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 Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 10:26 am
this is a poem i wrote about Aeris death.... i don't think it's good enough any suggestions?
I'm falling and i can not awake as i drift to the bottom of this lake
my life worn thin my memory's fade all thats left is the path I made
the path of hope that shine's so bright is still posesed by the dark of night
the evil shadow that's gone insane upon hearing Jenova's name
he shall now answer meters call to summon forth and destroy us all
but fear not upon my plight he shall feel are holy might
these last words are all i can give to stop the one thats tanted by sin
use them wisly and here my call for upon these words sephiroth shall fall
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Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 10:41 am
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Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 3:50 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 6:23 pm
Well contructed poem you have there. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 6:39 am
Good job i wish i could write that well
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 10:16 am
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 11:27 am
Its a very good poem, but you are in violation here. Change the title to something like Aeris' poem and put a SPOILERS along with the title. Some people in the guild still don't know about Aeris' death.
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 11:39 am
I like it but the last two senticn could use some work on it
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 11:51 am
um...Spoiler!
*changes title*
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 1:21 pm
Nice poem, although the lack of punctuation made it a little hard to read.
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 8:12 am
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 11:27 am
your poem was really good! I like to write poetry as well! your last two phrases could use a little rephrasing though. Other than that it was awsome! xd
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 9:56 pm
i dont like it . i dont know i just dont but keep on truncken
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2006 12:55 pm
it's great i can't even do that!!!
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 12:50 pm
that was alwsome man that was great your good at this
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