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 Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 4:44 pm
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 8:04 pm
First off, get rid of the race bullshit. You're human, get over yourself. Second, you're not a tweener. You haven't even debuted yet. Choose face or heel. Tweeners never work, especially with greenhorns. Every Mr. Anderson and Stone Cold mark wants to be a tweener these days and its terrible.
Next, you're 260 lbs. Last I checked, that's much heavier than "light heavyweight."
Other than that, I actually like your moveset. Just make sure to distinguish your finishers from signatures. I give props for originality, most greenhorns just immitate Undertaker and Jeff Hardy and Goldberg. Good job on that. Just fix the rest and you might be interesting to watch.
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 10:51 pm
Neo_Hurricane First off, get rid of the race bullshit. You're human, get over yourself. Second, you're not a tweener. You haven't even debuted yet. Choose face or heel. Tweeners never work, especially with greenhorns. Every Mr. Anderson and Stone Cold mark wants to be a tweener these days and its terrible. Next, you're 260 lbs. Last I checked, that's much heavier than "light heavyweight." Other than that, I actually like your moveset. Just make sure to distinguish your finishers from signatures. I give props for originality, most greenhorns just immitate Undertaker and Jeff Hardy and Goldberg. Good job on that. Just fix the rest and you might be interesting to watch. Oh well I thought it was kinda odd to have race in it in the first place. I didnt make it undetermined as his REAL race, just Kayfabe. But its not important.
As for tweener, I was under the impression it was just someone with no determined allegiance. I would see it as the actual starting place, not something that should be built into.
It was supposed to be heavyweight in the first place, dont know how light got in there.
Thanks on the rest though, I fixed it per your suggestions, lemme know what you think.
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 10:59 pm
The Number Three Neo_Hurricane First off, get rid of the race bullshit. You're human, get over yourself. Second, you're not a tweener. You haven't even debuted yet. Choose face or heel. Tweeners never work, especially with greenhorns. Every Mr. Anderson and Stone Cold mark wants to be a tweener these days and its terrible. Next, you're 260 lbs. Last I checked, that's much heavier than "light heavyweight." Other than that, I actually like your moveset. Just make sure to distinguish your finishers from signatures. I give props for originality, most greenhorns just immitate Undertaker and Jeff Hardy and Goldberg. Good job on that. Just fix the rest and you might be interesting to watch. Oh well I thought it was kinda odd to have race in it in the first place. I didnt make it undetermined as his REAL race, just Kayfabe. But its not important.
As for tweener, I was under the impression it was just someone with no determined allegiance. I would see it as the actual starting place, not something that should be built into.
It was supposed to be heavyweight in the first place, dont know how light got in there.
Thanks on the rest though, I fixed it per your suggestions, lemme know what you think.
This message was brought to you by The Number Three I think by race we mean white,black,hispanic,asain
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 11:49 pm
Neo-Blade8 I think by race we mean white,black,hispanic,asain Soooo, ethnicity? Seems a better choice of word. In any case, what I had would have worked that way too, as his skin is tattooed black so his ethnicity, or race would be undetermined. However I could care less, either way myself.
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 11:59 am
The Number Three Neo-Blade8 I think by race we mean white,black,hispanic,asain Soooo, ethnicity? Seems a better choice of word. In any case, what I had would have worked that way too, as his skin is tattooed black so his ethnicity, or race would be undetermined. However I could care less, either way myself.
This message was brought to you by The Number Three Especially because the United Nations has declared that race no longer refers to ethnicity, but species. So yeah, lol Otherwise dude, I like the changes. Try to limit yourself to two finishers though. It's the unspoken agreed upon number.
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 12:44 pm
Neo_Hurricane Especially because the United Nations has declared that race no longer refers to ethnicity, but species. So yeah, lol Otherwise dude, I like the changes. Try to limit yourself to two finishers though. It's the unspoken agreed upon number. I will change that when I get back tonight, no problem.
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 12:15 am
Here is a demo promo I wrote up since I just started and haven't had a match yet.
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