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Posted: Sun Jun 12, 2011 2:17 am

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User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Name: Yokai Kaji

Age: [Actual:_1000__] [Looks:_18__]

Height: 6"4

Weight: 200

Body Type: Semi Muscular

Hair Color: Black

Eye Color: Red

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Straight

Personality: Always headstrong. Its either win or die.

Race: Shinigami

Species: Half Dragon

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Division
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Division: (11)

Seat: (Soldier)

Squad Ability: Members of Squad 11 are able to call their zanpakuto in a physical form. Whether the zanpakuto is animal or human does not matter.

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Kido
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[Hado] Shakkaho, Okasen, Sokatsui

[Bakudo] Shitotsu, Sekienton

[Jokou] Kushihi

[Chiyudo]

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Shinigami Abilities
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Zanpakuto
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Zanpakuto Size: 5 inches wide, 40in blade, and a 6in hilt

Zanpakuto Sealed (Sword) Form: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Zanpakuto Type: Fire/Darkness

Zanpakuto Name: [Name: Ryuu] [Meaning: Dragon]

Zanpakuto Spirit: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Spirit’s Biography: A dragon once of great power millions of years ago now but a spirit sealed within a sword.

Inner World: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

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Shikai
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Shinkai Form: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Shikai Size: 7 inches wide, 45in blade, 8in hilt

Shikai Release Phrase: Black Doom

Shikai Ability: Burns objects on contact with blade

Shikai Attack One: Flame ball ~ Launches balls of fire from the sword. Shoots only 7 balls of fire with a cool down time of 1 minute..

Shikai Attack Two: Lava pit ~ The area around the user heats up to 150 degrees for a maxium of 4min. It requires the sword to be in the ground which immobilizes movement of the sword. A cool down time of 6 minutes.

Shikai Attack Three: Heat wave ~ Summons a 7ft tall and 5ft wide wave of blue fire to crush and burn the enemy.

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Bankai
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[size=10]Bankai Name: Ryuu Kaji

Bankai Form: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Bankai Size: 10 inches wide, 50in blade, 11in hilt

Bankai Release Phrase: Return Black Dragon

Bankai Ability: Make another blade out of shadows to use as a decoy. Has no attack power.

Bankai Attack One: Nightmare ~ If a cut is made with the blade on the enemys body the enemy gets surrounded by illusions of there worst nightmare. Lasting around 10min. 6min cool down time.

Bankai Attack Two: Black Dragon Death ~ Summons a large black dragon out of shadows with the abilitys of fire. The dragon can only be out for 10min. It can spit 9 fireballs every 1min and can fly for 8min. User Image

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Items: Has a chain necklace of a bottle filled with dragons blood.

Misc: Despite his attitude he likes hanging at home with friends and he loves pizza.Being part dragon gives him tougher skin giving protection from weaker weapons/tools such as small knives and small daggers depending on material its made from. He also has a born resistance to natural fires and smaller fires (ex: natural fire: forest fire caused from lightning. small fires: lighters/matches and bonfire) Any form/type of fire made by reaistu still causes damage but not as much. He also has dragon wings on his back allowing him to more glide in the air insted of fly do to being half human. He can fly or 1min then glide down to ground.

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Biography
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His father was a dragon with the ability to turn into a human form. His mom was an assassin who also traveled the world. His birth was the death of his mother. His father trained him as a young boy to control fire and was trained as a warrior. He never experienced childhood. His fathers blood gives him the ability to live millions of years and his mother gives him the human appearence. His father dies from an unknown illness and he inherited his fathers sword.
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Posted: Sun Jun 12, 2011 2:37 am

you need to use the profile skeleton that the guild provides for your RPC.

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Posted: Sun Jun 12, 2011 6:39 pm

Ok, Hello my name is athena2324, or Kage (no you do not get to claim the name anymore XD) and I will be judging this today.

First thing I noticed is that your Shikai ability is too powerful as an ability, it is something that is no supposed to be an attack, but something to help you with attacks. I would make it just a contact burn in this case.

For your Shikai 1 first, how do the fire balls come out, and how many can you produce in a single go?

Shikai 2: How hot? and this needs a time limit for the fact that it is the area that you are heating up. That and are you effected by this change.

Shikai 3: How large is the wave? like specifics

The bankai ability Is too much. I don't have a suggestions to even make it better.

Bankai 1: Needs to be a time limit. Also be aware that we do have Illusion rules.

Bankai 2: Needs a time limmit and a cool down time. Also a link to the picture would be nice. Also what kind of fire it can use.

I also want to mention that if you want to be half dragon, you might want to list what powers you get from being part Dragon, like harder skin, ect. you would list these under the MISC section.

Posted: Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:23 am

It looks better with the limits, but there is a problem with the limits themselves.

Shikai 1: If you can shoot 3 every 20 seconds that means you can 9 in a minute. Now I'm not saying that is a bad thing, but for us, one post equals one minute.

Shikai 2: With this shikai, with just raising the heat, you could do a maximum of 4 posts, or 4 mins. I would also put a cool down time of about 6 mins on this.

For the Bankai ability, I would do this, seeing that I am half asleep right now, and I do my best thinking at this time. Make it so that you can make another blade out of shadows. Now this blade can not use your attacks, and can be used as a decoy, because only you know that.

For a bankai, and Illusion can last up to 10 minutes. It's just that you must know that if the Random number misses, it still counts as a use. I would put a 6 minute cool down time on this too. The reason I say 10 minutes is because you need to give the nightmare time to work up to it's worse point. Also, I would say it is put in by a cut, with just contact, it's a little godmodish.

Bankai 2 looks good.

for your Dragon powers, I want to make sure that you know that if a fire is made by any form of Reaistu, you are not immune, you will get hurt, but not as much, understand?

Also, you can post in here when you finish the changes.

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Posted: Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:04 pm

Finished! Finally! (tears of joy crying )

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 8:58 am

or so you think
<.<
>.>

Bankai 2 has too much of a limit. Your Bankai 2 is your ace in the hole, your Do or Die, you need to make it more powerful.

(yes this is mess up to say)

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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 3:53 pm

NOW IM DONE!!!
I HOPE YOUR HAPPY!!!
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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 5:05 pm

Take away the once a day and it's approved

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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 9:00 pm

Accepted

Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2011 7:42 am

Be sure to post in the squad 11 application thread. I will then add you to the rank list. Also be sure to be active.

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