Hopeful, sure, but I can't imagine that as being a neutral trait even then.

Brave: In order to be brave, usually the notion is that one feels fear but acts despite that fear? This trait is a little scattered, and I think that perhaps you might consider reworking it in light of the "doubtful" trait, because it doesn't make him sound all that brave, really-- it seems like he's entirely unsure of himself. Maybe it's just a question of putting less emphasis on his doubts in this trait, and trying to focus primarily on what makes him brave: is he brave around others, is he brave in a way that means he'll save someone from an impossible situation, etc...? You might even find a better positive trait than "brave," because this is a legendary Zekrom we're talking about here, so it seems like kind of a moot point: when would Zekrom really have to be brave? It says he's "brave" in daily life, but trying new things isn't really bravery, so much as a willingness to experiment. Keeping an open mind is definitely not bravery. "He has nothing to fear; few people could hurt him if they tried." If it wasn't for his doubtfulness, I'd say that it sounds more like "self-assuredness" or "self-confidence," but in this case because he's so doubtful even that wouldn't work. In any case, I don't really see him as being particularly brave given the text here. Maybe you could consider "valiant" instead, and work that in?

Thoughtful: I think Contemplative would be the right word for this; "thoughtful" usually implies that someone is considerate of others, but contemplative would be the word for thinking a lot. This makes him being thoughtful sound like a reflex developed to counteract the fact that he can't interact very smoothly with others (a flaw?). I think if you try to tone up what exactly is positive about this trait, then maybe it would seem more like a strength. In fact, this even seems more like a neutral trait, the way it's worded right now: he tries to hang back and observe, which isn't necessarily a good or bad thing. I would say it's the way that he chooses to act on these observations which would be a positive or a negative. I'm not sure that provoking people is a positive thing, either; he seems argumentative and socially inept in this trait, neither of which strike me as a particular strength...?

Idealistic: His trait of hanging back and observing seems to fit rather uncomfortably with an idealistic sense of altruism; could you maybe elaborate more on how these two traits interact? Especially because it seems like he has good observational skills, but in this trait it says that he gets manipulate or hurt surprisingly easily. I feel a little like this trait is maybe viewed as altruism from an outside point of view, but is a personal weakness, in the sense that people often say "he is too kind for his own good," while I typically consider a neutral trait to be a trait which, on its own, has no inherent value in terms of strength or weakness, but rather the way in which it is uses changes it from one to the other. So, for example, if you were to claim determination was a neutral trait, you could then carry on to say it is a strength when it means that he can complete many tasks, even daunting ones, because he's so determined to finish... but on the other hand, he sometimes misjudges a task's worth or meaning, and takes on impossible toils which wear him out, just because he's too determined to see when it's better to walk away. In this sense, I'd definitely like to see what "fortune" this trait gives him, exactly? How has he, with all his experience and observations, remained idealistic? That trait is typically associated with the youthful or gullible.

Doubtful: This trait seems to mar all the other traits, and it looks like you've got two personalities going on. Basically, this trait does make sense, but at the moment it messes with so many of the other traits that I think his personality needs to be tweaked to represent this?... With a trait so overwhelmingly negative, it's important that you qualify it so that you / we really know how it interacts with his other traits. For example, is there anything he still believes in? Can people make him doubt himself so easily as to merely ask him if he isn't sure? Or will he ever stand up for himself? If he's so doubtful, how does he know what's right, how can he even be brave? It's not so much that this can't exist in harmony with the others, is merely important to talk about when which trait overpowers another, etc.

Merciless: If his temper is slow to rouse, and it takes him forever to make up his mind as to who is "good" and who is "evil," how can he simultaneously "still clearly recognize evil for what it is"? Wouldn't he, himself, be perceived as evil for his love of fighting? It seems like this trait is the odd one out, especially given is altruistic "idealism" in his "neutral" trait. It seems more like he should know better than to assume there is a "good" and an "evil," after all his time contemplating, being a legendary.

Strengths: His only strengths are combat-related? Can he do anything else well? Why is he so stressed out over everything, or even "brave," if he's this powerful?
Weaknesses: Again, does he have any other meaningful weaknesses?... Hating the cold is more of a quirk than a weakness, unless he goes into like life-threatening hibernation or something. Claustrophobia can be bad, yes, but again it's situational.

Again, please ask any questions you have! Maybe you could try to summarize what you're going for in 1-2 sentences, like a thesis, if you feel I didn't understand your info well enough o uo

Mmmkay, retooled his personality. I decided that the 5-trait model I was using didn't fit him very well, since I see him as being largely a neutral, observational figure, so I switched to the double-sided model instead. And wrote a huge wall of text |D;; Hopefully he's a bit clearer now~

Aah, thank you Face! xD You're so fast <3

Hmm. I should probably provide examples of what kinds of observations he makes -- generally he doesn't try to be hurtful, he just tends to note unusual or amusing things about people, like he'd note how hypocritical it is for trainers to claim to be friends with Pokemon, then treat them like nothing more than pets. I do have a bad habit of rambling with my traits though xD;; I'll clean it up for sure~

Ah, that's something I should've touched on! Basically, he has difficulty with personally connecting with people -- actually making friends with them -- whereas he's fine with just helping a stranger, then moving on. To him, I think, it's not so much caring about the specific person as it is upholding his ideals.

I might take out the second paragraph, too, since it doesn't seem to fit. I used this page on alignment to describe Seraphan. 'Neutral good' people tend to generally follow the law, and break it when they deem it necessary to bring about more good. 'Chaotic good' people, on the other hand, believe that rules and laws are unnecessary and always bring about harm, and so break the law when they can. Seraphan will generally follow the law, and break it only if he feels he needs to; he still thinks that laws are generally good things, and obeys them. He believes in doing what's necessary to achieve a better world, including force if that's necessary -- and I think it's not that his moral compass is flimsy, so much as it's not aligned like a 'normal' human's would be. He believes something different, that's all. I'll definitely add that in!

Hmm, I might still be unclear -- it's not that he can't figure out what 'the good' is, it's more that he knows what's good to him, and follows that, but he's not sure what's good to everyone else, and that's what he's seeking to understand. He's confident in his own ability to uphold his ideals, he's just not certain whether others feel the same way. I think that the different pairing would be really interesting, though, and I'll see if I can tweak it some!

I'll also clean up [Resolute >> Merciless] -- it's that while he's slower to judge than he used to be, he's still confident in his decisions once he makes them. Of course, being wrong would deeply shake and upset him, and once he realized it, he'd try to fix the situation however possible; he is still fallible. I'm afraid I don't quite see the conflict; he might be reluctant to label people as his enemies, but once he does so, he's not reluctant to fight them. I'll find a better way to describe things, too >u<

Thanks!

Edit: And, revisions done <3 I really appreciate your crits, Face! Seraphan's already a very defined character in my head, so I often have trouble properly describing him to others xD

Okayyy, updated his personality, and after talking with Herb, his history is also ready for crit. Hopefully he flows a little bit better now.