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zeflamigo

Interstellar Astronaut

PostPosted: Sun Dec 25, 2011 10:49 pm


Name: Odette Cygnet
odette — the lead ballerina role in Swan Lake
cygnet — a baby swan


Blood Color: RED (#B8100 cool

Gender: Girl

Symbol: User Image (Cyngus — The Swan Constellation)

Personality: Odette's personality is marked by her unusual timidity. Her lusus was nearly mute, so she wasn't raised to be talkative around her own lusus, let alone other trolls. To make matters worse, she's a poor, puny redblood, the lowest of the low. Most trolls equate her with sewerbeasts, which can be a real downer for Odette's self-esteem. Highbloods have mistreated Odette for her low blood left and right, but she doesn't think she has the strength to defy them, so she puts up with it. As she's not particularly strong and has no special powers, Odette has no business being disagreeable and raising her voice. Odette likes to stay out of trouble, and she finds that keeping her mouth shut is the easiest and fastest way to please highbloods. She does tend to admire some highbloods for their wealth and power sometimes, but she’s mostly afraid of them because of their severity and unpredictability. But because she's put up with their teasing and mistreatment, Odette's started to believe that she's trash, too. This gives Odette excessive unconfidence, and makes Odette believe that she's not worth talking to. It's a belief that's been embedded into her psyche, so even if Odette's circumstances improved or her blood spontaneously changed colors she'd still be as timid as she is now.

Odette's timidity is also partially due to her sickly nature. Odette lives in exceedingly unhealthy living conditions and is constantly overworking herself for daily survival. It’s only natural that she would get sick easily. It would seem that Odette always has a cold, if not something worse. This makes her throat sore and her voice hoarse, which makes it difficult for her to talk (and she’s embarrassed by her raspy voice). Despite her poverty and terrible health, Odette is driven daily by the support of friends and the desire to earn their respect. She's always striving to prove her worth to others through hard work and loyalty.

Odette Cygnet’s main interests lie in dancing, notably ballet. Her lusus taught her the art, and Odette performs dances on the streets of New Hemisect City for food. She’s more passionate about dancing than anything else on Alternia. Good health would allow her to pursue her passion of dancing even more, because she wouldn't need to recover as much from the exercise. Sometimes her sicknesses hinder her dancing ability, but she tries her hardest to trudge through it. The stuffiness and headaches can sometimes really mess with her coordination when she's spinning around so much. When she does dance it really takes a lot out of her. Her body gets extremely tired, as well as her mind. She's prone to collapse shortly after rigorous dancing when she's especially sick. When her sickness is so bad that it prevents her from dancing, she's forced to steal, as she dislikes begging. She refuses to steal from anyone who's anywhere near as poor as her, and she's too scared to steal from a drone or someone just as sinister-looking. And doesn't steal often because she really prefers to earn her funds for food. She doesn't like her persistent illnesses get in the way of earning a living through dancing.

Odette also enjoys music, especially classical music. Her favorite composer is Troll Tchaikovsky. Odette envies and looks up to musicians. She would dabble in learning how to play an instrument if she had the funds, but she can barely feed herself on a daily basis. Odette also likes to read when she can get her hands on a good book. It's a quiet pastime she likes to share with her lusus. Odette truly appreciates reading and music, but being impoverished keeps her from branching out her hobbies. If she got healthier, she could probably make a better living, and then she might be able to afford nicer things like books and instruments.


Strengths:

Polite
Odette, being shy and non-confrontational, is very polite to every troll she meets. Odette never talks back or curses, and she rarely has a bad opinion about a troll. In the off chance Odette is offended or angered by someone, she usually internalizes the feelings instead of bursting out at another troll. This is one of many unhealthy habits that Odette has developed with age. It’s more helpful than harmful, though, as it keeps her from getting beat up by highbloods on most occasions. But Odette is too polite sometimes. In extreme conditions when she can't dance, she doesn't like to beg because she doesn't want to be a bother to others. She hardly ever pesters her friends for things, because she thinks they'll get annoyed with her. In her skewed mind she thinks that it's nicer to just steal from strangers instead of beg.

Devoted
When Odette befriends a troll, she develops an intense attachment to them. She’s extremely loyal, and would do nearly anything for a friend. Other trolls can trust Odette with anything when she’s on their side. While she's normally terrified of conflict, she's quick to defend her friends and their pride. Her friends are what drive her daily, and she'll do anything to prove her worth to them, even if it means doing something she doesn't like to do normally. She’s a valuable asset on any team or in any quadrant. Her devotion is the only thing that would really drive her to a showcase of anger, because she won't stand for anyone insulting those close to her.

Lithe
Where Odette lacks brute strength, she makes up for it in agility. She’s small, thin, and flexible, and can maneuver past obstacles easily. She moves swiftly and has quick hands, a talent she developed from pickpocketing on the streets of New Hemisect City. If it weren’t for her deftness she wouldn’t be able to survive daily, let alone in battle.

Flaws:

Unconfident
Odette lacks confidence in almost everything she does. She’s not confident about her fighting skills, about developing relationships, or about her personality. Odette is constantly second-guessing herself. She doesn’t comprehend the concept of compliments. She sees herself as the lowest form of life, as she’s never been told she was anything better. Her sickly nature contributes to her low self-esteem, too. She's ashamed of her frail facial features and hoarse voice. If Odette got healthier, it would probably be a good confidence boost (an overdue one, if you ask me). The only thing that she’s relatively confident about is her dancing ability. This is only because Odette feels confidence through the support of others, and her confidence for dancing comes from the support of her lusus. When Odette dances, she forgets about the outside world, and instead focuses on the memories of better times, like when her lusus first taught her how to dance. If someone were to tease her or boo at her performance, she'd probably internalize anger for that person, instead of just shrink back. After all, she has more faith in the words of those close to her than the words of some strangers.

Delicate
Odette is petite, thin, and sickly, which makes her more easily prone to injury. She tries to avoid injuries as much as possible because when she does get them they’re often devastating. She's small and light, and is therefore easily thrown around by others, especially in battle. It's just not her body that's frail, though, her mind is delicate too. She's afraid of pain, and the sight of her own blood makes her queasy. She shares a lot of pity for other trolls in pain and therefore doesn’t like excessive violence. She wouldn't cope easily with killing another troll, and if she maimed another troll (especially inhibiting their ability to walk), she'd probably be traumatized. Odette is even upset when other trolls curse. Also, pails weird her out, but then again she’s also just a kid.

Fanatical
Being extremely devoted towards her friends has a downside. She has a tendency for clinginess, which is off-putting for the other member of the friendship. Trolls who show Odette false shows of friendship just to be polite might end up getting a lot more attention from her than they anticipated. She might even border as a stalker in some extremes. Her devotion can get her into more trouble when other trolls befriend her just to use her. When she realizes that she’s being manipulated, she gets stuck a state of depression and refuses to cope for extended periods of time. When she loses her friends, she always thinks she did something wrong, or that she simply wasn't good enough for them. She doesn't know how to cope with losing friends, even when it's not her fault. She's fanatical about dancing, too, and if she ever lost the ability to dance she'd be devastated and probably try any method to be able to dance again. Dancing has become an entity much like a friend in Odette's mind. If anyone tried to take dancing away from her, she'd react in the same way as if a friend was being taken away from her. She's crazy about anything that her friends support her through, too, but dancing is the thing she's craziest about, as her lusus taught her how to dance. Her fanaticism for her friends and their support tests the limits of her demure personality. If someone killed a troll especially close to her, you can bet that she'd seek revenge on the troll that killed them.


Appearance: User Image

Face: Odette really can be quite pretty, but her regular string of colds and fevers usually ruin her good looks. Her big eyes are almost always quite puffy, and her petite nose is almost always runny and congested. Her features are always flushed. Her voice is seldom clear; she’s constantly coughing. Her hair is really full and wavy. It parts on her left side and is tucked behind her left ear, but it covers most of the right half of her face. Her hair is regularly disheveled because between getting sick and dancing, she’s constantly getting it sweaty or messy. She's simply given up on keeping it looking nice. Her horns curve outward and branch out in two at the top, giving the subtle appearance of wings.

Body: Underneath her frumpy coat, Odette has relatively petite frame and thin arms, but she has those shapely dancer curves that come from her regular ballet exercises. She’s awfully short, but has really powerful legs regardless (also because of ballet). Odette also has extremely strong feet, and is prone to kick people a lot in fights.

Clothing: Odette sports a frumpy coat made out of dead lusii she found on the streets. She fluctuates between chills and sweats when she’s sick, so she tends to wear the coat kind of half-on. Underneath her coat she wears a black leotard with her symbol on the chest. She wears black ballet slippers tied up to her mid-thighs. She owns a matching tutu that she only wears on special occasions, as it’s the most expensive thing Odette owns and it gets dirty very easily.


Weapon: glaivekind
—Odette wields a lightweight glaive with a blade that has a design similar to her horns, only the edge is curved outward like an axe and the pieces branch out on the inner side (Odette's horns curve outward and branch outward). The glaive itself isn't that special, in fact it Odette was only able to purchase it because the blade broke off of the staff. Odette reattached the blade with some fabric that her lusus found. Odette attaches sentimental value to the fabric, and seeing it gives her will to fight. The weapon is about a head taller than her, which makes it as tall as the average troll. She sees it as the weapon most suitable for her, as it suits deftness more than brute strength.

Home: Odette lives in the boiler room of a cheap temporary fee-regulated hive accommodation in New Hemisect City. It’s damp, cold, disease-ridden, and clearly the source of Odette’s frequent illnesses. Swanmom likes it there, though; there are lots of nice puddles for her to splash around in!

Lusus: Swanmom!
—Swanmom is actually a small rat with featherbeast wings. She is passive and practically mute, but her and Odette bond well nevertheless. Odette calls her "Mama". Odette and Swanmom are intensely close, and Swanmom was Odette’s first ballet teacher. But after six or so sweeps, Swanmom fell into very frail health. She’s managed to take care of Odette before that time, but is just too weak now to assist Odette much anymore. Swanmom is too sick to leave the hive, so Odette is forced to leave on her own to get food. Odette finds the challenge rewarding though, because she finds that the food she gathers will nurse Swanmom back to health. If they don't have a lot of food, Odette will sometimes starve herself to feed Swanmom, much to Swanmom's digress.

Power: none
PostPosted: Sun Dec 25, 2011 11:02 pm


here's an example of what Odette sounds like lol

i think that covers ittt

i probably could have done more but i wanted to put version 1.0 out asap and i was already late considering i'd promised i'd have it up by christmassss oh well ho hum ;c

so uh

crit me with your best shot c;

zeflamigo

Interstellar Astronaut


matisha

Business Vampire

PostPosted: Thu Jan 12, 2012 8:04 am


CRIT TIME!!!

Thought i would give you a few crits, tips and maybe some questions to ask those inner workings of your mind o__o

Personality:


I think she is a really interesting character, I like that you have gone to the extreme of troll poverty and it will be a nice view to take on! But its nice to see that if she was taken out of all that (ICLY she gains money/influence/ friend helps) he strengths and weakness would still be apparent. (although the sickly aspect of that would change! Maybe really hammer home the delicate aspect of her?)


Strengths

Lithe: Right am sure you know it does take a lot of physical strength to dance. Yeah your not pounding weights or anything but it takes stamina to dance for periods of time. I want to make sure the level of sickness and dancing is balanced. To be very ill one day to doing an hour performance on the street would take it out of her, A LOT! You would have to be prepared for this to be a factor in role-play, have her being out of action if someone comes to see her after she has tried to gain food/money by dancing. What would ever happen if she ran out of food and was too weak to dance! She would be screwed! Is she above begging? Would she seek out her friends? There are many questions you must think about, also lots of plot fodder for the future!

Flaws

Unconfident: Again although you have explained the flaw well the ability to dance in front of others can be very daunting, even I use to poop myself silly before going out on stage and a have an ego as big as a house! How would she react if people started booing? (other than going home hungry of course!) Although she has confidence in her abilities is she confident in front of others? Its not like i dont like this flaw, I think it works for her in the way you've explained but i feel that it doesnt make sense....haha now I am making no sense! Maybe add that she takes herself away from it all when she dances. That she goes into a 'daydream' and that she imagines herself anywhere but there. I think that would make me shut up XD


Overall Summary

I really like her character and I want her to be part of the troll community, i think there will be a lot of interesting Rps in store for her!! I am just worried about the dancing/illness, its a major part of who she and if that was taken away (either of them) how would you define her as a person/troll then? Just be aware that if she was to become better (or so ill she dies - maybe robot plots for the future??) or says has an accident and is crippled - who would Odette Cygnet be then? *does wiggly arm flail*
PostPosted: Thu Jan 12, 2012 5:29 pm


Matisha
thanks so much for the crit!! it was a lot of help!

i edited a lot concerning what you mentioned, and i hope it cleared a lot up!

zeflamigo

Interstellar Astronaut


matisha

Business Vampire

PostPosted: Sat Jan 28, 2012 8:08 am


[ You know how much I love this character but I am still a little concerned over her illness and how it defines her. I know the illness is a huge part of her life but i just want to make sure that if she was to get healthier/richer that there is still a troll with depth left behind!

I may ask Ami to give this quest a once over before its accepted, it doesnt mean anything is wrong with the quest but I want this character to be the best that it can be and I am slightly flawed by how much i adore her!!! If you dont mind wait a little longer for an acceptance I am sure to get back to you ASAP x ]
PostPosted: Sat Jan 28, 2012 11:12 pm


Matisha
[ You know how much I love this character but I am still a little concerned over her illness and how it defines her. I know the illness is a huge part of her life but i just want to make sure that if she was to get healthier/richer that there is still a troll with depth left behind!

I may ask Ami to give this quest a once over before its accepted, it doesnt mean anything is wrong with the quest but I want this character to be the best that it can be and I am slightly flawed by how much i adore her!!! If you dont mind wait a little longer for an acceptance I am sure to get back to you ASAP x ]

wow that was fast!!
i thought more about how illnesses define her, and realized that it played the biggest role in her timidity, so i added a paragraph in her personality about how her timidity is influenced by other things, like her lusus and her low blood.

and that's totally fine! like i said this crit came a lot faster than i expected and i know that nice things (like acceptances) require patience c:

zeflamigo

Interstellar Astronaut


amicableAggressor
Vice Captain

Versatile Vermin

PostPosted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 6:25 pm


hey hey, because i'm feeling sassy today i'll start from the bottom and work my way up.

uhh for hotel, there isn't a cannon troll word. but you could make something up if you like? temporary fee-regulated hive accommodations??? that sounds ridiculous enough to work

for her weapon, while it can be cherished by her, i'd avoid using the word artifact since in hivestuck that refers to a rare item of power :3
also, while it can certainly be pretty i'd like to remind you that it's still a starter weapon, will have the same damage output as any run-of-the-mill sword off the street, and she will be getting a better one as she ages up, so i wouldn't make something that she is too attached to. perhaps it's an ornamental display weapon her lusus stole from a shop window to give to her as a present, not realizing that it wasn't actually as strong as it looked, and she kept it out of sentimentality?

fanatical - i'm curious, does odette ever get a little stalker-y? how far does her fanatical side go?? does it apply to other parts of her life apart from friends? tbh this is her most interesting trait for me, it hints at how it's possible for her to have survived this long. for most trolls who are sickly and frail, i'd be really hesitant to give them the ok, as troll society deliberately weeds out the weak and frail trolls at a very young age.

while you say that she abhors violence and hurting other trolls, you also go to say she's fanatical and devoted. what would she do if she was asked to dirty her hands for a friend, or saw a friend being attacked? how about if anyone tried to hurt her, or prevent her from dancing? are there any things that would make her snap and release all that internalized anger?

while you mention that she doesn't like to steal for a living in her main bio, you bring it up as something she actually does below. perhaps you could kind of elaborate in the bio that she DOES steal, even though she doesn't like to. does she have any rules she follows when stealing? (not from fellow redbloods, only from trolls she sees as mean or bad, or maybe only from other redbloods since it's safest that way)

i really like her, but i guess i'm still just on the fence about her being so delicate. i guess if you could explain what drives her, what keeps her getting up every day and fighting through the shitty colds and fevers and her awful living conditions, it would really help.
PostPosted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 7:20 pm


amicableAggressor
hey hey, because i'm feeling sassy today i'll start from the bottom and work my way up.

uhh for hotel, there isn't a cannon troll word. but you could make something up if you like? temporary fee-regulated hive accommodations??? that sounds ridiculous enough to work

for her weapon, while it can be cherished by her, i'd avoid using the word artifact since in hivestuck that refers to a rare item of power :3
also, while it can certainly be pretty i'd like to remind you that it's still a starter weapon, will have the same damage output as any run-of-the-mill sword off the street, and she will be getting a better one as she ages up, so i wouldn't make something that she is too attached to. perhaps it's an ornamental display weapon her lusus stole from a shop window to give to her as a present, not realizing that it wasn't actually as strong as it looked, and she kept it out of sentimentality?

fanatical - i'm curious, does odette ever get a little stalker-y? how far does her fanatical side go?? does it apply to other parts of her life apart from friends? tbh this is her most interesting trait for me, it hints at how it's possible for her to have survived this long. for most trolls who are sickly and frail, i'd be really hesitant to give them the ok, as troll society deliberately weeds out the weak and frail trolls at a very young age.

while you say that she abhors violence and hurting other trolls, you also go to say she's fanatical and devoted. what would she do if she was asked to dirty her hands for a friend, or saw a friend being attacked? how about if anyone tried to hurt her, or prevent her from dancing? are there any things that would make her snap and release all that internalized anger?

while you mention that she doesn't like to steal for a living in her main bio, you bring it up as something she actually does below. perhaps you could kind of elaborate in the bio that she DOES steal, even though she doesn't like to. does she have any rules she follows when stealing? (not from fellow redbloods, only from trolls she sees as mean or bad, or maybe only from other redbloods since it's safest that way)

i really like her, but i guess i'm still just on the fence about her being so delicate. i guess if you could explain what drives her, what keeps her getting up every day and fighting through the shitty colds and fevers and her awful living conditions, it would really help.

thanks for the crit! c:

i edited everything you were concerned about, i hope i covered everything! working backwards tripped me up a lil xD

zeflamigo

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amicableAggressor
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Versatile Vermin

PostPosted: Sun Feb 26, 2012 7:40 am


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