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TheHero94

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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 6:06 pm

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ғeel free to call me. . . Hiro Hiyomatsu

υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .A boy

чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. . 16

The υniverse welcomed me on. . .May 8

α lot of people say I'm. . . Hiro Hiyomatsu is an average teenage boy that get's mad at the world for stupid things and overeacts to most small infractions, Hiro absolutly hates being wrong and will definetly argue and debate over it and wont let it go until he proves his point. Hiro has a soft spot for girls but that doesn't mean he will let them win at anything. Hiro is super estatic and annoying when happy. when he's sad he will mope and keep to himself. when he is angry he wont hesitate to express it. When he is embarresed you can obviously tell from the blushing. When he is wrong...... look out....

care to hear my story?Hiro was born in the underground city of "gar-gina" one of the biggest hidden neko sanctuary. Hiro was simple child born into a middle class family, but hiro had two passions learning and magic though not very good at it he still tries his very best in hopes that he can become a spell sword one day(A spellsword is a mage warrior for those who dont know), At the age of 10 hiro got his fathers sword "Miss-Fortune" (he got it after his father was taken by an unknow illness) a sword that can only be weilded by his kind, but Hiro has no idea how to use it or how to do any magic at all. At the age of 15 Hiro got an anonymous tip from his unknown family member telling him of a school to the north of all the lands that could be the answer for all his problems, so hiro left at 15 and arrived at Fuyu Acadamy at 16 with little money on him and wearing peasent clothes(He sold everything except his fathers blade).

αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .No magical experience, but I want to learn, and I have a sword..... but it doesn't listen to my commands......

I aםore. . . Learning and Getting correct answers
○ Nice people
○ Being right
○ Memories

єveryone of these drive me mad. . . Being wrong
○ Other smart people(especially girls that show him up)
○ Illogical, or thing that can't be explained
○ small places

мy House, Dorm, and Homeroom are. . .
House:Eirannes
Dorm:
Homeroom: Magics and Weaponry

чou see, I'm controlled by . . .TheHero94

Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 9:52 pm

Sorry but I can't approve this profile yet.

Can you elaborate on his biography? In the power section you suddenly talk about having a curse, is this related with him killing a cursed dragon at the age of fifteen?The reason he is attending the Academy seems a bit vague. Is he in Fuyu because he is looking for a cure to his curse seeing as it is an agglomeration of the magically gifted?

If I were to be completely honest, I would say I'm unsure about what to think with the biography as a whole. Hiro comes out as being very over accomplished for his relatively young age. The age at which he is juggling his accomplishments seem surrealistic and doesn't make him seem like just some "average teenage boy".

I won't be accepting any mastery of any ability as Fuyu Academy is still an educational institution and no place for an almighty god. Please reduce that as well.or add some constraints or drawbacks. What is this blood power you speak of in the biography? Is it the ability to summon up the dragon?

There seems to be very little flaws in your character. If you could add some, it would really improve the profile. Remember that a flawed character is a good character.

Also, could you remove the original skeleton guidelines from your profile rather than just adding on to it?

Please quote me when you have edited the profile so I can revise it again.

Sapphire Waltz
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TheHero94

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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 9:54 pm

Oke thank you 3nodding

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 2:02 pm

Sapphire Waltz

Sorry but I can't approve this profile yet.

Can you elaborate on his biography? In the power section you suddenly talk about having a curse, is this related with him killing a cursed dragon at the age of fifteen?The reason he is attending the Academy seems a bit vague. Is he in Fuyu because he is looking for a cure to his curse seeing as it is an agglomeration of the magically gifted?

If I were to be completely honest, I would say I'm unsure about what to think with the biography as a whole. Hiro comes out as being very over accomplished for his relatively young age. The age at which he is juggling his accomplishments seem surrealistic and doesn't make him seem like just some "average teenage boy".

I won't be accepting any mastery of any ability as Fuyu Academy is still an educational institution and no place for an almighty god. Please reduce that as well.or add some constraints or drawbacks. What is this blood power you speak of in the biography? Is it the ability to summon up the dragon?

There seems to be very little flaws in your character. If you could add some, it would really improve the profile. Remember that a flawed character is a good character.

Also, could you remove the original skeleton guidelines from your profile rather than just adding on to it?

Please quote me when you have edited the profile so I can revise it again.

Can you check again and let me know if he seems to powerful cause I ant him to at least know how to use a sword a little but he wants to learn magic now and He doesn't know any

TheHero94

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Sapphire Waltz
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Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 5:57 pm

Could you still remove the guidelines present in your profile? In other words, like in Like Section, take out "[likes, feel free to put more!]". It was meant as mere guidelines when making the profile and are supposed to be omitted once you filled it in.

Hiro Hiyomatsu is approved and sorted into Eirannes!

May I also suggest using a spell-checker integrated in your Internet browser? I believe many browsers, such as Firefox and Google Chrome have one integrated, if not, you can always check by using Microsoft Word. It helps me a ton and prevents any small spelling mistakes. : )

Please wait patiently for his dorm. Meanwhile, you can come join the fun in the New Year's Event!

Posted: Fri Jan 06, 2012 3:50 pm

Sapphire Waltz

Could you still remove the guidelines present in your profile? In other words, like in Like Section, take out "[likes, feel free to put more!]". It was meant as mere guidelines when making the profile and are supposed to be omitted once you filled it in.

Hiro Hiyomatsu is approved and sorted into Eirannes!

May I also suggest using a spell-checker integrated in your Internet browser? I believe many browsers, such as Firefox and Google Chrome have one integrated, if not, you can always check by using Microsoft Word. It helps me a ton and prevents any small spelling mistakes. : )

Please wait patiently for his dorm. Meanwhile, you can come join the fun in the New Year's Event!

Ok thank you, And I will wait for my dorm

TheHero94

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Posted: Sun Jan 08, 2012 8:03 pm

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Hiro now has a dorm!

Eirannes House, Regalia Dorm

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