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 Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 4:03 am
Name: Miache (Irish-Proud) Gahiji (Egyptian-Hunter)
Blood Colour: I don't care too much his specific shade, just that I would prefer a blueblood for him :]
Gender: Male
Symbol: 
Personality: Miache is very proud and arrogant. Because of which, in addition to his blood colour, he is prone to starting fights. He often runs his mouth without thinking and thus can easily rub others the wrong way. He will eagerly match insults with violence, mostly because he sees it as a proverbial glove being cast. If one of a higher blood colour (Purple and higher) should insult him he would take it in stride and just save up the irritation for the next troll that should try to pick a fight with him. Other blue-bloods he tends to pick his battles, depending how much respect or admiration he has for them.
As further fuel to his stifling pride, Miache does what he feels necessary to better himself. He sees intelligence and strength to be two of the most important traits in his mind, his lusus having instilled a great sense of pride in the latter. To avoid the risk of being out classed by others he trains frequently both his body and mind, training with weapons and with books. Though he delves into libraries with natural hunger for knowledge, he only grasps concepts he finds relevant, choosing to ignore anything but what he seeks or may contradict what he already believes he knows.
Since he enjoys fighting so much he's quite skilled with his staffs, having used them since he was just a grub (As he will fondly brag). As proud as he is of his strength with weapons he's even prouder to have an impressive looking weapon in hand. It IS of course the pride of the higher blood colours to have their possessions impressive.
Miache is severely mysophobic, specifically when it comes to hands. He wears gloves at all times and carries hand sanitizer to avoid too much annoyance. Because of his mysophobia he can't stand fist-fighting, instead choosing to fight with a long-range weapon. His phobia is something he's learned to work around. Rather than fighting with anything that could draw blood, he chooses a blunt staff. It doesn't aim to draw blood, rather to break bones. Miache is so terrified about contamination he will typically pass out if he feels he has been contaminated by too much. As thus; if he should fight with someone and drenched in his enemy's blood he would either pass out or fall catatonic.
Though he holds the hemospectrum in great regard it rarely stops his violent nature. He'll hold someone of a higher blood colour in proper regard, though given proper motivation he will start fights without hesitation. This leads to him getting in trouble with other highbloods, casted as a sign of disrespect. Albeit if his pride isn't threatened he will usually do as is told by someone of higher standing.
Strengths:
Educated - He is well read, books being of his favourite things. Of course, because of that he learns things in a practical sense and may encounter trouble in putting things to effective use. Though he is well learned he isn't always capable of executing things as he has read about it, though he will frequently make attempts until he figures it out properly.
Strong - Though his mental prowess may be lacking, he more than makes up any deficiencies with his body. His physical strength is above average, coupled with his abilities with his staff, he could be a very potent threat. (Especially should he have half a mind to think for himself)
Brave - Without a second thought he will head into peril should he feel the need arise. Which is often. He doesn't hesitate to make difficult decisions or stand up to an enemy he may not beat.There are times his bravery serves more as a weakness than a strength. He puts great pride in his strength and intelligence (Carefully looking over what he lacks in cleverness) and with it comes a boldness. He feels little need to fear those he deems below him. Which is something all well and good, but it leads to underestimating his opponent, though he never suffers from overestimation at the least.
Flaws:
Condescending - Miache tends to look down on others, seeing them as only as worthy as their blood and position makes them. He will speak highly of his own nobility and the lack of class others have without a thought as to how rude it is, if someone points it out to him he may respond in very patronizing tones.
Closed-Minded - The rules are there for a reason. Miache cannot see anything past the set rules, if someone suggests otherwise his think pan collapses in on itself. He usually just pushes away ludicrous, non conformist ideas as jokes to avoid hurting his poor think pan. If someone is insistent on their foolish ways of thinking, he may wind up getting violently defensive about his ideals.
Mysophobic - Miache is terribly afraid of contamination. If he is aware someone is very clean he can touching them (But may sanitize his hand afterwards), but if he doesn't know the last time someone hit the cleansing chalk (/Invader Zim joke) he will probably remain as far from them as possible or run if they try to touch him. Whenever his fear is breached (Such as he gets dirt or blood soaked on him) he tends to mentally run away, going either catatonic or simply passing out.
Weapon: Staffkind specibi (Probably will start off with a plain staff but acquire a different one later)
Appearance: 
That's only a possibility for his appearance, may doodle one or two other possible looks I might like to see him with xD
Home: Miache takes up residence in the lakeside area. He prefers the peace and quiet and to void the potential filth of other trolls, filth belonging to lowbloods no doubt. His hive is a mansion-looking structure with many rooms....most of which he has no idea what it contains. His lusus does the most of the cleaning, keeping even the unused rooms free of dirt so long as Miache keeps him well fed. An underfed lusus is an unhappy lusus.
Lusus: This lusus would be my preference of his 'parent unit' so to speak.
The horned raptor-dad is on the neat side, living to either hunt or clean. The preferred meal of the raptor-dad consists of as many samples of meat ground together in a beautiful medley of raw proportions.
Power: None
Typing Quirk: (This is just for me) ฿e£i€v€$ hi$ ฿£ood ₡o£our i$ ₩or₮h $o mu₡h ₮ha₮ o₮h€r$ ₦€€d ₮o k₦o₩.
Symbols include; ฿(B), ₡(C), €(E), £(L), ₦(N), ₱(P), $(S), ₮(T), ₩(W), ¥(Y)
... ₮hi$ i$ ₱ro฿a฿£¥ a ฿ad id€a a₦d quirk, $o, $u฿j€₡₮ ₮o ₡ha₦g€ (Get it?! It's a money pun!!!!! =D)
Trollian: (Also just for me 8V) pristineAnnihilator (PA)
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Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 12:02 pm
I can see you're still working on this, so I won't comment too much as it seems fine for now. Just remember to balance his strengths and his flaws! : 33
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2011 10:49 am
amicableAggressor I can see you're still working on this, so I won't comment too much as it seems fine for now. Just remember to balance his strengths and his flaws! : 33
I've got the strengths/flaws evened out so I'm working on elaborating them while thinking more to add to his personality. I'm afraid I haven't been working this character as long as I know some people have n n Some people have their fantrolls they've had for a while n n;;
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Posted: Sat Nov 19, 2011 11:29 am
Just reading through, I was wondering if you could look over the wording and make sure it's easily legible? Some of the phrasing gets a little knotty in places.
I have to say, playing his mysophobia will be a challange, but if you're certain you want to play such a strong weakness, be prepared to have severe penalties in the combat system. (I'd say each time either he or his opponent draws blood he'd automatically loose 10HP)
once you add his house and lusus i'll be able to fully review him, for now his profile is outdated. :>
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2011 1:20 am
Hivestuck Just reading through, I was wondering if you could look over the wording and make sure it's easily legible? Some of the phrasing gets a little knotty in places. I have to say, playing his mysophobia will be a challange, but if you're certain you want to play such a strong weakness, be prepared to have severe penalties in the combat system. (I'd say each time either he or his opponent draws blood he'd automatically loose 10HP) once you add his house and lusus i'll be able to fully review him, for now his profile is outdated. :>
Also; I do want to keep his mysophobia. He deals with it in ways that he doesn't have to worry too too much, but it'll still cause him a problem. His own blood doesn't affect him, but someone else' blood would. If it were of a higher colour he would probably just freak out, but like....being drenched in burgundy blood would probably cause him to flip his s**t and go catatonic.
I like playing challenging characters, it makes more room for development in the RPing 83 Things like, maybe a moirail would calm his nerves about contamination, maybe a kissmessis would intentionally dump a bucket of mud on him to watch him shriek like a little girl and claw at it frantically. And since he doesn't walk around wearing a sign that says 'Dirt makes me flip the ******** out', most trolls wouldn't intentionally get him dirty in a fight to get the upper hand.
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Posted: Thu Nov 24, 2011 6:51 am
[ CRIT TIME!!!
Ok the first sentence about him starting fights due to his blood colour / pride etc but then also doesnt listen or take serious any insults given to him (by anyone!?) doesnt read very well. I think if anything it would be better if he did take insults to his collapsing and expanding vascular system heart. That way I can understand him starting fights a lot more. Its fine having a big ego but I find people with bigger egos have a massive nerve for insults directed at him, especially if he is proud and arrogant.
I like the mysophobic trait! Its an unusual one but I do like it. As long as your prepared to have it effect all aspects of RP it will be fine. He can't be getting all dirty and gross one day and then be freaking out about blood the next. As long as your happy keeping a steady level to this trait it should be fine.
The remark about him using staffs since he was a grub doesn't work. If you mean from a wiggler then he wouldn't be able to wield a staff (short stubby arms!), but you can put that he has used it from passing the trails in the brooding caves though.
Strengths:
Obedient: Again with his 'fight first ask questions later' attitude what happens if a high blood insults him? If anything this will cause him a lot of trouble if he starts a fight with said troll? If he does follow the rules to a tee does this cause him added stress if someone higher insults him? Does he brood about it then take it out on someone else? If anything he is showing a weakness not fighting back, a high blood may consider him weak and useless if he can't stand up for himself!! (There will be of course inner hemospectrum rivals that will not induce the wrath of the law to a point so it is something to remember!)
Flaws:
Again my only problem is the fact he doesn't listen to insults. He is asking to be attacked verbally and physically with his attitude. To have a high ego but not give a s**t about what others say at all will make RP with others not very exciting. Because if anything as soon as another troll fights back your troll will just go "don't care" and walk away because really there will be nothing the other troll could do to get back at him.
Overall summary
Ok this was me really nit picking at your quest, not to be mean or anything because I like him. He is everything a troll is meant to be! But I want to make sure others will be able to RP with you without them losing out, every time. If you still feel he shouldnt listen or be effected by any insults then fine, I just feel you will have more reason to start fights if insults where taken to heart! Since that seems to be a core ingredient of his attitude!
Other than that I think he is a cool character! If you edit a few bits here and there I see no reason why your quest will not be accepted!
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Posted: Thu Nov 24, 2011 8:13 am
I was going to go with that he puts so little stock in what others say about him that he doesn't care about insults, but if it makes it esier to understand I can change that. The statement about him using staffs sine he was a grub was a hyperbole, like in the sense of saying 'Man, I've been riding bikes before I could walk', etc. I had said in brackets that it was something he would brag, but another person I asked to look over it said to try to trim the fat and that was one of the ones she suggested to cut out xD;;
I'm actually so ******** eager to lay with his mysophobia, I like playing things that are difficult and I frankly love the idea of him being a tough-a** and strong while prancing through a swamp shrieking ever time his foot hits muck.
Strengths> Took out one strength and one flaw, also reworded 'Obedient' to hopefully make him more clear P:
Flaws> Also changed that so he will most likely wind up leaping into countless fights xD
No worries, I take no insult. I ask for harsh crits cuz I can take it in stride 83 Besides, more people that check him out and think he'd be fun to play with, the more people I'll get to RP him with if he's ever accepted ;3
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Posted: Wed Dec 28, 2011 9:13 pm
heya!
looking through, i think his basic personality is good! the parts that seem odd to me are all in the strengths. i understand that it's appropriate for his blood and position to have a high opinion of himself, but i don't see how it is a strength.
it won't help him in his life, as pride tends to lead to people (and trolls) biting off more than they can chew and overlooking their own flaws, and i doubt any troll will admire him for waving his blood colour in their faces and acting prideful.
also, obedient really strikes me as odd. if you have a prideful troll who is quick to start fights, how does he manage to be obedient. proud people usually kick at having anyone order them around, not to mention being arrogant. People who have traits like that tend to act like they are above orders, and I don't understand how you'd make the two traits mesh.
Even obedient seems a bit odd, as you have worded a guy who does what he is told unthinkingly, and that itself clashes with intelligent. I think a bit of it is the titles used for the strengths.
Intelligent suggests a questioning, thoughtful mind, which is at ends from the 'follows his blood caste unthinkingly' that you've written below in obedient. But reading intelligent, I don't see you actually mentioning his intelligence, rather that he likes reading. I guess to make more suggestions, I need to ask some questions.
Why does he like reading? Most bookworms have a reason behind it, or a specific kind of book? If he studies practical subjects like maths and strategy, perhaps you could rename the strength as Educated, as that's closer to what you're describing, and clashes less with his Obedient.
I'm not sure how to get obedient to fit with proud though, as those are two very conflicting traits. Perhaps if you combined the loyalty to the hemospectrum into proud (though that still isn't a strength, unless you can find a way to make it), as he is less obedient to orders and more loyal to his blood caste and acts properly for it, as he is proud of his place?
for flaws, condescending is another trait that clashes with obedient in it's current form, and close-minded with intelligent. again, educated would work with this it reinforces that all he knows he has received from books (that are presumably from officially sanctioned book stores, so with nothing subversive in them to upset his world view). but if you rework the strengths, there shouldn't be any problem with them.
sorry for this wall of text, i hope you don't get discouraged! he has a good base to him and once the contradictions are worked out i'm sure he'll be great! smile
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 11:50 pm
Hominahominah.....
Hokai, will admit, slightly discouraged seeing so much that needed changing 8V (If the full month didn't give THAT away)
But I think I fixed what you had to comment on o xo I've fixed up his strengths, weaknesses, and added moar to his personality (Have fun reading THAT wall of text 8V) and removed obedient all together. I'll see how he plays in RPs and sees if it fits in with his personality or if it's best left out P:
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Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 10:36 am
so close!
for brave, while you've written about its flaws, could you put in a little about how it helps? right it reads like a flaw. if you could fix that up, a stamp will be the next post i make :')
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 7:27 pm
Hnggg...you naughty tease 8I
Hokai, lets hope that fixed it P:
*crosses fingers*
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Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 11:52 pm
hey whats this can it be no way 
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 29, 2012 4:28 pm
omg heyy sorry i just realized his name is 5 letters long (how did i miss that) you're going to have to bump it up one letter to fit that silly 6 letter name rule uwu
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2013 4:28 am
hi hi! i'm about to get started on his child art, but at the same time having a look over his quest to see if anything needs changing for his child stage? (if you want any of his current traits or hobbies to come in later when he ages up, etc) also how would you like me to go about the child art? same as teen but shrunk down? thank you! :3
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amicableAggressor Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2013 8:29 am
I'll leave him as is. When I made him I left him lots of room to grow so that should be fine c:
For his art.....sure, like the old pic I've got of him but.....like....tiny and kawaii and whatnot xD
Thanks c:
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