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Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 2:59 pm
Approved by Tawny
Name: Jaslyn Age: 18 Gender: Female Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual Craft/Rank: Candidate History: Jaslyn was born as the middle child in between two brothers, an older one by the name of Ronan and the younger, and half-brother by the name of Jonan. All three live within a Cothold that consists of their parents and their grandparents. Jaslyn and Ronan shared a father from their mother’s first marriage but it was short lived when he died of an illness. The two didn’t know their father that well since it occurred when they were very young but after their mother waited a few years until they were old enough, she remarried to another man who became their father and truly lived up to it.
With Ronan at eight and Jaslyn at six, they newly formed family welcomed their newest child, Jonan. Both older siblings were excited to have another sibling to play with, especially when Ronan would play rough with Jaslyn. That was the reasons why she would retain her faint scars later in life from the cuts she gained after beating her brother in a form of wrestling on the hard dirt and rocks. All was well with Jas learning how to be a woman in caring for a home and help care for Jonan while Ronan learned from their step father.
Every night before the two eldest siblings would go to bed, their step father would tell them fantastic stories about dragons and their dragon riders, telling them scary stories or even happy stories about them. The reason for this was because their step father came from a family that was part of that culture all except for him. Their step father reasoned that his family came from generations of them that one less wouldn’t hurt. He also reasoned that he hoped to have his children, including Jaslyn being a female, to become something more than someone average.
Their step father had high hopes for these three children as they grew older and older. Jaslyn especially wanted to be around dragons, having been fascinated by the stories heard and about all that her step father told her about his family. Not long ago, their step father’s parents, the grandparents, came to live with them. It became a bit crowded with the siblings sharing one room while the grandparents shared the bedroom their parents had, and the parents sleeping in the main area of the Cothold.
This inspired Jaslyn to seek out a life far away to perhaps earn something for her family to be able to better provide for them but also…She wants to be a part of the stories that she had heard growing up. Then one bright day, her inner most wish became a reality. Jaslyn had been working with her mother and grandmother when her step father came into the cothold, asking for her to follow him. Listening to her papa, Jas walked outside behind him towards a man who wore clothing different from theirs.
The man looked similarly like her step father only he had some gray hairs showing on his short, well groomed sideburns and the roots of his dark hair. Jas stared at the man until her father introduced him as her uncle. Eyes widening she bowed to him in respect and was speechless. The uncle smiled at her kindly and became to observe her with a critical eye but it was her step father who spoke that drew her attention. Jaslyn’s step father said in his deep rumbling voice that she was to go with her uncle for a special reason. Asking what that reason was, he told her with a smile that touched his warm eyes showing a pride in there that could have lasted lifetimes was that she was to be taken as a candidate.
Jaslyn blinked her confusion but her father gave a secret smile to his brother than gently pushed Jaslyn towards her uncle. “When you arrive to your destination, little one, you will see that you have been considered for a great honor no matter where it leads you.” Was what he said, keeping more information hidden. Yet what was clear, was that she was going with her uncle who was one of many who did sweeps in search of potential candidates for the very creatures that assist in the Search for males and females like her.
Hugging her father good bye, Jaslyn was ordered to retrieve her belongs only the essential items to take, like a small napsack of clothes and at least one favorite book. With that in hand, the then seventeen year old young lady went with her uncle. With one last look at her step father she smiled at him but didn't trust herself to say anything without tearing up, which was a bit late for that.
It had been a year since that very day where she was fostered with her step father's family. It has been a year since that day that she learned as much as possible about her future in the Weyr. Jaslyn found it fascinating and challenging. It was hard at time but pushing herself to continue one would only end in triumph and satisfaction of accomplishing something. Description: Jaslyn is a five foot four inches female with light ivory colored skin that are littered with faint scars from her roughhousing with her brother. The color of her hair is that of a milk chocolate brown that has natural dark blonde and red highlights when the sun shines upon it and when it is let loose. Her hair is generally curly and unruly that is often held in a tight bun to keep it somewhat controlled, in which you can’t see the natural highlights. Other times, she will put it in a braid when she isn’t working or is going to sleep. The color of her eyes is that of bluish gray. The blue is a navy or perhaps a sapphire shade with the soft gray in splotches that look stormy when she is feeling a strong emotion or can look calm and soft when in a mellow mood. Jas generally likes to wear a leather wool tunic with a long skirt underneath when working around within her hold but does from time to time wear pants under a long tunic with long sleeves when outside to have a easier way of walking. Personality: Jaslyn is a unique woman on her own right. The young woman is serious faced that is often times mistaken by others in determining her mood. It does annoy Jaslyn to explain or inform others that she isn’t feeling angry or sad, as her face often looks like, but lately she has let it go. If anything, she likes to have that tough face to hide her deep emotions from the others. This often leads to her not opening up and prevents relationships with others to form. Jas, as she would prefer to be called and will let you know, has a fierce temper that comes from when someone has committed a great wrong against her or a great wrong to those that are weak such as children, animals and elders. If anything, she will hold a grudge against someone for a long time even though it might be for years. Yet, it can happen and her manner towards that one she has a grudge against will show. It’s not a pleasant feeling really.
One thing that is both good and bad is that she is very honest. That honest it good because she has nothing to hide, unless it’s something top secret then she would give her life to keep it under wraps, but the worst thing about it is that it can be harmful and Jas loses her tact when she hurts someone’s feelings for being too honest. Though, Jaslyn isn’t all that bad. She is quite intelligent and enjoys reading books about anything that has struck her interest or learning from others through their experiences and knowledge. She does have a sense of humor that matches well with her serious side yet can range from playful and teasing to odd, dry and sarcastic. However at times, Jas can’t take a joke and will give the “Face” to let you know that she didn’t find it in the least bit giggle worthy. Other:
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Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 4:30 pm
Everything looks good except for two key points in the profile:
1) Age. At age 22 she would be too old to be Searched. All candidates are ages 12 to 21. The begin standing at age 12 and stop standing at age 21. So you'll have to reduce her age a bit to be considered for dragons.
2) Search - all Candidates are Searched (unless they're Weyrborn). As your character was born and raised in a cothold, she would have had to have been searched by a Search Dragon. These dragons (and their riders) do sweeps in a Weyr's territory looking for potential candidates to take back. She could have presented herself at one of these sweeps (basically the rider visits for a bit while the dragon looks around) and have been chosen.
Once you've updated your profile I'll be happy to approve it!
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Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 6:52 pm
SkieBorne Everything looks good except for two key points in the profile: 1) Age. At age 22 she would be too old to be Searched. All candidates are ages 12 to 21. The begin standing at age 12 and stop standing at age 21. So you'll have to reduce her age a bit to be considered for dragons. 2) Search - all Candidates are Searched (unless they're Weyrborn). As your character was born and raised in a cothold, she would have had to have been searched by a Search Dragon. These dragons (and their riders) do sweeps in a Weyr's territory looking for potential candidates to take back. She could have presented herself at one of these sweeps (basically the rider visits for a bit while the dragon looks around) and have been chosen. Once you've updated your profile I'll be happy to approve it! Alrighty If acceptable, I'll highlight what was changed in red, like the age, and then in red for what was added in the history. I'm currently looking up information on how to incorporate your second suggestion about the Search since this is all new to me and I haven't read up on the books that this is based off. So, I apologize if I don't get it right the next time >> Editted: Since I mentioned that the step father came from generations of dragon riders (note I'm slowly getting into remembering all the terms), would it be acceptable that by chance the step father's brother happened to come by their area for the search for potential candidates?
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Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 8:23 pm
krusnik05 SkieBorne Everything looks good except for two key points in the profile: 1) Age. At age 22 she would be too old to be Searched. All candidates are ages 12 to 21. The begin standing at age 12 and stop standing at age 21. So you'll have to reduce her age a bit to be considered for dragons. 2) Search - all Candidates are Searched (unless they're Weyrborn). As your character was born and raised in a cothold, she would have had to have been searched by a Search Dragon. These dragons (and their riders) do sweeps in a Weyr's territory looking for potential candidates to take back. She could have presented herself at one of these sweeps (basically the rider visits for a bit while the dragon looks around) and have been chosen. Once you've updated your profile I'll be happy to approve it! Alrighty If acceptable, I'll highlight what was changed in red, like the age, and then in red for what was added in the history. I'm currently looking up information on how to incorporate your second suggestion about the Search since this is all new to me and I haven't read up on the books that this is based off. So, I apologize if I don't get it right the next time >> Editted: Since I mentioned that the step father came from generations of dragon riders (note I'm slowly getting into remembering all the terms), would it be acceptable that by chance the step father's brother happened to come by their area for the search for potential candidates? Regarding the uncle, that's totally fine! =3 Sorry the guides are a little lacking. If you need help at all please feel free to ask anyone in the thread, I'm sure answers will abound - they'll also help with histories and whatnot. Thankfully it's not too complicated!
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Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 2:43 pm
SkieBorne krusnik05 SkieBorne Everything looks good except for two key points in the profile: 1) Age. At age 22 she would be too old to be Searched. All candidates are ages 12 to 21. The begin standing at age 12 and stop standing at age 21. So you'll have to reduce her age a bit to be considered for dragons. 2) Search - all Candidates are Searched (unless they're Weyrborn). As your character was born and raised in a cothold, she would have had to have been searched by a Search Dragon. These dragons (and their riders) do sweeps in a Weyr's territory looking for potential candidates to take back. She could have presented herself at one of these sweeps (basically the rider visits for a bit while the dragon looks around) and have been chosen. Once you've updated your profile I'll be happy to approve it! Alrighty If acceptable, I'll highlight what was changed in red, like the age, and then in red for what was added in the history. I'm currently looking up information on how to incorporate your second suggestion about the Search since this is all new to me and I haven't read up on the books that this is based off. So, I apologize if I don't get it right the next time >> Editted: Since I mentioned that the step father came from generations of dragon riders (note I'm slowly getting into remembering all the terms), would it be acceptable that by chance the step father's brother happened to come by their area for the search for potential candidates? Regarding the uncle, that's totally fine! =3 Sorry the guides are a little lacking. If you need help at all please feel free to ask anyone in the thread, I'm sure answers will abound - they'll also help with histories and whatnot. Thankfully it's not too complicated! Thank you very much ^.^ I think the information the guides have are perfect, it's just that this world I'm very new to so it takes a bit for me to get used to it but it's all good. I'll get right on the editting.
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Posted: Wed Nov 16, 2011 11:55 am
Alright. I hope my attempt at the correction is up to par in what you suggested >> Everything that was editted has been in red.
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 10:04 am
Okay, this looks great to me! I've put on an approved stamp, but could you also please put in the age she was searched at the end of her history, and if she's been at the Weyr long what she thinks of it? Thanks! <3
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 1:15 pm
TawnyAngel Okay, this looks great to me! I've put on an approved stamp, but could you also please put in the age she was searched at the end of her history, and if she's been at the Weyr long what she thinks of it? Thanks! <3 Would you like me to add that little bit in now? If so then I'm going to make it as realistic as possible that can coincide with her current age, if that's alright?
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 2:56 pm
^^ Yup! That's fine now; thank you!
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 3:04 pm
TawnyAngel ^^ Yup! That's fine now; thank you! Thanks. ^.^ Do I go ahead and post Jaslyn up in the non-rider Journals? >>
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 3:21 pm
Yup! You're not obligated to make a journal but you're certainly more than welcome to! You can start RPing any time you like as well now <3
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Posted: Fri Nov 18, 2011 4:11 pm
TawnyAngel Yup! You're not obligated to make a journal but you're certainly more than welcome to! You can start RPing any time you like as well now <3 Thank you very much for the welcome =D
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