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Name: Taye Lumière

Nickname: Monkichi (At home, by his sister and adoptive father.)

Age: 20

Birthday: July 28th

Sign: Leo

Gemstone: Peridot

Blood Type: O-

Fav. Food: Sandwiches

Hated Food: Anything that's alive when you eat it, like raw oysters and sea cucumbers

School: Destiny City University (Pre-Med Program)

Hobbies: Astrology -- His interest in astrology started, because his mother was a huge astrology buff with tons of books, like Linda Goodman's Love Signs: A New Approach to the Human Heart and Astrology, Karma and Transformation: The Inner Dimensions of the Birth Chart, and she would tell him about them as bedtime stories. His favorite part of astrology is the stories the signs have.

He also finds it relaxing to make charts to track the signs. He is superstitious, so he does put stock in it. However, he reads newspaper horoscopes and like primarily for entertainment purposes, because he does not think the astrologers writing them have enough information to make an accurate prediction, since they're only covering everyone's sun signs. When he is looking for advice about the future, he is most likely to make his own chart to draw information from.

He isn't the sort of person to shove his interests down other people's throats, but if someone asked him to read his/hers, he not only would, but it would become a one way ticket to Taye's Astrological Forecast complete with, "Oh, my God! Mercury is in retrograde!" warnings. He has also managed booths for fundraisers and festivals where he tells people what can gleam about them based on what information they give him.

Being an Otomen -- Few people know that deep inside, he is a huge nerd. Even fewer know that he isn't exactly a run-of-the-mill nerd either. Sure, he likes Star Wars, Star Trek, sci-fi and fantasy novels, anime/manga/comics, video games, and ogling garage kits, but what really gets his heart beating with excitement is waiting for the new issues of Nakayoshi and BetsuHana to come out, majokko series, and reading the kind of trashy romance you find in the airport's gift store.

The reason so few people he knows personally know this is, because he wants very badly to be seen as manly and he feels that loving cute things will jeopardize that. However, when he doesn't think anyone he knows will find out, he'll gush openly about what he likes. For example, he has a blog where he reviews cute media under a pen name and he attends conventions dedicated to cute things in full costume.

Truth is, he really is a hopeless romantic at heart. He'd like to find a girl he could be that knight in shining armor for.

Hospital Volunteerism -- He began volunteering as a candy striper for two reasons. One was for extra credit in a course and the other was because he was curious about what the doctors, surgeons, nurses, etc. actually did, since he wanted to become a doctor, himself. Whenever he had a chance, he would ask them how they got the jobs they currently have. Eventually, he grew to enjoy it in earnest, so now, he continues to do it in his free time. He enjoys helping the hospital staff, reassuring the patients and their loved ones, and socializing with his fellow volunteers.

Virtues: Friendly -- He is outgoing, loyal, and affectionate. He makes friends easily, because he is willing to associate with people others won't, because others will judge them by their reputation, even if they don't deserve it. When he gives them his word, he keeps it. He'll do anything in his power to support his friends. The chances of him forsaking them are null. Betrayal is something that would crush him.

Studious -- Since his birth parents were and his adoptive father is big on academics, he is encouraged to study and use his knowledge on an everyday basis. Like if someone gets a cut, he wouldn't be, like, "It'll scab up, eventually," he'd disinfect it and try to stop the bleeding, because that was what he learned from his studies. He doesn't believe there is anything not worth knowing. Even if the subject isn't something that interests him, he makes a point to study it, anyway, because that knowledge may come in use in the future.

Resourceful -- He makes the most of what is available to him. Just because he doesn't have the best tools for a job doesn't mean he can't do it. Sure, he'd rather have a hammer, flathead screwdriver, and welding torch, but a rock, a butter knife, and duct tape will do in a pinch.

Flaws: Diffident -- While he is able to put his faith into someone else and become a loyal, trustworthy follower, he does not have that same faith or trust in himself. He is modest and puts himself down, because he lacks self-confidence. He fishes for compliments, because he needs validation from other people that what he's doing is right.

He is fatalistic. He has a compatibilistic view of fatalism. He believes in free will, but he also believes that the future is set in stone. In other words, he does not believe his actions are the most important factor for what happens to him. He thinks the actions of others are more important and that luck is most important of all. Since he can't figure out what luck has in store for him, he cares especially about the actions, thoughts, etc. of other people.

Sometimes, he ends up in for want of a nail situations and he begins to doubt if anything he's doing is worth it, since they weren't able to stop the source of the problem. If they weren't able to stop that, then he thinks whatever it leads to will happen eventually. In those moments, he thinks that it might be better and easier to let whatever happens to happen than to delay the inevitable. He seeks encouragement most in times like these, because in his opinion, if things were really hopeless, then he wouldn't be able to get anyone to give him any. If he can, then there must be a way out he's overlooking.

Pushover -- He does what he thinks is expected of him regardless of whether or not he actually wants to. He does this, because he genuinely wants to be liked and make people happy. For example, when his friend comes to him sobbing over a bad break-up, he gives him a pat on the back and tells him everything's going to be all right, even if he was freaking out about something similar the day before.

He's easily manipulated. If someone wanted him to do him/her a favor, something as simple as a slap on the back and a, "Cheer up!" can be enough to get on his good side. If someone wanted him out of his/her way, telling him pessimistic things can drive him deep into a downward spiral.

Neurotic -- He worries excessively about himself and the people he cares about. For any given scenario, he can think of at least one unfortunate outcome and he isn't shy about sharing what these are either. When disaster is averted or a problem is solved, he'll be overjoyed. It won't last long, because he'll find something else to worry about and the cycle will begin anew.

There are two reasons for this. The first is that he has troubles dealing with loss. He has no reason to believe that when someone leaves that they're guaranteed to come back. Because of this, he feels the need to stack the deck. The second is that he does not feel worthy of his family. For example, his adoptive father is a retired doctor who currently illustrates children's books. He is a loving man who is always willing to give his son great big hugs, atta boys, and shower him with nicknames. He encourages him to do his best. He is also incredibly critical of him. If he was ever NEET, he would never kick him out of house. No, not at all. Instead, he would ask him if he had plans, what are his plans, call him stupid if he didn't like his plans, suggest other plans, ask how he plans to make his plans come to fruition, and when it was time for dessert, everyone would get an ice cream sundae in a bowl, except him. His sundae was in a shot glass. He would do this every day until he was not NEET.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Brown and almond shaped.

Hair: Big, dark brown afro.

Face: Round face. Big nose. Cheeks so chubby, one is tempted to squeeze them. He is also of mixed ethnicity, so his skin color is around the same tone as Beyonce or Obama.

Clothes: Male candy striper (short-sleeved shirt with slacks)? Or a suit? Dress shoes. His right ear has a peridot in a gold stud.

I think I have it all filled out and it's coherent, more or less. I might find some mistakes later. Anyway, I'd really love critiques on this!

I'm also 99% sure that anything named after an object in the English language is not allowed. There are some crazy names for objects in space (I believe there is something named Teapot) so they have to kind of pick and choose.

If you want to stick to that cluster of stars for the name association, he could be Sailor Kappa Crucis - the single orange star in the cluster, which stands out from the other blue ones around it.

A couple of minor notes here for ya’. First, a character’s hair doesn’t change drastically between civilian and powered form. It might gain some accessories – think those red things that appear on Sailor Moon’s odangos – or some pre-existing accessories might change color, but that’s about it. So straight hair to an afro wouldn’t really work.

Now for your attacks. Generally first attack effects tend to last an average of 8-12 seconds. I suspect that you’ll be told that 30 seconds is too long.

This next part is more personal opinion and brainstorming more then anything. Why does an attack called “Sparkling Cut” paralyze people? The name seems to lend itself to an offensive attack. On that train of though, you might be interested to know that most Senshi have defensive and buff attacks, so offensive Senshi are somewhat coveted in Rps/teams; all those defensive Senshi looking to team up with someone that can do damage. Not saying you have to switch to offensive, but I thought I’d point that out.

Finally, I couldn’t resist throwing this possibility out to possibly confuse you. As soon as I heard “Senshi of Sparkles,” I thought of X-Men’s Emma Frost and her diamond form. That might be an attack idea to play with?

Sorry for the late replies. Thank you two so much!

Ooh, Holy, thanks for telling me about the hair. I'll go fix that.

I'm also going to fix the attack durations.

Thanks for pointing that out about the attacks too. Those're artifacts from puns on Jewel Box. They're kinds of gemstone cuts. Not only do I not need those now, but I see they're confusing people, so I'm going to change those.

Emma! I know her! heart I didn't think about that, but I'm happy you did. I actually think something like that sounds nicer than the sparkling ball of light. IDK what it'll do. I'll have to brainstorm some more.

Lucifer, thanks for the suggestion. That works. The GIF amuses me greatly too. xd Is it unusual for a super attack to do more than one thing at once BTW?

I finally finished editing it. I feel so accomplished.

Thanks so much for the suggestions and all!

First of all, thanks so, so, so much! I wanted to reply right away, but only squeaky noises came out and I didn't want to post those. I wanted to actually respond to what you wrote.

I didn't know there was a pre-med program. I'll change it to that then. Thanks!

I now notice that I didn't even explain how his parents affected what he wanted to do with his life at all. Now that you mention it, having that as a hobby does make it sound like he's doing it just for fun. I was aiming for that idea that you should try to get a career doing what you love, but it doesn't come across like that. I'm going to change that hobby to something else.

My parents met in nursing school. This character's a challenge in writing what I know.

Thanks for telling me. I'm going to change "Loyal", since that seems similar to "Friendly" and I'll rewrite that one.

Thanks so much! Studious is much more succinct than that.

I'll take "Fatalistic" out and Im going to rewrite those other ones too. Thanks a lot! It's really hard to tell what's wrong when you stare at the same words so long.

Aw, phew, I'm glad the senshi moves are okay and that the sphere is just bad. I'm going to change it then.

As far as the senshi side goes, are English names really not allowed? I think only the sphere and attacks have to match, but I like all three to match and it's hard to find non-English space names.

I'm going to start revising later on today. biggrin

Revised again. After I saw the diamond jubilee coverage, I wanted to change his sphere to "diamonds" instead. So, I did. I fixed all the typos I could find. I changed one hobby to "Hospital Volunteerism" and one flaw to "Neurotic".