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 Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2011 6:44 pm
 ғeel free to call me. . .
[ Asakura 'Tsunadora' Tosashima. ]
υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .
[ a male kitsune ]
чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. .
[ 18 ]
α lot of people say I'm. . .
[ quiet, loyal, kind, and shy. he rarely speaks to people who dont start a conversation, adding to his shyness. Although he grew up pretty much alone, he shows kindness towards others and loyalty to those who may accept him. ]
can you blame me for what I am now? After all, I grew up. . .
[ without knowing my parents because they were murdered when i was 3. trained endlessly so i could protect others from harm. traveled a lot, looking for a place to call home. came to fuyu academy to meet new people and learn how to get stronger, also came to learn how to control his power. loves spending time with his friends,even when nothing is said.]
αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .
[ control over fire, can transform into a small fox ]
I aםore. . .
○ [small,fuzzy animals]
○ [ramen]
○ [quiet moments at a lake or waterfall]
○ [sleeping under a shady tree,sometimes in the branches]
єvery time one of these come into my life, things just go downhill . . .
○ [friends are in danger]
○ [winter]
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мy House, Dorm, and Homeroom are. . .
House: [Eirannes]
Dorm: [Ceil]
Homeroom: [Magics and Weaponry. ]
чou see, I'm controlled by . . . [ NoraTsudomaru. ]
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Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 9:37 am
Pretty character.
Could you extend on his about section please? I think the minimum length for that was three sentences. Perhaps extend on his background a little as well. It's a little vague and bullet pointed at the moment.
Additionally, your character is overpowered. Please pick only one or two of those you have listed, thenI will approve it, and you can start posting while you wait for a dorm. Please quote me back when you're done. c:
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Posted: Mon Jan 02, 2012 5:22 pm
Classical Hands Pretty character.
Could you extend on his about section please? I think the minimum length for that was three sentences. Perhaps extend on his background a little as well. It's a little vague and bullet pointed at the moment.
Additionally, your character is overpowered. Please pick only one or two of those you have listed, thenI will approve it, and you can start posting while you wait for a dorm. Please quote me back when you're done. c: kk :3 the highspeed movement things really a natural born kitsune thing, asakuras highspeed movements nothing special X3
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 1:13 pm
ғeel free to call me. . .
[ Sojiro Nobusake]
υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .
[ male ]
чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. .
[ 18 ]
The υniverse welcomed me on. . .
[ Feb. 25 ]
α lot of people say I'm. . .
[ quiet, kind, playfull,. i'll draw my sword at the slightest indication of someone harming my friends. i was always quiet, growing up for 13 years in hiding to blame. i get a little upset when i speak of my past,but i get over it fast. ]
care to hear my story?
[ i was banished from both heaven and hell for being the son of an angel and a demon when i was 13. my parents hid the news of my birth, hoping i wouldnt be found and my father instructed me in the use of a sword. my parents were ordered executed but i still believe they may have escaped. i was attacked by human villagers wherever i went after my banishment because i was different, only being accepted by few people in a small camp. growing up with those few friends created the quiet,shy side of me. my swordsmanship skills are still poor. i came to Fuyu because one of my friends told me that i would find a home there.]
αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .
[ ability to fly for 30-40min without any wind<15-20min with wind>, control over light and darkness darkness: envelops left arm in shadows giving his hand claws light: envelops right arm in light, can fire a single,low power,sphere but must recharge for 10min after firing ]
I aםore. . .
○ small animals
○ long walks
○ hanging with friends
○ sleeping in
єveryone of these drive me mad. . .
○ worrying my friends
○ waking up early
○ heritage
○ being in a room full of people
мy House, Dorm, and Homeroom are. . .
House: [House, Please edit in when you're assigned one.]
Dorm: [Dorm Room, Please edit in when you're assigned one.]
Homeroom: [Magics and Weaponry ]
чou see, I'm controlled by . . . [ NoraTsudomaru ]
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Sapphire Waltz Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 2:08 pm
Before I go over your profiles, I need some explanations. Who are you roleplaying as in The Ever Forest? Due to the large number of characters in Fuyu, this matter has gone unnoticed until recently.
This character, Asakura, was not approved by a mod nor does he appear in the official Fuyu list of students. Recall that you cannot begin roleplaying as a character without their profile being approved by a mod.
Should you continue to roleplay as this character without a proper response, I may pull your character out of the roleplay and potentially suspend the thread there, which would be unpleasant to your current roleplaying partners. It is not in my intentions to do so, but you cannot break the rules. I highly suggest you cease to post there until matters have been resolved.
Please quote me when you give me a response.
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 6:24 pm
Tsunadora is Asakura, i'll be sure to put that into his profile sorry, i didnt intend to break any rules, i'll stop posting until the profiles approved, i'll let the others know about the situation, i dont want them ending up getting punished because of me. but theres one thing i would like to ask; did you read Classical Hands post? i only intend to point out that i had her permission to post after i had edited the profile a bit, and that i had followed her instructions. again, sorry if i caused any problems, i didnt intend to cat_sweatdrop
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Sapphire Waltz Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 7:57 pm
Thank you for being understanding.
Yes, I've looked at Classical's post, though as many times as I've re-read it, I'm fairly sure she didn't completely approve of the approval. Also, from the fact that he hasn't been sorted to a House seemed to support my beliefs.
I'll go over Asakura now, so that you can resume roleplaying as him as soon as possible. I'll handle Sojiro afterwards.
Personality
Please expand on this aspect, it needs to be at least three sentences. Here are some pointers:
-How does he express these character traits? Does he rarely speak to strangers unless someone approaches him first? Does he always stand by his friends and allies?
-What makes him happy/sad/angry?
Biography
It seems a bit choppy and could be expanded further. There seems to be a few inconsistencies in there.
-At what age were his parents murdered? I'm assuming he was fairly young since he never knew them, but then what happened afterwards? Did he survive on his own? Was he adopted?
-If he's never had friends, then why does he 'train endlessly to protect' them?
-Also, if he's never had friends or people to care for him, how can he love spending time with them? It's like if I told you, "I've never seen a kangaroo in my life, but I love to hug them." Doesn't make that much sense, does it?
Abilities
I still find him overpowered. Having two elements and extremely fast speed, as well as an enhanced smell is over the top for me. I'd like you to cut off one element and tone down the speed because even if it is a "natural born kitsune thing". Please note that he needs to be able to improve his abilities at Fuyu Academy and can't be full-fledged from the start. Not only that, extreme speed essentially leads to god-moding because he would be able to dodge every type of attack and be the first to deal damage.
Please quote me once you've edited, I'll handle Sojiro after finishing Asakura.
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 1:31 pm
sorry for causing problems, i misunderstood Classical's post. thanks for letting me know about my mistake and informing me on how to improve the profiles cat_3nodding
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Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2012 12:56 pm
um....not to sound impatient but....you there? cat_sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 6:51 pm
Sorry for the delay.
The profile looks much better.
Asakura 'Tsunadora' Tosashima is approved and sorted into Eirannes.
Please wait for his dorm, meanwhile you may resume roleplaying in the Ever Forest.
I will be going over Sojiro shortly.
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Sapphire Waltz Vice Captain
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Sapphire Waltz Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2012 11:36 pm
Sojiro Character Review
Personality
This is but a mere observation of my part and in no form an insult to any of your characters or yourself. Are you sure you want to make a second character with essentially the exact same character traits as Asakura? The differences are minimal, however if you would like to keep his personality as is, I won't press further.
Other than that, can you please expand on his personality? Everything is pretty choppy and disconnected; a little length and elaboration are always welcomed.
What makes him happy/sad/angry?
How does he express his various emotions?
Just to clarify things: Quiet, Kind and shy are towards strangers whereas Playful and energetic are for his friends?
Biography
Again, please expand on some of the ideas. Instead of saying "you only have to ask" to know about his past, write it all out here now.
Why was he only banished from heaven and hell at the age of 13? No one noticed that he was a mix of two species beforehand?
Where did he go after his banishment?
Where are his parents?
Why was he constantly attacked by people after his banishment?
Where did he learn to use the sword?
Why did he come to Fuyu?
Abilities
Can you elaborate on his powers of light and darkness? Right now with the lack of detail, I'd probably ask you to tone it down or remove some abilities, but I'll ask that you expand your ideas so I can have a look for any potential god-moding abilities.
What can he do with them?
How good is his endurance? (feel free to input numerical values)
What happens if he can't maintain the control?
I'd also like you to restrict his powers of flight since Sojiro has many major and powerful abilities. I understand that it is part of his biography so I will ask that you elaborate on his abilities of flight.
How long can he fly?
How fast can he fly?
In addition, since you briefly spoke of some swordsmanship skills, can you elaborate on how good he is? At this point, I'd probably ask you to drop either an ability or his swordsmanship skills because he's becoming very overpowered.
Please quote me once you've edited, sorry for the slight delay.
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cяєω Asakura now has a dorm!
Eirannes House, Ceil Dorm
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Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 6:09 pm
sorry about that, im used to making characters like that so it was kind of a habit cat_sweatdrop hope the profiles a little better now
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Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 6:59 pm
Thanks for the updates, it looks better now.
Sojiro Nobusake is approved and sorted into Catian.
Please wait for his dorm, meanwhile you may begin posting.
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Sapphire Waltz Vice Captain
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Rukia Arisawa Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 8:18 pm
Hey there. c:
Let me just start by saying I am so sorry you had to wait this long for any kind of reply. Sapphire Waltz went on a school-related hiatus a bit ago, and the Crew has been tied up in their own academics.
Just to be clear, Sojiro does not have a dorm, correct? Dormitories are my responsibility, and I'd like to fix this as soon as possible. : )
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