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Erina_Nobara

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 30, 2011 2:05 pm


For Certing
Username: Erina_Nobara
Nickname: Kazuki
Gender: Male
DEX Number: 216
Species: Little Bear Pokemon
Type: Normal
Ability: Pick Up
Job: -child stage-

For the Artist
Height: 4"
Weight: 65lbs
Hair Color: brown
Eye Color: brown
Glasses/Contact Lenses: no
Skin Color: normal
Face Shape: round
Other Features:

Clothing Style: already decided by artist

About the Character
Persionality:

Positive:
=He's smart, doing well in poke school. He uses his brain to get out of sticky situations. That doesn't meant he LIKES school though.

=He's charming, which he uses to get things he wants. He's good at begging and giving those cute puppy eyes. If he wants it, he generally gets it.

=He's very empathetic, and cares a lot for his friends, even taking the blow when one one falls. He's supportive and loyal. These characteristics make him a good friend, and a shoulder to cry on.

Negative:
=He's clingy, and attaches himself to things he holds dear which can be rather annoying. He likes to cuddle, and hang off people. He always seems to be around/nearby.

=He's nosy, always sticking his nose in other people's business or investigating things which often gets him in trouble. A typical kid if you will. He doesn't like being reprimanded for this either.

=He's gluttonous, eating a lot of berries and honey. He doesn't get fat though, which is interesting. He must have a high metabolism.

=He's also rather lethargic, lazing around without much energy. Luckily he has that high metabolism that I mentioned. Exercise for him is raaaare.

= And he's also moody, confusing his friends. Sometimes he does the craziest things on impulse or on a whim. He's also very indecisive.

Hobbies: Eating? Is that a hobby? XD Growing berries to eat, Doodling/Art

Dislikes: +Spicy food-it's too much for his little tummy to bare.,
+Reading-he may be good at school, he prefers to be read to.,
+Practical jokes-especially when they're played on him. But that doesn't mean he doesn't have a sense of humor.

Likes: +Berries-he loves to eat, but doesn't gain weight. How cool is that!?,
+Music- He likes to sing, being too lazy to get off his butt, and dance too.,
+Climbing-especially trees, though he has been known to get stuck pretty often.

Roleplay Post Style: Bold Brown Font


Optional Just-for-Fun Stuff
Filling this out with as much detail one can muster is a plus!
Educational Background: Poke School, Elementary
Intelligence Level: High
Physical/Mental Condition: He is gluttonous, but stays skinny. High metabolism.
Learning Experiences: Through school and through his companions outside of school.
Character's short-term goals in life:
Character's long-term goals in life:
How does Character see himself/herself?
How does Character believe he/she is perceived by others? As an adorable cuddly thing.
Does the character seem ruled by emotion or logic or some combination thereof? Since he's young, he relies mostly on emotions.
What would most embarass this character?
Introvert or Extrovert? Introvert
How will the character deal with anger?
--------------------------------------With sadness? He cries like a baby.
--------------------------------------With conflict? He's stubborn and will argue his point of view to the end.
--------------------------------------With change? He dislikes change. Probably because of his age.
--------------------------------------With loss? He gets quiet, and tries to isolate himself.
What does the character want out of life? to not be seen as a little kid, he wants respect
What would the character like to change in his/her life?
What motivates this character? Food >>; , compliments
What frightens this character? The dark, scary stories. Ghosts.

Quote:
As for what you have for the traits now, how does he balance being lazy with being smart? You say he is doing well in poke school, which is fine, but how does being lazy affect his school life?

-He does his homework, but not after being bugged about it for awhile. He goes about his business in school, not really being diligent. He's one of those students that you have to motivate, and possibly bribe to get them to do their best. He works well when given compliments, or food.

How far will he go to get all of the food he eats? Does his hunger affect his school or life if he doesn't manage to eat as much as usual?

-Being hungry all the time, if given food to motivate does help him get through school. He loves lunch time. And if there's a buffet, you'll be he'll be there. So he gets plenty of food at school.
PostPosted: Sun May 01, 2011 10:02 pm


Five positive, five negative, three hobbies, likes, and dislikes. Or if it's done that way, it needs to be spaced so it's easier to read.


Hoshi Lockhart

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Erina_Nobara

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PostPosted: Sun May 01, 2011 10:11 pm


Hoshi Lockhart
Five positive, five negative, three hobbies, likes, and dislikes. Or if it's done that way, it needs to be spaced so it's easier to read.
ok I tried to make it easier to read <333
PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2011 2:56 pm


Now for a real crit...

I'm not good with the whole height/weight thing, but isn't anything over 100 for a kid a little on the chubby side? Unless you were going for that.

Cute isn't a personality trait. Charming is.

Roleplay post style is how you plan to use him. Color and size. Just to make sure no one is using super blinding font or too small words.

Sounds like a kid, anyway.


Hoshi Lockhart

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Erina_Nobara

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PostPosted: Thu May 12, 2011 12:46 pm


Okay, I wasn't sure about the weight thing. xD; Thanks for telling me. <3

And I changed cute to charming because that's really what I was actually going for. lol

And added his font.^^
PostPosted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 1:20 am


-Temp crit staff at the request of Hoshi Lockhart.-

I noticed that you don't follow the bare minimum requirements of describing a trait. To quote the reqs...

Reversed-Chef Staff Post
About the Character
Personality: (5 positive, 5 negative, each with at least 3 sentences describing how it effects their daily life)


Some of your traits are described with a single sentence, for instance. And you mashed "supportive" and "loyal" together. I would like to see them separated as they are not the same things, and if you would like them to be, then you need another positive trait to replace one of them.

I have no problem with the traits themselves. In fact, I think they're fantastically cute for a teddiursa ginjinka, but I would like to see them a bit more flushed out, at least to the bare minimum of the requirements.

Oh, and I believe that his species should be "Little Bear Pokemon" as we already know he is a teddiursa from your title. <3

As for what you have for the traits now, how does he balance being lazy with being smart? You say he is doing well in poke school, which is fine, but how does being lazy affect his school life?

How far will he go to get all of the food he eats? Does his hunger affect his school or life if he doesn't manage to eat as much as usual?

Bipolar doesn't mean eccentric or spontaneous. When you describe his moody trait, you say "he does the craziest things on impulse or whim". That is called being spontaneous. Your "moody" trait is mislabeled. He can be moody, but spontaneity is not part of being moody.

Bipolar is a mental condition where the chemicals in your brain are so imbalanced you go from extremes of highs, where you feel like you are invincible, to lows, where you feel you're the scum of the Earth. It's a far more complex condition than what you (or I for that matter) have described.

If he IS bipolar, I definitely want a few sentences on how that affects his day to day life. Being moody and bipolar are NOT the same things. I'm moody when I'm PMSing but I'm not bipolar. xD

Kallysto

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Erina_Nobara

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2011 6:15 am


ok fixed stuff to three sentences. *is having trouble going into more detail* xD; gotta rp him maybe more first.

Quote:
As for what you have for the traits now, how does he balance being lazy with being smart? You say he is doing well in poke school, which is fine, but how does being lazy affect his school life?

-He does his homework, but not after being bugged about it for awhile. He goes about his business in school, not really being diligent. He's one of those students that you have to motivate, and possibly bribe to get them to do their best. He works well when given compliments, or food.

How far will he go to get all of the food he eats? Does his hunger affect his school or life if he doesn't manage to eat as much as usual?

-Being hungry all the time, if given food to motivate does help him get through school. He loves lunch time. And if there's a buffet, you'll be he'll be there. So he gets plenty of food at school.
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