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Hello No Rice For You, I am the Guild Leader and Captain of the Squad 1. Today I shall be assessing your character personally.

This is my hello to you, and to give you a heads up that I will be looking through your character very thoroughly to check for mistakes or things that are needed.

Well I can't think of them out of the blue to just give you any, you will need to ask specific questions on what you are looking to learn Role Play wise.


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Now I am going to point out some things that need work on.


First you don't have any Hechizos, which are hollow spells, we have created a good amount in this guild. Go ahead and look up what the maximum allowed for the Officer rank, if you are accepted into such rank in squad 5.


Next, are your zanpakuto abilities that need some work...



Sealed...

Sealed Attack One: Akuma no uta (song of the demon) each time the sword slashes the victim is being put into a trance like state because of the song they hear once being struck by the zanpakuto.

Okay here we will need you to describe the trance they are going in, since it seems your zanpakuto is a light manipulation and darkness manipulation. What is needed is to describe what kind of trance, how strong it is, and how it effects each rank from Soldier, Officer, Lieutenant, and Captain.


Sealed Attack Two: Shi no yoru (night of death) the victim is engulfed in darkness (well in their mind) and they suffer their greatest fear in their mind which allows the user to attack them while the victim is suffering from nightmares

Okay, obviously you cannot just automatically place a person in this darkness manipulation in their mind, that would be an auto hit/god mod. So you would have to have some kind of a system set up with how it would take them, such as a random number effect that we posses in our rules about hypnosis, poisons, and the such. You will also need a lasting effect, such as how many posts it would last on the victim, but it will have to be a reasonable amount.



Reserreccion...




Reserreccion Ability: user can disappear into the shadows, and reapppear in any shadow

Okay this will have to be further explained so that we don't look into this being a god mod.

Reserreccion Attack One: Kage no akuma (shadow demon) the shadow is manipulated into attacking and whatever happens to the shadow of the victim happens to the victim

This will have to be explained further, such as how you can attack the shadow of the opponent, and just how much damage can really be given to the actual body from the shadow.

Reserreccion Attack Two: Kuro no kairai (black puppet) strings out of the shadows appear controlling the victim like a puppet, and the "strings" also suck out the spiritual pressure.

Okay, the strings I can somewhat understand when it comes to playing as a "puppet" master, however you will have to have an effect with how long this lasts, how strong it is on opponents from Soldier, Officer, Lieutenant, and Captain ranks. And finally the draining of Reiatsu, or Spiritual Pressure will have to be taken out because it is not apart of your character's zanpakuto ability.



Second Reserreccion... Can't be called upon at Officer Rank




Reserreccion Attack One: Akumu no tsume, (nightmare claws) the claws slash the enemy at a highspeed, turning the blood into shadows

Not sure what you mean by turning the blood into shadows, so please explain further about that here.

Reserreccion Attack Two: Kyōki no byōki, (disease of madness) it engulfs the user in utter madness, attacking the enemy and each slash causes the enemy to go mad, but as the madness increases in the enemy, their body is being turned into nothing more than a shadow

Okay, turning a person's body into a shadow is not going to be allowed because that would be considered going towards auto kill. The madness you send the enemy into will have to have a timed effect on it, and a ranked effect on it like I mentioned with your last few abilities when I mentioned Soldiers and so on.