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 Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 8:26 pm
Graveyard Hag ►Sometimes, you just don't wander across the Graveyard◄╯★╰ Race: Human (Powhatan Native American)
╯★╰ Stage: Mononoke Ars Lilium
╯★╰ Age: 20 years old
╯★╰ Gender: Female
╯★╰ Tea: Dreamcatcher Drop
Moonstone runes, Plume of Peacock, Graveyard Dirt, Wolfsbane, Crow Feather, Spun Cotton.
╯★╰ Biography:
Native American Powhatan Wolf
Personality - Kind and Caring. She is a very confident wise woman who is comfortable with her differences from society. In all honesty, she's fluid, hard to anger and down to earth. She takes pride in her heritage and thanks her spirits for giving her the abilities that she has. Like her name, She has the uncanny abilities to rely on spirits to help her with her divination though she will not perform any of her magics without a sacred ground to worship on. She takes in strangers and friends alike, doesn't mind Majin or Human. She will not stand for conflict, but she won't stop it. For every light, there is dark. And the balances of power shall always be equal in both.
History - Graveyard was born to a very nomadic clan of Dreamseers and Healers. They move across the land selling their protection charms called Dream-catchers. Graveyard was a young prodigy in the making and though she studied only within her tribe, she had quickly achieved of the rank of an Ars Lilium in her healing and Divination skills. As of now, She had broken from her tribe to make a home in Clarus Arbor, on the very outskirts of the town. She owns a home shop where she makes Dream catchers and sells for her living. She has a arctic wolf for a familiar.
╯★╰ Ability Concentration/Theme: Divination, Foreseeing, Healing, Medicine.
╯★╰ Visual References:
Hair: [-][-] Color: #000000 ██ with White tips
Eyes: Color: #9977ff ██
Accessories: Something like the long beaded feather thing in her hair. Feathers and such. [-]
Colors can range from Browns, Red, Yellows, Light purple, black and White
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:04 pm
Reserved for Q/A and Other
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:05 pm
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Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2011 10:22 pm
Hello there, first off I'd like to say that your title needs to be labeled properly since your character is going to be of higher rank and a Mononoke. :3 just look here for labels ! Also since you have crits up in the title I'm assuming its open for them then ! Also an apology now if something might ramble on or not make sense I'm not feeling so well. :3 So lets start ....
So her name is Graveyard Hag actually ? Since you refer to her as Graveyard in the little blurb about her, or is it just Graveyard? It says she lives in Clarus Arbor, on the very outskirts of the town so what makes her a Graveyard hag if this is just a nickname thanks to being able to rely on spirits in her magic? Also if its a nickname the hag of course, then that doesn't really make sense with her personality so much considering that is 'hag ' is generally seen as a wizened old woman, more over most see it as a... negative women to where she seems sweet almost to sweet to be called a hag. Unless I'm missing the point of you using hag as a shortening for hagridden? Like the folk lore hag, which again was like a nightmare spirit I believe so...how is she a hag if that's the case? To which you might what to just put something in her profile to clear this up <3 Cause I know when I see hag I think ugly, mean old woman in a graveyard just by looking at the name of your quest. Native American Powhatan Wolf is to do with her Mononoke side then correct? As you have the link but I'm not finding much to say that is what this is.
A little more on both her history and personality would be best as I get how she is suppose to come off, but I need more detail to actually get a clear picture of her. If she will not stand for conflict but won't stop it, how exactly is she not standing for it then? You could talk more about her family, her past maybe why she decided to split from the tribe more. Goals, likes, dislikes and quirks even could help in getting a better feel for her! Remember that not everyone is peaches and cream so please add in negative traits about her as well ! :3 You could also add in a little more about her familiar since familiars are a big part of the Ars life, maybe what her familiar transforms into weapon or shield wise if its one set item or, giving the familiar a name would be nice as well.
On her Theme and Concentration it would be nice to go into each of the things she can do with maybe how she does them, what can make them stronger or perhaps hinder them. Things like that to just show that she is powerful but not all powerful like a sage. On this really Divination is basically the process for seeing things that are hidden or foreseeing the things that are yet to pass correct so you could leave out foreseeing and just have divination there. :3 Remember when going into healing that - Healing is not eternal, as it takes energy away from the healer to give it to the wounded. If the wound on the victim is too grave, all the healing in the world cannot help it.
All in all I think you could have a decent start to a potentially wonderful character here, just add some more detail so that we can get a better idea of who she is!
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