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Name: Francis Bernard

Nickname: Frankie

Age: 12

Birthday: January 2nd

Sign: Capricorn

Gemstone:  Garnet

Blood Type: O

Fav. Food: Pickles! I got a pickle, I got a pickle! I got a pickle, hey hey hey hey...

Hated Food: Spinach. Who DOESN'T hate spinach?!

School:  Knightside Elementary

Hobbies: 
Gardening - Frankie likes worms. And dirt. And dirt with worms in. It is, in his rather charitable opinion, the coolest thing ever. Even at the respectable age of twelve, he loves to help his mom out in the garden on the weekends. He loves to churn up the mud between his toes, and run around in the sprinkler. Well, ok, so maybe that's not PRECISELY how gardening is supposed to go, but generally Frankie is too riled up to care.

Baseball - Frankie has graduated from t-ball and the days where most kids paid more attention to grasshoppers and the bogeys in their noses than the ball, and is now on a very nearly real baseball team. So what if the local rec center wasn't able to get into the little league scene this year? He doesn't know better, or care, as long as he gets to have fun with his friends.

Climbing Trees- Frankie has a penchant for finding the tallest tree in his immediate proximity, and then promptly attempting to scale it. He's been lucky so far- he hasn't broken anything yet, but he's had some close calls that have his mother scolding him more often than not. She has grudgingly allowed him his habit, as 'boys will be boys', but he is limited to only trees she deems are 'safe' and only allowed to climb as high as the roof of their house.

Tutoring- Frankie is probably not the brightest crayon in the box. Unfortunately, this means he spends a lot of his out-of-school time at school. His lack of focus means he misses a lot in class and is forced to catch up on it later. It's become so commonplace for him that he treats it more like an after school club than a tiresome chore. He always comes into the principal's office with a big grin on his face, ready to chat with his favorite teachers and swap tall tales, and enjoys the one-on-one attention that is missing from the much larger daytime classes.

Virtues:

Enthusiastic - If Frankie finds something interesting, he will be its shameless advocate. Similarly, if he is doing something he likes, he is into it one hundred and ten percent. There is no kind of in this boy's world, no halfway. He doesn't mean to be obnoxious, however. He just loves to express his interest as energetically as possible. This often works in his favor when he is persuaded to focus on his assignments. He doesn't care if his grin looks stupid - he just wants you to know how COOL that thing over there is, ok?

Obedient - In Frankie's house, mom's word is The Law. You don't disobey The Law unless you like scrubbing floors or sitting in corners. And really, Frankie never felt any reason to act out - he has no siblings to compete with, and his mother always doted on him. If you tell him to do something, within reason, he will follow your request to the T. He does his best to always listen to the teacher, and is the kind of kid that will read all the instructions with a new toy or game before playing with it. After all, rules were made to make life easier for everyone, right?

Honest - Frankie shall not tell a lie. Perhaps its because he's terrible at it, or perhaps because he never really understood the point of it in the first place. He learned at a young age that mom is psychic, and that she is ALWAYS ten steps ahead of you -and applies that logic to just about everyone else. Besides, he wants to be trustworthy, and no one can trust a liar. He values the truth, and does his best to avoid lies - even white ones - as much as possible.

Flaws:

Rowdy - Sometimes Frankie's enthusiasm can, frankly, get out of hand. He often finds himself the subject of ridicule when, in his excitement, he breaks something, or messes something up. And once he's riled up, there is no telling what he will do. 'Hyperactive' doesn't quite cover it - this boy is like a bull in a china emporium. And although he means well, and will even admit to his mistakes, it just isn't quite as good as if he'd have had the self control to not let it happen.

Tactless - Honesty is not always the best policy - a concept Frankie has a hard time grasping. Asking your teacher why her nose is shaped like that, or pointing out to a girl that her haircut looks funny aren't exactly going to make the top ten list of smooth moves. His social graces are in general deeply lacking. He is known to burst out with completely inappropriate actions or information, and it usually gets him into a heap of trouble.

Absent-minded - Although he tries his best, Frankie just can't seem to focus on more than one thing at a time. Once something's got his attention, he's oblivious to everything else. Unfortunately this is most troublesome at school, where he may get distracted by a problem or by a picture in a textbook and miss what the teacher was saying. It's not so much that he zones out as it is that he is hyperfocused: his rapt enthusiasm excluding all else from his notice save the current object of his attentions.



PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Purple!

Hair: Dark blue, kid!mullets are amazing ok

Face: Round, no freckles!

Clothes: Knightside Uniform!

Family

Frankie lives with his mother. His dad died while he was too young to remember and his mom works full time as a marketing consultant. She neither had the time nor interest to remarry, and instead dotes upon the child she remains with. They technically share a house with his paternal grandparents, but their living space is actually a small extension apartment built out of the old garage. He likes it here; he's got his own room with a balcony from which he can climb into his favorite tree.

Frankie currently attends Knightside Elementary. He is in 6th grade, as he was held back a year.

Hi, Rav!

Okay, so, trying my hand out with crits. Bear with me!

Civilian

The civilian portion of his profile reads well to me. One of the only things I have to point out is that “tutoring” doesn’t exactly read as a hobby. A person can definitely have tutoring as a hobby, but just because one approaches his or her tutoring good naturedly does not necessarily mean that they particularly enjoy it. Especially with how you have Frankie written, “tutoring” seems more like a habit or an unfortunate circumstance brought about by his lack of attention.

If you’d like to keep it as a hobby, I’d suggest fleshing it out a bit more and explaining what it is about tutoring that he enjoys. Or you could always switch it out for a different hobby that might lead to tutoring!

I noticed in the small tidbit about his family that he has a favorite tree he likes to climb. Tree-climbing would make a wonderful hobby for a twelve year old if you wanted to consider that!

The only other thing I want to point out is really small, but under his virtue of “enthusiastic” you have written “It is not neccessarily obnoxious, however.” While this can definitely be true, you want to be careful with assigning reactions to his personality traits! With the way you have this virtue written, some characters might very well think he’s obnoxious! Others will probably not be so bothered. You should only have to tweak that sentence a little to make it work, maybe say something like "he doesn't do it to be obnoxious, but..."!

Other than that, his civ profile looks good! His other hobbies are very appropriate for his age and should give you plenty of fodder for interactions with him, and his virtues and flaws play off of one another nicely!

Powered

Now onto his attacks! First of all, I love the puns for the attack names! Very cute!

His regular attack looks good, though you should specify how many times it can be used in battle. Looking at some of the existing Chibi senshi, two uses should work well here, and you may even be able to up the time to 20 seconds instead of just 10.

In his Super attack you also want to make sure you have a clear usage limit, as well as specify how long the rain of olives lasts. Since this attack can now be used on two people at once, I think keeping it around 20 seconds and 2 uses per battle should work well here as well! The olives can still linger on the ground after the rain of olives has finished, but I would lower that from a minute to about 30 to 45 seconds.

His Eternal attack looks good to me, although 2 minutes is rather long. Normal battles are generally over pretty quickly, so your attacks shouldn’t be lasting minutes at a time. 30 or 45 seconds should be good, with a usage limit of 2 times per battle!




Once you’ve made the necessary edits, you can either quote me and I’ll give it another look ASAP, or you can re-submit it in the appropriate stamping thread and staff will look over it again once they’ve been through the list (which, admittedly, might take longer). It’s up to you!

Everything looks good to me! Love the new tree-climbing hobby, tutoring reads much more like a hobby now, and his attacks seem appropriate for a chibi senshi!

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