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Toshihiko Two

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:21 am


Name: Holigaster Slick
Nickname(s): Mr. Slick, Holigaster to friends.
Age (Appearance Wise): 19-20ish
Age (Actual): 35
Personality:
Practical. (concerned with the tangible, down-to-earth, and concrete. intelligent, but not an intellectual or philosopher. a rational. likes to manage his budget, go bargain-hunting, make lists and complete them. politically a conservative, and member of house albridge. he is more likely to enjoy a painting of a lighthouse or boat than something abstract.)
Tactile. (likes fine things, good clothes, good music, good food. sensually focused. appreciative of things he can smell, taste, touch, see, hear.)
Shrewd. (observant, especially when it comes to money-making opportunities. a flatterer when prudent.)
Gossip. (enjoys hearing about the local politics, and who is up to what. he is a terrible secret-keeper.)
Mechanically Inept. (can not, for the life of him, manage the most basic devices. finds pocketwatches confusing, and can not wind or adjust them. has similar problems with clockwork mechanisms, transportation, etc. a source of embarrassment for him.)
Enthusiastic. (still young, has a degree of youthful ambition. warm regarding his shop and subjects he likes. willing to try new foods and fashions)


Thoughts on the Forest: Just a location, like any other, that is impractical to visit and he does not plan on bothering about. Notwithstanding any juicy rumors, of course.
Thoughts of Book Children: Good for business (able to wear colors!).
Thoughts on City People: Always interesting.
Physical Appearance: He has the head of an eel, with a dorsal fin that starts at the top of his head and goes down his spine and around his tail. Has a long serpentine neck, and his mouth contains rows of sharp teeth. The rest of his body (hands, feet, torso, etc) are human. The clothing he wears is on a middle-class merchant's budget, but he really likes complex clothing with lots of patterns (maybe checkered slacks, embroidered sleeves, a matador-type jacket? Cravat tied in a silly, puffy, over-obvious fashion. If it's too visually busy, feel free to tone down).

References:
Eel - o1
Jacket (various styles/patterns in the embroidered, matadorish vein)- o1 o2 o3 o4 o5 o6
Cravat - o1 or 02
Shoes - o1 or o2


History: Found and taken in by an old policeman, when Holigaster appeared in the middle of his garden. Grew up reading detective novels, but figured out in short order finding lost cats was not very lucrative. Made friends in university, but was never a scholar. Quit early to focus on business. Before that, was always making money in some way or another, whether via card games or yardwork. Really loved various perfumes, colognes, and spices, and opened a cart in the marketplace selling them, but found competition too steep before finally finding a foothold in the fabric industry. Still a very young businessman, but open to trends and change.
Hobbies: Board games, home-crafting projects.
Birthday: January
Favorite Things: Adventure Stories, especially involving the Sea (Horatio Hornblower, Treasure Island, Robinson Crusoe, Twenty Thousand Leagues, etc.), How-to Books, good sale days.
Hated Things: Being bored, owing money, having his time wasted.



Favorite Story: The Sea-Wolf - Jack London
Font: LaPointe Road User Image
Job: Silk Scarf Salesman.
Class: Middle-class Merchant
Fears: Technology
PostPosted: Tue Jul 12, 2011 1:10 am


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 14, 2011 9:19 pm


So first of all, let me just say that I really really like Holigaster's design. Making him with the head of an eel? Completely and absolutely brilliant. I also like the fact that he's got a kryptonite when it comes to machinery and the like because that just gives him a quirk that makes him even more unique without the eel-head!

I don't see much wrong with him so this critique will be a bit hard but I'm giving it a go anyhow- and first, I'm going to ask about his job. You said that first he dabbled in police oriented work (or at least that's what I'm assuming) and then found that it wasn't very money-making, which seems to be a rather important thing to the City Person, then he went on to make a smell-good cart because he rather liked the things he sold but then gave up. Now you're saying he's into the fabric industry and there's no real reason as to why he chose it. And what kind of fabric are you speaking of? Clothing? Or does he collect yards of fabric and sell them to people who likes to sew?

From what I've read it seems that he's fairly practical and yet he switches from job to job whenever things get hard. Indecisive, is the word I would use... and if I'm correct, perhaps you should add a section about that in the list of Personality traits?

Also, you should give a bit more reason as to why he considers board games and home-crafting projects as hobbies. It seems to me that, if he really were so set on making money and things that he can explain he wouldn't have an interest in games... especially since you mentioned that he disliked having his time wasted and playing board games doesn't really accomplish anything.

Sorry about all the rambling but since there wasn't much bad things to go off of, I had to nitpick the minor details that I happened to catch. I hope you didn't find my critiquing too harsh and that it helps you flesh out Holigaster a bit! Thanks for reading! c:
PostPosted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 8:24 am


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Thank you! ((: I'll try to fix some of the discrepancies and flesh him out a bit more, especially the job-switching.

Fabric: He's a silk scarf salesman, I'll try to clarify that in his history paragraph.

On the note of board games, the reasoning behind them is sort of complex, but if it's too muddled I can probably just nix it, the idea is as follows:

- Holigaster doesn't like other people wasting his time. IE, people being late when they said they'd be down at 7, or arranging a deal only not to have the deal followed through. Not a high tolerance for irresponsibility in others, mainly. He would much rather you just tell him what the problem is, and then do/fix the whole thing himself.

Board games also fall into a strange niche for him - he hates to be bored/inactive, so they serve as a sort of time-filler. They are, in short, preferable to doing nothing whatsoever. He likes the challenge, and his favorite games would be similar to Risk or Monopoly. Sort of a small-time practice field for the way he approaches business, and they serve his needs in that way.

Toshihiko Two

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iStoleYurVamps

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 6:07 pm


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SUP TOSHI. RP MORE.
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