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Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2011 9:51 am
ғeel free to call me. . . [ Yukio Inugami ]υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .[ Male ]чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. . [ 17 ]α lot of people say I'm. . . [ maintains a carefree attitude, even during his fight with enemy, which he critically injured. Despite his ruthlessness toward enemies, he has a cheerful disposition around his friends.However, this is only if they hold his interest. Once he "gets bored" of someone, he won't hesitate to have them killed. ]can you blame me for what I am now? After all, I grew up. . . [ Yukio was the son of a demon and angle, and being rejected from both hell and heaven.Which fact neither of them want him because Demon can't had angle neither to heaven could have demon, so he was banish by God and Satan.And being sent down to the mortal worlds even if he was a baby, and those mortals hates and fear of him due to his un-explainable tremendous strength.
As a kid Yukio had suffer allot more then someone could imagine, he was once being sold to a unknown land and being force to be a slave of a wealthy family which treated him badly even if he was just a kid.One day Yukio was being abused badly and nearing dying and his essence withing his body had activated.The word DCL-XVI appear on his fore head, and grew twelve pure white wings at his back.And instantly he killed the whole wealth family.Soon he went back to his original country as nothing had happen since that the cops had no proof to take him in, he encounter a guys who had power just like him and by fighting with that guy he notice he not sure had tremendous strength but he too had the ability to cancel out other ability. ]αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .[I had the power to cancel out other peoples ability, and had un-explainable tremendous strength. ]I love םoing these activities. . . ○Break Dancing ○Sleep ○Eat єvery time one of these come into my life, things just go downhill . . . ○N/A ○cocky people ○Those who tell lies. мy homeroom and dorm room are. . .[ 2-B. ]чou see, I'm controlled by . . .[ Yuuki. ]
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Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2011 3:07 pm
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 6:48 am
Hello! Thank you for waiting~
- Can I have a last name? - "He had suffered a lot more than you could possibly imagine" if you could make that less vague? (not necessary) - How did he discover that he was a fallen angel? - Why is he here at Fuyu Academy?
- In the history you talked about how he had super-strength, but you don't mention that in your abilities. Your abilities list: 1. Strength 2. Gravity Control 3. Nullification 4. Control of Sound You need to choose one of one of them, two if you want to include Strength and one other.
- In all Yukio's time of being in an orphanage, when did he learn to break dance?
I know I'm asking for a lot, but you have a complex character here, I'd love to see him fleshed out some more!
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 9:13 am
Arisee Hello! Thank you for waiting~ - Can I have a last name? - "He had suffered a lot more than you could possibly imagine" if you could make that less vague? (not necessary) - How did he discover that he was a fallen angel? - Why is he here at Fuyu Academy? - In the history you talked about how he had super-strength, but you don't mention that in your abilities. Your abilities list: 1. Strength 2. Gravity Control 3. Nullification 4. Control of Sound You need to choose one of one of them, two if you want to include Strength and one other. - In all Yukio's time of being in an orphanage, when did he learn to break dance? I know I'm asking for a lot, but you have a complex character here, I'd love to see him fleshed out some more! First of all he was an orphan and I dont think he had a last name with him, and since the second one was not necessary then I will just skip it.I will work on the how he was a fallen Angle part.ANd can't I just had all those ability at once?And I dont think the break dance stiff is necessary neither.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 11:42 am
Good boy Yuuki Arisee Hello! Thank you for waiting~ - Can I have a last name? - "He had suffered a lot more than you could possibly imagine" if you could make that less vague? (not necessary) - How did he discover that he was a fallen angel? - Why is he here at Fuyu Academy? - In the history you talked about how he had super-strength, but you don't mention that in your abilities. Your abilities list: 1. Strength 2. Gravity Control 3. Nullification 4. Control of Sound You need to choose one of one of them, two if you want to include Strength and one other. - In all Yukio's time of being in an orphanage, when did he learn to break dance? I know I'm asking for a lot, but you have a complex character here, I'd love to see him fleshed out some more! First of all he was an orphan and I dont think he had a last name with him, and since the second one was not necessary then I will just skip it.I will work on the how he was a fallen Angle part.ANd can't I just had all those ability at once?And I dont think the break dance stiff is necessary neither. Okay, so the last name can be left out and so can the vague torture. I'm not worried that you won't be able to keep track of them or something, the fact is that that's what's considered God-Modding. AKA your character is too powerful. If you want this character approved you need to do what I told you above about the powers. So, all in all, before I approve your character I need to see this: - How he discovered he was a fallen angel and how/why he is a fallen angel. - Why they're at Fuyu Academy - The change in abilities A longer background would be good too, and really, these improvements will help you be able to play your character better. Quote me again when you're ready for me to check it.
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 2:13 pm
Sorry for the messy information and Grammar.But hey is done! biggrin
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 7:03 pm
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 7:57 am
I am so so so sorry. I've been essentially running this guild on my own, so everything's been jumbled, confusing, and a lot of work. Dx
Approved! Let me get him a house and dorm right away!
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 8:05 am
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