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 Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2012 4:53 pm
She looked out the window, and cried. The rain poured down, as did her tears. She stared out the window, like she stared at the pain within. She left him, and didn't turn back. In the back of her mind that was the worst thing she had done.She still loved him, and it burned. She felt rage within, just like the lightning that struck. Pain flooded in, but she felt so empty. It kept raining, it was the worst storm she ever faced. But, surely enough light was sure to overcome the rain.No longer would she hurt inside.
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 10:48 am
Its hard for me to give an unbiased opinion since I typically don't care for depressing stuff because it's nearly impossible with out it coming out cliche but I'll try. I can see that you struggled to write it and there's nothing wrong with that. It gave me a hard time too >_<. Writing short descriptions is an art form and quite frankly I'm amazed that my first drabble turned out ok. It seemed a little choppy but its hard to make such short descriptions flow. But most importantly did you have fun?
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 2:48 pm
Night Kunoichi Its hard for me to give an unbiased opinion since I typically don't care for depressing stuff because it's nearly impossible with out it coming out cliche but I'll try. I can see that you struggled to write it and there's nothing wrong with that. It gave me a hard time too >_<. Writing short descriptions is an art form and quite frankly I'm amazed that my first drabble turned out ok. It seemed a little choppy but its hard to make such short descriptions flow. But most importantly did you have fun? indeed i had a heck of a time writing it! and i guess i was feeling depressed when i wrote it? but, yeah i had fun....although im not exactly sure if im completely happy with it.....
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 9:53 pm
Haha well if you had fun with it keep practicing! :3 It's enjoyable and can be useful in your more serious writing. I'm toying with another drabble idea now. :]
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:30 pm
Night Kunoichi Haha well if you had fun with it keep practicing! :3 It's enjoyable and can be useful in your more serious writing. I'm toying with another drabble idea now. :] haha well have fun with it. yeah i intend to keep on practicing. i have an idea, but im not quite sure about it....
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:49 pm
What are you not sure about?
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:15 pm
Night Kunoichi What are you not sure about? im not sure on how i want to write my drabble with the idea that i have....
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 4:34 pm
Oh I HATE that! It bugs me so much if I have an idea and I don't know how to execute it!
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 5:47 pm
Night Kunoichi Oh I HATE that! It bugs me so much if I have an idea and I don't know how to execute it! that is how most of my writing goes, i get lost in a fantastic literary world, and then i cant write it on paper!
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