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PostPosted: Wed Jan 04, 2012 1:52 pm


Name: Reynos Aino

Nickname(s)/Alias(es): Ai or Rey
Race: Shinigami
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Sexual Orientation: Gay

Physical Description: Pic by tonight. Here's what he looks like. Ai has a 6'2 stature with a slender body frame. He has thick legs and a bubble butt that looks almost odd for a boy. He has tan, glowing skin. His hair is black, long, soft and healthy. He has soft brown eyes with long and thick eyelashes. His lips are full and pink. Overall he is a very handsome, almost androgynous, boy. He wears a Shinigami garb that is basically the top tunic. It has no sleeves, but still has the second layer under it also with no sleeves. The garb stops a bit above his knees. He uses it to show off his body because he is self conscious of his face and uses his body as a distraction. His garb is held together with a yellow ribbon belt where he also holds his Zanpakutou. He wears no pants, but instead has tights under his dress/tunic that a bit shorter than the piece.
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Personality: Ai is a very kind and warm person. He has a type of gift that allows him to make friends rather easily. He would much rather go to a party or dance and sing than go out and train. He is easily a lovable person that gets a lot of joy out of helping others. He can sometimes be overshadowed and not noticed due to his slight fear of being assertive and his low self esteem, but he will occasionally break silence. He would much rather prefer to fix problems himself with manipulation and behind the scenes work. It keeps him safe to think he never did anything, but it's all in good faith. Also he would much rather do things by himself because he feels that a bother whenever he asks for help. All in all Ai is a very benevolent spirit that always tries his best. A fierce and powerful soul who makes up for his naiveness with a heart that will always find the right way.Ai's 6'2 slender, lean frame allows for a rather speedy character. He is also able to take heavy damage and continue fighting due to his scrappy and fierce personality as a fighter, but his physical strength is lacking. He delivers weak hits. That's why his fighting style centers itself on the boy's speed. He bases his style on dodging and attacking pressure points with elegant and fiery dance like battle moves that make full use of the boy's flexibility and swiftness. He also has an amazing memory that allows him to use all Kidou and Hadou that he has ever studied. He uses these techniques, without their respective chant, as well to make up for his lack of power.

Zanpakutou: Kochou Kokuou is a Poison type Zanpakutou that has abilities similar to Haineko or Senbon Sakura.

Zanpakutou Spirit: Kochou Kokuou

Inner World: Ai's Inner World is a space outside with an eternally beautiful sky. The floor that he stands on is like a mirror, shining and reflective. There is a never ending breeze that blows different colored and sized ribbons ribbons across the area.

Sealed Form: A small/medium Wazikashi. The hilt is a beautiful white covered in an elegant pink lace that flows a bit at the end. The hilt guard is shaped like a pair of butterfly wings with 4 circle openings that are in each corner.

(Not obtained yet)Shikai Name/Release Phrase: "Flutter about, Kochou Kokuou!"

Shikai Description: Once Ai shouts out the release command his Zanpakutou glitters and is enveloped in a soft pink light. It then turns spreads out into a fan. Once it opens up the pink light fades away and the glitter fades away to reveal the released form of Kochou Kokuou. A fan that has silver outer parts, glossy like a mirror. It also has a ring at the base that has the same pink ribbon wrapped around it to have 2 pink tails. When opened it has a white inside that is protected by strips of metal inside. It also has one red circle in the middle of the fan.

Shikai Powers: Once released Ai's physical prowess is increased, but his physical attacks are still weak. His spiritual pressure also increases. It can scatter and create clouds of toxic spores that can act as shield and also attack, much like the ash produced by Haineko. The poison that Ai's Zanpakutou delivers is a powerful one that causes any opponent pain. Although powerful enough to stun opponents it takes a good amount of poison to actually take full effect and if the opponent is healthy then they may even fight the poison, leading Ai in attempts to poison the enemy slowly. This can be done a variety of ways; through the mouth, eyes, or even an open wound. One there is enough poison the opponent will feel like they are on fire, being pierced by needles or etc along with a minor paralysis. Ai is immune to the poison which allows him to be creative with the way he manipulates his attacks. The fan can also be thrown like a boomerang. One of it's other powers is it's ability to deflect and reflect attacks by swiping away the incoming attack. This all depends on how much Spiritual Pressure he leaks into the fan, but since he has very little to spare he uses this defensive move only when he has to because he would easily become too tired and become an easy target, the incoming attack also has to be energy based like a Getsugatenshou.

(Not obtained yet) Bankai Name: Tsubasa Kaika Kochou Kokuou

Bankai Description: Ai gracefully opens his fan in front of his face and says, "Bankai...", As he finishes speaking a hot pink light shines from Ai and a large twister of glitter and dirt (if he is on the ground) envelop him. The twister shoots off much of the poison that Ai's Zanpakutou creates creating a beautiful, but deadly show for anyone watching and also causes all enemies to keep distance from him. As the Bankai transformation finishes the tornado of glitter and poison then explodes outwards in all directions revealing Ai and his Zanpakutou in their now upgraded form. It is Ai in a new outfit and a large fan that is has piked edges on the tips. It is a black metal that gleams brightly. It has a red background and a horizontal white line. The ring at the base is now large enough to grab and is black as well. The ribbon that adorned it is now longer and wider.

Bankai Powers: Ai's Bankai allows him to manifest a multitude of venomous butterflies that are composed of pure poison to fight and attack with him. The butterflies are like bullets and upon impact will enter the body through the wound they create. It is able to summon strong winds capable of knocking away boulders and cutting trees. When used as a melee weapon it can crush ground and break bones, but Ai is still rather weak and cannot fully attack this way. He would prefer to use the momentum of his speed to go in for a single blow rather than fight hand to hand. It can still summon the same poison, but in bigger and more concentrated amounts of powder or ash that will create a darker pink cloud, almost red. Ai has one attack that is called Doku Seken Hakaisha. It is a large orb that shines pink and rests on the fan to charge. Once it is ready Ai swings away and the orb grows the size of a chair normally, but can get bigger depending on his power level. Upon impact it will explode and leave shards of solidified poison in attempts to pierce the enemy, but they are easily avoidable if you can step back far enough. Ai can be hit by the shards, but will not be affected by the poison, just be a bit cut up.

Special Accessories: Ai wears a rather revealing Shinigami uniform and a yellow ribbon sash that is patterned with floral print. He also wears studded earrings and has a belly piercing. He holds his hair up with a baby blue ribbon and a white headpiece. He also wears gloves made from cloth and has an armor under.

Skills/Abilities: Ai is a skilled acrobat and dancer. It was his hobby, but he uses these talents in his fighting style. He fights by dodging and then attacking pressure points that render enemies useless. He has an incredible knack for Kidou and using them well. He also excels in flower arranging and tea making.
Kidou:

Bakudou:

  • 1. Restrain (Sai)
  • 4. Crawling Rope (Hainawa)
  • 8. Repulse (Seki)
  • 9. Strike (Geki)
  • 9. Disintegrating Circle (Hourin)

    Hadou:

    • 1. Thrust (Shou)
    • 4. White Lightning (Byakurai)


      Biography/History: While alive Ai was a fortune teller making his money off reading tea leaves and what not in the village of Mizuho. He was a sharp boy in class and few people hated him. If they did it was because they believed he was a liar and cheat. One day a man went up to Ai and wanted his fortune read. Ai could tell the man was ominous and tried to make him leave, but when the man attempted to attack him and force himself on the boy he fought the man and nearly killed him. The man retreated and came back a day later with an army to pillage the town! Ai tried to rescue as many people as he could and died while attempting to save young children from being murdered. After his death many people blamed their misfortune on the boy and his witchcraft. Ai then grew up in the Rukongai District of the Seretei. He was an all around happy and kind child who never fit in with his friends. He was quite the contrast from the mean, assertive, rough kids in his area. He was always a very adept acrobat and had a great knack for memorizing names, places, and certain phrases, just like when he was alive. One day while out and about, alone, in the alleyways searching for food for his friends he was ambushed by a group of older teenagers who wanted to take his findings. That's when his friends showed up to his aid, but were quickly outmatched and beat up. All of a sudden Ai shot out some spiritual pressure and had recited a line he had heard from a Soul Reaper...he had used Byakrai! Later all his friends encouraged him to join the academy. There he discovered his natural like interest and knack for Kidou and he quickly made a name for himself at the academy.


      Powers: His Kido is above average.
      He is faster than most other graduates.
      Amazing memory.
PostPosted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 12:53 pm


Just giving this a quick once over, it looks like it's in need of some adjusting before I can fully send this off to be approved in good conscience.

The picture in your physical description is unessisary, as your worded one is just fine, so don't worry if you don't find one. :3 We won't deduct points. However I am rather concerned.... does your character not wear pants, but a dress variation of the traditional Hakama? o.o(Quite the interesting lad then isn't he?) If so, just make sure that's clear with a little footnote at the end.

Generally I'm not a fan of abilities in Shikai or bankai that deal with poison or effect the nervous system. But I give everything a fair fighting chance. So far yours is losing the battle, if only because the description of what it actually does is rather confusing and limited. Most of what is in the actual shikai description would be better suited for the personality, physical or even powers section. Please move it there and expand on exactly what you mean. I'll leave some specific questions at the end of this review as to what I am confused about to help you.

Your backstory is a little... Um... Odd? You make reference to his life before death after finishing his story about joining the academy. Now, not to sound rude, but isn't that bassakwards? Also, it doesn't give much insight as to who he was, and while that is totally your choice, I feel you would benefit from adding a little meat to it. Explaining WHY he saved those kids, where he lived and WHEN he lived, why the village was attacked in the first place. Why he did what he did.
Totally up to you though.
My questions for shikai and bankai

your shikai
Like stated earlier he is able to create the poison that scatters about to Ai's will. It can also be thrown like a boomerang.

What state of mater is the "Poison" in, and what effect does it exactly have on a person's body? Is Aino effected by the poison at all? Even partially? (This would make me MUCH more likely to approve this profile quickly, but it's totally up to you)

What do you mean by "It can be thrown like a boomerang". What is "It" the poison, the fan or something completely different? Specify.

Your Shikai
One of it's other powers is it's ability to deflect and reflect attacks by swiping away the incoming attack. This all depends on how much Spiritual Pressure he leaks into the fan, but since he has very little to spare he uses this defensive only when he has to.


Does he have to use more spiritual pressure to reflect than to simply block attacks? Does using this ability have any negative effects on Aino? (ex. he gets tired? Does it force him out of shikai if he uses it too much?)

Your Shikai
It has to be energy based though. Ai's 6'2 slender, lean frame allows for a rather speedy character. He is also able to take heavy damage and continue fighting due to his scrappy and fierce personality as a fighter, but his physical strength is lacking. He delivers weak hits. That's why his fighting style centers itself on the boy's speed. He bases his style on dodging and attacking pressure points with elegant and fiery dance like battle moves that make full use of the boy's flexibility and swiftness. He also has an amazing memory that allows him to use all Kidou and Hadou that he has ever studied. He uses these techniques, without their respective chant, as well to make up for his lack of power.


All of this is not part of his shikai. Please put it somewhere else in the profile, as it only distracts from what changes from sealed to shikai form. It would probably be best suited to either skills and abilities, or powers. I see you already have an abbreviated version under powers, so why not put it all together?

Your Bankai
When used as a melee weapon it can crush ground and break bones.


What happened to your character being weak and primarily speed based? This seems entirely unessential and tacked on. Please remove it for the sake of continuity with your own character.

Your Bankai
It can still summon the same poison, but in bigger and more concentrated amounts.


Same questions for the shikai form. What state of matter is the poison in, and what effects to the concentrated amounts have on the body. I noticed earlier in the description you state that the poison is like butterflies, how does this form enter the body? Perhaps edit it so the two sentences are next to one another and easier to read on the whole. (keep your thoughts together! : D)

Your Bankai
Doku Seken Hakaisha. It is a large orb that shines pink and once shot out it grows to immense size and bursts with poisonous shards upon impact.


It's not uncommon for people to space and italic the names of specific moves granted in shikai or bankai. You may consider doing this here for ease of reading, and to expand a little more on the thought.
What is the orb shot out of?
How big (roughly) is "immense size"?
Is there any way to avoid being hit by the shards?
Again, can Aino be hit by these shards as well?
would the poison affect him?


I know it looks like a lot, but I promise most of it is the same few questions asked a few different ways! Let me know when you edit in some of these changes, and I'll take another look so hopefully we can get you RPing today!

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PostPosted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 1:01 pm


Thanks so much! biggrin
I'll get in that ASAP <3
PostPosted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 4:21 pm


Boulder size seems a tad extreme, if you shrink it a little that'd be great.
Is it ash like or butterflies when in bankai?

Make it partial paralysis for the poison effect in large doses, and I'll call it good. :3

I'll shoot a profile mod over here soon.

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PostPosted: Thu Jan 05, 2012 4:26 pm


Hehe for sure c:
And it's both c:
And alrightyyyyy c:
PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2012 3:10 pm


Bump for approval.

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red_moon_wolfess

PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2012 6:17 pm


I've been bumped up to a profile mod.
This shiz be approved. Off with you to RP.
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