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Dr. Koji Kotobuki

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 4:25 pm


This is the quest thread for Sascha the Rhydon.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 5:01 pm


Character Name: Sascha

Type: Pokemon

Species: Rhydon

Gender: Male

Height: 6 foot, 3 inches

Age: 22

Nature: Brave

Ability: Rock-Head

xxxxxxxxxxxxxProtects from recoil damage

Skill Set: xxxxxEarthquake (Ground)
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe user sets off an earthquake that strikes everything around it. Notoriously destructive.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxHorn Drill (Normal)
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe user stabs the target with a horn that rotates like a drill. If it hits, the target faints instantly.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxBulldoze (Fighting)
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe user stomps down on the ground and attacks everything in the area. Hit gijinka's Speed stat is reduced.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxHammer-Arm (Ground)
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe user swings and hits with its strong and heavy fist. It lowers the user's Speed, however.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 5:46 pm


Personality

Sascha is a very easy-going and friendly gijinka. He's always happy to help others, especially if the task involves his strength--which he is quite proud of. He loves to show off and is great for entertaining groups of people but he can easily come off as being a show-off. Because of his simple upbringing he doesn't worry a lot about things that he can't control but as a result he doesn't understand a lot of human constructs, such as taxes. He's not very intellectual and can come off as downright dense when it comes to difficult subjects like literature. As a result, he finds reading and writing very difficult but he can do simple arithmetic. Due to the circumstances surrounding his mother and humans (and by corollary, Team Rocket), he is very defensive of gijinka who have been abused and will easily fly off the handle if he knows of someone or sees someone he knows being hurt. In this case, it can be very difficult to calm him down and he can be quite destructive to the point of hurting his friends as well as foes. Due to being separated from his family he is very lonely and works hard around lots of people to make him feel better but this can lead to him making some not-so-wise choices regarding his romantic relationships.

Summary of Traits:
xxxxxxxxxxPersonable (+) very friendly and able to make friends easily, does not shy from social situations
xxxxxxxxxxRelaxed (+) easygoing and doesn't sweat a lot of details, prefers to deal with things as they come
xxxxxxxxxxShowboater (+/-) no one likes a showoff, but he's sure to keep people entertained
xxxxxxxxxxInstinctual (-) very much runs on his emotions, which can result in some irrational decisions and destroyed property
xxxxxxxxxxLonely (-) lives alone and desires companionship and doesn't particularly care what kind

Likes: parties, working out, helping others, meat, parents

Dislikes: Team Rocket, breaking things, being too strong

Strengths: STRONG, able to lift heavy objects with no trouble and as sturdy as a boulder

Weaknesses: Glass doors (he always manages to break them), narrow doorways, rather dense at times, forgetful
PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 9:27 pm


History

Sascha was born a rhyhorn in a lava field, cared for by his parents. His father was notoriously strong and his mother even stronger. He grew up with a happy family, occasionally interacting with other rhyhorns and rhydons in the area, as they tended to more or less keep to their familial herds. When he wasn't with his parents Sascha would explore outside of the lava fields and battling the other pokemon that he ran into for berries or water eventually causing him to evolve into a rhydon. One day on returning from one of his usual adventures from beyond the lava pits he discovered that his father had been attacked and his mother missing. His father revealed to him reluctantly that humans had attacked them while they were hunting and carried off their mother. Sascha knew what humans were but he really hadn't seen them up close, only ever off in the distance with other pokemon. Sascha's immediate response was to track them down and rescue his mother but his father begged him not to, saying that they had something ball-shaped that allowed them to capture his mother with little problem. Sascha agreed to obey if only because he didn't want his father to be lonely. While sleeping besides his father that night, he had a dream. A strange dream.

Sascha wanted his mother back. If there was a way he could avoid the balls that had captured his mother maybe he could rescue her. Maybe if he was more like the humans he could get her back. He could tell them that he wanted his mother back. They would understand, wouldn't they? Humans had mothers and children too. While he mulled over his situation, he saw a brightly colored figure standing before him. The figure was so colorful Sascha didn't even know the words for the colors that the figure was. It was human, he thought. Yes, if he was human the other humans couldn't capture him. He gazed at the colorful figure for a while before looking down and he saw that he looked different. Very different. He almost looked human, but not quite. He wasn't as bulky but he was about as tall and felt kind of smushy. When he looked up to ask the figure where he was, the figure had disappeared.

He awoke hot. Very hot. He had never felt a heat to the extent of this. He found, to his surprise that he was no longer a rhydon. He wasn't human either. He wasn't sure what he was but he knew that it was too hot in the lava field for him to stay much longer. So he ran out of the lava field, leaving his sleeping father behind. He stood out in the grassy plains, moving his toes in the cool soil with some amusement for a while before realizing that he smelled something that smelled... odd.

He walked--on two feet--towards the smell and eventually he came upon a large complex. It had a large red symbol on it, but Sascha didn't recognize what it meant. He had heard about them before. He peeked into the window and saw several humans, doing something. He wasn't sure quite what. After exploring around the complex he began to realize why it smelled strange. It smelled like a lot of different pokemon, all inside. He felt that he had to get inside somehow, it didn't seem to be like a cave. He saw a person enter the complex through a hole in the wall... and the wall started to close up. He quickly ran after the person and sneaked inside.

Once inside he froze. He smelled a familiar scent, the scent of his mother? He pushed past the humans--who seemed to be frightened of him for some reason--following the scent until he reached a room. He peered through a window and saw her, curled up in a small room as if in pain. He banged on the wall, but she couldn't seem to hear him. The humans seemed to be watching him warily, making Sascha's instincts spike--he was in danger. He couldn't, no he wouldn't leave without his mother. After a few failed attempts of trying to get her attention he started to feel desperate. Harnessing his strength, he smashed down the door. After breaking down the door, he found his mother, completely terrified... of him. He ran to his mother, trying to get her to move, aware that the humans were closing in behind him. She wouldn't move--she didn't recognize him and rammed him with her snout.

Stumbling, Sascha realized then that he was completely different from her now. The things that he had only briefly taken notice of before made him realize that he was now a completely different being. He wasn't as tough as he was before. The smashing of the door had left him bleeding and in pain. Where his mother had hit him hurt even more. He stood on two feet. He had a patch of fur on his... head? There wasn't even his horned snout that he was so proud of. He stumbled, feeling the room heave before running away, leaving his mother behind.

Scared and confused, he hid out alone in the plains, unsure of how much time had passed. Finally resolving to make it back to his home, he started the trek to the lava fields to find his family. To his delight, his father and mother were still there--overjoyed to see his return. His mother had made her way back of her own volition and had been living quietly with her mate since escaping from the complex. After realizing who he was and a happy reunion, Sascha's parents urged him to leave them--and go to where the humans were. Sascha knew that they were right, he had no place in the lava fields anymore. He agreed and left his parents after they decided to travel farther away from the humans of this area hopefully never to run into them again.

Sascha knew he might never see his parents again. He also knew that he couldn't live with them anymore. He for the first time in his life he found himself horribly lonely. The city was vastly different from the lava fields. It was loud and bright. Adjusting was difficult for him and he mucked through the underbelly of the city before finally getting a job as a bouncer at a bar. He found he actually enjoyed the job quite a lot: there were plenty of people around and it was never boring. His job brought a stability to his new life that was comforting and thanks to one of the bar's frequent patrons he was able to get a nice flat for him to live in that wouldn't be continuously destroyed by his strength and size. Rather content with his life at present Sascha spends his time working and partying with his friends, all the while trying to find a way to see his parents at some point--and find someone special.


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PostPosted: Sun Sep 04, 2011 8:37 pm


Quest thread open for critique!
PostPosted: Tue Sep 06, 2011 5:23 am


Dr. Koji Kotobuki


History
1. I need to know why he became human, what was his motive? Musharna doesn't randomly turn pokemon into gijinka, they have to want it in some form. You'll need to clarify precisely what these reasons would be before I can approve his history.

2. Additionally, why do you think a 'normal' gijinka would smash down a wall/window? Some gijinka are domesticated or have an awareness of how humans live and operate, as a consequence they would not smash the windows or walls. As it stands at the moment, there are statistically more domesticated gijinka (although they're now considered wild due to their humanity) than there are truly undomesticated gijinka. You may wish to reinforce that Sascha is undomesticated and wild rather than implying that his actions are common as they typically aren't at the moment. =P

3. Pokemon can understand gijinka and vice versa. Sascha's words would be understandable to his mother, they're not likely to come out as a jumble! If you want it to come out as a jumble you'll need to consider more logical reasons e.g. he doesn't really know how to speak english and can't formulate his words into the pokemon language anymore or something to a similar effect.

4. I do like his history though, it's a lovely concept!

Personality:
You'll need to develop his traits to discuss various situations. You'll need to indicate where there will be exceptions to these traits (as no being is absolute) and where he'll follow through with them. At the moment, they're still quite vague and generic so they could do with being bulked out a bit.

Strengths & Weaknesses
Love them, nicely done.

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 10, 2011 4:26 pm


Thanks for the feedback!

I tried to keep those critiques in mind while I edited it--I hope you like this version better!

Cheers!
PostPosted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 11:27 pm


Dr. Koji Kotobuki

Everything checks out just with a few small small things:

History: His mother was captured and canon wise, pokemon very rarely break free of their pokeball unless they have some serious motivation going. Just clarify if his mom actually escaped or was released.

Dislikes you have team rocket listed, while not the most important, just curious as to why/how that came about or if it is significant. (were they the ones who captured his mother)


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PostPosted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 9:53 am


Approving and moving. Please set up your journal.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 11:21 am


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Dr. Koji Kotobuki

Everything checks out just with a few small small things:

History: His mother was captured and canon wise, pokemon very rarely break free of their pokeball unless they have some serious motivation going. Just clarify if his mom actually escaped or was released.

Dislikes you have team rocket listed, while not the most important, just curious as to why/how that came about or if it is significant. (were they the ones who captured his mother)

She free and escaped--I put a little more to indicate this. (:

Team Rocket were the ones who captured his mother but Sascha wouldn't realize this until later as he's undomesticated and can't read. He dislikes them on principle. I did add something to make this a little more obvious but I wanted to keep it ambiguous on purpose.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 11:22 am


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Approving and moving. Please set up your journal.

Thank you! I added a tiiiiny bit more just to clarify some things. I will start my journal ASAP!
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