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 Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 6:05 pm
Name: Andrick Zlye Dushi
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Appearance: Red eyes, black hair. Very tall and skinny, wears mostly winter coats and boots. He also has a scar crossing his left eye.
Race: Human, Russian
Previous Star rank: n/a
Former partner: n/a
Likes: Snow, Human Souls, Torture
Dislikes: People, Summer, Fire
Personality: Can seem nice at first, but you will eventually he is the cruelest person(?) you'll ever meet.
Fear: Fear? He just has a lust for power.
Attacks: (You can have up to five)
-- Atomnyi - flies into the air, and smashes down with his deadly sledgehammer.
-- Ad Sving - runs at the opponent and swings his sledgehammer around violently.
-- Ubivat - an almost never-miss hit to the opponents gut.
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Character History: Andrick was bullied for most of his life. When he turned 18, he had enough, killed his bullies, and ate their souls. He loved the power it gave him, and he went on to kill many others, including his family. Over time, he began to use torture in some of his killing methods. Unfortunately, once he smells a soul, it would be near impossible to stop him from eating it.
Acceptance from Captain or Vice Captain:
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 7:06 pm
No offense, dude, but is that really the best you can do?
I understand that you are trying to help out by playing a kishin, but that doesn't mean that you can just throw something together.
Now the Captain and VCs may have different opinions and like it. I'm just saying that it doesn't look like you spent anymore than 10 minutes on this guy.
If you are going to make a character, then put some effort into it. I really don't want to see half-assed characters in here.
But again, this is only my opinion, and I'm only Crew. So if the higher-ups say it's good, then alrighty. Go have fun.
I was only saying it, to state my reasons.
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 7:25 pm
BOG sane psycho No offense, dude, but is that really the best you can do?
I understand that you are trying to help out by playing a kishin, but that doesn't mean that you can just throw something together.
Now the Captain and VCs may have different opinions and like it. I'm just saying that it doesn't look like you spent anymore than 10 minutes on this guy.
If you are going to make a character, then put some effort into it. I really don't want to see half-assed characters in here.
But again, this is only my opinion, and I'm only Crew. So if the higher-ups say it's good, then alrighty. Go have fun.
I was only saying it, to state my reasons. None taken, really, I do enjoy criticism. Honestly, the only reason I made this was because I love evil characters, and this seemed like an opportune moment. I had some ideas, but I wasn't sure if they sounded stupid or not, so I left a lot of things out...in your opinion, what do you think would make this better?
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 7:42 pm
Maybe some more...
Well...
More everything would be a good start.
My problem was there is so little that you can't really judge it.
I'm working on a Kishin RPC right now and it is huge!
I've been working on the idea of it all day, and actually starting typing at least two hours ago.
xp
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 8:03 pm
BOG sane psycho Maybe some more...
Well...
More everything would be a good start.
My problem was there is so little that you can't really judge it.
I'm working on a Kishin RPC right now and it is huge!
I've been working on the idea of it all day, and actually starting typing at least two hours ago.
xp Ok, well i'll work on it a bit more tomorrow, thanks smile
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