|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 6:57 am
[ Message temporarily off-line ]
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2006 10:37 am
Very well written, but just one mention. I notcied in the 6th paragraph (since I can't remember my writing terminoligy for the life of me), the last line there "Or whom no one is proud. "
Is that supposed to be "Or" or is it supposed to be "Of"?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2006 1:39 pm
ah it is supposed to be of. thanks very much. ill edit it.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 3:28 pm
Very good. It has a meaning, unlike some of the other things I've seen. I think I've written a song somewhat like this...I should put it up sometime.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 2:08 pm
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 3:20 pm
That is a really good poem. I normally dont like stuff that ryhmes (I hope I spelled that right), but I love this one. heart
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Reply
![[MissMurder]'s avatar](https://a1cdn.gaiaonline.com/dress-up/avatar/ava/87/d4/7ccfd20418d487_flip.png?t=1204880262_6.00_10)
