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yes, please explain the title (forgive my ignorance at interpretation)

I like it. It sounds like alot of the poetry I read and I love the way that you distract the reader from the big picture in order to show them something bigger (that probably doesn't make sense). However, try to tone it down on the cliche'd lines. I do agree in using cliche's when there is no other way to say something, but almost the entire poem is made up of stuff that everyone puts in poems (ex... Black will never turn to gray, blood not congeal........ ) Just try to experiment with your wording. However, you probably shouldn't listen to me. I love your poem and am quite delusional at the moment. I probably didn't think through it at all. good luck. Keep writing. domokun

nicely done.