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 Posted: Tue Feb 14, 2006 1:27 pm
Like a light rich frothy cream,
The world is bright, the air clean
Hills of white float in a sky
So clear and bright the angels sigh
Gamboling grace tosses the sun
On golden lace, on fields of dun
The vineyards wave with diamond leaves
In morning's rays and gentle breeze
Arms of the earth reach towards the sky
Cradle and hearse, the valley cries
Bowl of dust, cup of maize
Gorge of the lost - a womb, a grave
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Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2006 8:38 pm
I dunno... At first it seems all happy then it turns sad... It's soooo fascinating though. I can't help but read it more than once.
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Posted: Tue Mar 21, 2006 4:21 pm
OddArie I dunno... At first it seems all happy then it turns sad... It's soooo fascinating though. I can't help but read it more than once. Me too!
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 6:56 am
Drakansa Like a light rich frothy cream,
The world is bright, the air clean
Hills of white float in a sky
So clear and bright the angels sigh
Gamboling grace tosses the sun
On golden lace, on fields of dun
The vineyards wave with diamond leaves
In morning's rays and gentle breeze
Arms of the earth reach towards the sky
Cradle and hearse, the valley cries
Bowl of dust, cup of maize
Gorge of the lost - a womb, a grave
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 1:54 pm
Wow, you really like it? I didn't like the way it sounded at all when I wrote it, but I really enjoyed writing it so I kept it anyways.
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Posted: Mon Aug 14, 2006 2:51 am
I liked the poem, but I have one irksome point to point out, and that's your rhyming for the sake of rhyming, you even changed the spelling to make it fit. (though my spelling is never perfect!)
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:02 pm
Wow, I really liked that. Very well done.
I think you should challenge yourself more next time you write a poem.
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Posted: Sun Aug 20, 2006 1:30 am
the_weird_1 I liked the poem, but I have one irksome point to point out, and that's your rhyming for the sake of rhyming, you even changed the spelling to make it fit. (though my spelling is never perfect!)
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 2:48 pm
Drakansa the_weird_1 I liked the poem, but I have one irksome point to point out, and that's your rhyming for the sake of rhyming, you even changed the spelling to make it fit. (though my spelling is never perfect!)
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