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 Posted: Thu Apr 28, 2011 6:54 pm
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Posted: Thu Apr 28, 2011 7:09 pm
 The Basics
Character Name:
Hideaki, meaning exellent and bright
Type:
Fire
Species:
Canine
Gender:
Male
Height:
5’8”
Age:
21
Physical Characteristics
Hair Color:
I see his hair being a off white, light blondish/beige color, styled in a Mohawk fashion. His bangs like to hang in his eyes, mostly his left. Hair style ref
Eye Color:
Bright fiery red with just a tint of black.Like this but with proper colors.
Skin Color:
Lightly tanned. He also has stripes tattooed up his arms and most of his body, much like his canine form.
Other:
Hideaki is of decent height and has a slightly muscular build, mostly due to him running daily. He also LOVES piercings. He has them lining up his ears, a pair of snake bites(rings), along with his bellybutton and tongue. For clothing I’m really up for anything. He has a girly type of punk style of fashion who likes fluff, most of which matches his hair. Hideaki is also into chains, collars, wristbands, rings on multiple fingers, and leather. All of which make him grin cheekily,show off his cute little fangs, and wiggle his arcanine ears and tail. For shirts he loves to have them form fitting and/or tight, tank tops or t-shirts. He has no preference. However, he prefers pants over shorts.
Clothing ideas
Top idea
Pants idea
Ability Information
Nature:
Impish
Ability:
Intimidate:
Lowers the enemy's Attack stat one stage upon entering the battlefield. Affects both opponents in doubles. Activates even if gained through Trace, Skill Swap, or Role Play. When a Pokémon with this ability is first in the party, wild encounters have a lower chance of occurring. If a Pokémon uses Intimidate, that Pokémon cannot use it again until it leaves play, even if it loses and re-gains Intimidate through Skill Swap.
Skill Set:
Flamethrower (Fire):
The target is scorched with an intense blast of fire. It may also leave the target with a burn.
Bite (Dark):
The target is bitten with viciously sharp fangs. It may make the target flinch.
Attract (Normal):
If it is the opposite gender (or same gender in the shop canon) of the user, the target becomes infatuated and less likely to attack.
Will-o-Wisp (Fire):
The user shoots a sinister, bluish-white flame at the target to inflict a burn.
Psychological Characteristics
Personality:
-->Exuberant<--
It doesn’t take much to make Hideaki happy, especially if you give him a ball to play with. He’s quite easily entertained by them and will chase them around the room if you allow him the opportunity. This has gotten him into trouble too, with broken furniture as a result. As a result of his easy amusement he is rather like the life of the party, opting to bring out the fun and happy side of others. If someone is sad he’ll probably be one of the first to approach and find out what is wrong. Once he does find out he’ll do whatever it takes to make them happy again.
-->Loyal<--
Much like his canine self Hideaki is very loyal to those he cares about. He’ll protect them in any way possible. It doesn’t matter if it’s verbally or physically. In some aspects he can be loyal to a fault, opting to find excuses for a problem with someone rather than facing it. This has garnered him to be hurt more easily than others, luckily nobody has broken his heart yet, although it is one of his underlying worries. As it stands Hideaki does his best to be the one friend people can turn to and trust with their feelings. His loyalty lies in the ability to love anyone regardless of whom they are. Unfortunately, this loyalty can lead to a few more negative results.
-->Flirtatious<--
Hideaki is a natural flirt and has an inclination towards the darker and more moody types. Some would say that he's completely unaware of his behavior, and while his preference might be for the moodier types, he has a tendency to flirt with everyone! Unfortunately, his lack of awareness to this behavior has left a few broken hearts along his trail. As a result of this behavior, he's been forced to apologies on numerous occasions for this and has been accused of being blind to the effect he has on others when these flirtatious moments take him.
-->Naïve<--
His loyalty towards others and his apparent determination to make excuses for him do make him naive to reality and how the world truly operates. Loyal to a fault, he may not necessarily see the manipulative and calculating underside to the select few who might abuse his happy and loyal nature. In addition to this, there are certain times when he just simply doesn't understand how the world works, or how extensive and complex certain aspects of it are. He has been accused of being thoughtless, blind, or unfeeling because he hasn't noticed that his antics have had a negative affect on another. He never does this intentionally, it's simply how he is and he would apologize immediately if it came to his attention.
-->Attention Seeker<--
He enjoys companionship and adores being around people. However, on that same note, Hideaki can get a tad moody if the attention isn’t always on him. Sometimes it takes a bat to the nose to tone him down a notch and to stop his whining. When he finally obtains that attention he doesn’t want to let it go and becomes very territorial and protective. What he considers his should stay his and his alone. Thus he becomes very disgruntled and pouty when things don’t go his way.
-->Quick Temper<--
Normally Hideaki is a benevolent creature and pleasant to get along with. However, this boy harbors a quick temper and is not afraid to show it when pushed. Generally speaking, he can be provoked by pressing the right kind of 'buttons' e.g. question his loyalty, press him on a subject he's not comfortable with or alternatively, threaten or harm someone he loves. More amusingly, there are other more bizarre ways to provoke him as well; one in particular is his avid hatred for baths! So be wary of his mouth, he harbors a nasty bite.
-->Emotional Insecurities<--
Hideaki has never had an issue flirting with someone whenever it comes to fun and games, however, when it comes to much deeper relationships, he struggles. There’s no doubt that he is incredibly loyal to all those he cares about (both acquaintances and more) but, when it comes to confronting the depth of his own feelings, he encounters quite a few problems. While he might argue that he just can't find the 'correct words' to provide a confession to the object of his affections, the truth of the matter is that he doesn't want to get hurt. Whether this is a defensive mechanism is open for interpretation, but past relationships may reveal the truth pinned underneath if you can get past his wall.
Strengths:
He has a keen sense of hearing, thus he can hear conversations and sounds from further away. He also has enough physical strength to back up his territorial and protective nature.
Weaknesses:
The poor boy suffers from an extreme fear of water. He is also loyal to a fault, leading him to be manipulated easily.
Personal History
History:
From a young growlith pup, Hideaki grew up in the mountainside near a large volcano in the Hoenn region. He led a relatively simple life with his mother Arcanine, patrolling the territory with her and his brothers daily. When not patrolling, his days would be spent foraging for berries and other wild treats - his favorite of these was the Aspear berry. The moment that sour treat touched his tongue, the excitable Growlithe would become even more so, resulting in much amusement for his family. It would always make his mother smile, at least until the humans came passing through.
Hideaki never really understood why they hid from the humans and his mother had never elected to explain it even when he asked. They seemed nice enough, always amused, happy and laughing - in a general sense they seemed to be of a good nature. However, being the curious and naive pup that he was, he disagreed with his mother's beliefs and sought to find the truth. This bold action would lead to devastating consequences... His initial contact with humans had proven to be enjoyable; he'd even discovered that he had a love for lemons thanks to one human who carried them in her backpack! Unfortunately for Hidekai, his antics were not lost to his mother and she quickly discovered what he was up to. However, this wasn't before his actions had caused lasting damage. By the time his mother had had the opportunity to discipline him, it was already too late, and the more dangerous humans had discovered the location of their den.
They came in the night and moved very quickly... To this day, Hideaki has vivid memories of that night - the sound of scuffling pairs of feet, the subtle growls of his mother and the ringing in his ears. One brother had whimpered uncertainly, the other had echoed his mother's sentiments with a growl of his own. It was not enough of a deterrent though, as six humans circled the den and trapped both his mother and siblings inside. Their clothes had blended so well with the walls that they had been difficult to see and as one had lunged towards him, grabbing for the scruff of his neck, he hadn't known how to react. He'd howled, struggled and lashed out but it wasn't enough. Even his mother had proven no match for the humans, her roars were ignored as she was overpowered and thrown into the largest of the cages.
At one point he was certain he had heard one of his captors speak but the words had been muffled and largely incoherent. The only thing he did know was that he wanted them to let his family go.
They were driven towards an unspecified location for a considerable amount of time and then finally they came to a stop. It was during this time that he had tasted a brief moment of freedom as he was removed from his cage and ”dealt” with. The light of moon glinted across the surface of the reddish stone in the human's hand and stirred both curiosity and concern in the Growlithe pup's mind. A part of him was fascinated by the power that seemed to exude from this stone but something else, a quieter and more cautious voice in the depths of his mind, expressed its uncertainty. With the sound of his mother's assault upon the bars of her cage as a soundtrack to the evening, the stone was placed upon his forehead and the cautious voice within his mind was proved to be accurate. The oddest sensation filled his small form and he could feel his body changing - it terrified him. Thrust into a much larger cage, he was left isolated and alone as the fire stone took effect and his evolution progressed. By the time it had finished, he was a larger replica of his mother and very shaken by what he had just experienced.
What happened after was in striking contrast to that fateful night and Hideaki has struggled to piece together the details. Regardless, he can recall only one undisputed fact from that evening, that being that he had collapsed and then, he began to dream...
In this dream a peculiar figure came to him. It called itself Musharna and it told him that there might have been a way out of his current situation. There was just one catch - Hideaki had to consent to what the Musharna wished. The Musharna's desires were simple in a sense, his only desire? To envelope the Arcanine in the mists of Entra. Hidaeki, understandably, hesitated. Given his circumstances he had no desire to leave his family behind and as such, requested that the Musharna provide them with the opportunity too. Now whether they elected to take this offer remained to be seen. However, the Musharna conceded and as a result, so too, did Hidaeki.
When he awoke, he found himself graced with a more lithe, albeit naked, human form. A momentary pause and he located a nail on the floor, making use of it to pick the lock on his cage. As his family slept uncomfortably beside him, he set about unlocking their cages and when this was complete, he made his escape. He was fortunate in this sense, as the humans had failed to ensure the truck with their now prized “possessions” in it was at the front of the convoy. Thus, he was able to leap quietly and efficiently from the platform and on to the worn roads beneath. He looked back and cast a silent prayer, sincerely hoping that his family would take Musharna's offer and awaken soon - otherwise, they would have no real means of escape.
Unfortunately, there was little he could do for the time being in that respect, as if he followed them, he ran the risk of making situation worse. Consequently, he had no other choice than to run and was lucky enough to stumble upon an old couple who, in the early hours of the morning, gave him sanctuary. They provided him with food, new clothing and shelter, and in return, he stayed by their side and helped out with any chores that he could.
Months on he remains grateful for their charity and continues to consider them as extended family but this hasn't stopped him from wondering about his mother and siblings. At some point he will find the means to search for them and sincerely hopes that the fates were kind to them in his absence.
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Posted: Fri May 06, 2011 3:10 am
Woot, all set for crits. Sorry it's a long one. ^^;;
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Posted: Tue May 10, 2011 6:13 pm
While the over-all concept is good, I think you might want to re-read and re-work your history. The content doesn't flow very well and I feel that it jumps around to quickly from one things to another.
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Benjamin Buneary Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue May 10, 2011 6:15 pm
Will do. If you have any ideas for content feel free to throw them at me.
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Posted: Tue May 10, 2011 10:12 pm
Hey, Yami. Here's some of the things that jumped out at me in the profile.
First, you may want to look through your entire profile and make sure there are no unnecessary details or information. While we do encourage description in all of the profiles we receive, we also don't want to read things that could have easily been left out or don't matter. Also, you may want to run it through a spell-check / grammar check and also skim it to make sure everything not in the dictionary are spelled correctly.
Eyes: Just a note that Arcanine have circular pupils, due to them being canines, not slits like cats.
Go Lucky: - Fairly positive you meant this to be happy-go-lucky. It looks like you merged two traits here. Try to only describe the trait listed which, in this case, you might be able to change to 'positive' or 'outgoing'.
Loyal - Here I believe that the thoughts are a little jumbled. Some of what you mentioned does not apply to him being loyal at all. Quality and readability over quantity. Length isn't a bad thing, but don't be afraid to have a shorter profile so long as what you want to say is laid out in a clear manner.
Flirty: First, I would change it to 'flirtatious'. Also, I'm not quite sure how this ties into him being naive, as most naive people don't have much social understanding, thus wouldn't really know how to flirt with others or realize they were attractive.
Hidden Feelings: This trait... Doesn't make much sense for someone who seems as outgoing as he is. Perhaps it's due to the wording, but he almost seems reserved which doesn't match his other personality traits.
History: This can be condensed a lot. There's a lot of unnecessary information in the history. I skimmed it first, then read it fully, and got the same information. Quality over quantity. Also, the part with Musharna makes sense... But is he away from his family now? Traveling? What leads him to interact with the rest of the Gijinka in the shop. Also, why doesn't he have ill-will towards humans? How did the events that lead to his transformation impact his character? How did he react to his human form? These are all things you could elaborate on.
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Posted: Sat May 28, 2011 4:59 pm
Okay first off, I like where you are going. You have a great dog-like persona shaping up and a lot of symbolism that can really take your character far. Secondly, he seems fun. There isn't anything that is too left or too right. Which is good. I can't tell you how many times I've had to look over the "stoic, emotionless, never-let-anyone-in" kind. Those drive me insane, because they are stoic and unchanging and...bland. Way bland. Your character has color and "flesh" so to speak to him. Thank you.
Now to a few things that made me raise my brows a bit. Go Lucky...that already kind of makes me think, "Okay, dude's going to be chill and fun, kind of like a golden retriever." Then I read into it and go, wait...that's not all what it said. You have a few traits mixed into one, and while traits that are in the pool of the larger trait are fine, the bi-polar piece is kind of jarring. If he were go lucky, attention really wouldn't matter to him. Happy go lucky, is more of a person just going with life and staying at a positive degree. I feel he's more of an attention seeker than someone who is happy go lucky. Attention seeking isn't a bad thing either. They can and often are the life of the party. This also helps with having your character have a bit of a short fuse. As if they don't get the attention, they get moody.
For loyalty, I don't see anything wrong with it. He's a canine-based pokemon. I see his naivety as "I'll follow you into the dark." He's got a bit of innocence to him, as not all like to be followed around all the time, and I can see him doing as such and making others a bit peeved. Maybe touch a bit more and expand that his naivety isn't about socialization, but about his innocent drive to always be there for someone.
Flirt in itself is a hard word to really describe. There are "teases," "sluts," and "flirts" All are actually flirty to a degree, or more. He's a sexually-hyper being, and that's fine, but is he more of a tease as this seems to run him into trouble over him just doing innocent flirting? It gets him into trouble, that's perfectly logical and fine. But I feel that "flirty" should be described as something else. I almost feel confident would be a better replacement, or physically confident. Because people don't just flirt, they flirt because they are sure of themselves.
Quick temper is another reason I don't like happy go lucky. They clash too hard. This is a fine personality trait, especially for a canine and fire based pokemon. So I'm not asking for it to be taken out. I'm asking for it to be woven better into the ideas I've given you for happy go lucky.
I wouldn't really say "hidden feelings." This is a trait that comes and goes depending on the situation. He has trouble expressing his feelings? So he's a tad awkward. Awkward can mesh into attention seeking personalities who have short fuses excellently, because they're never completely sure of themselves really, which leads them to self doubt, or tongue ties. I'd tweak this trait to show the self doubt and awkwardness of himiself. He could be overly flirty because he's not completely confident in himself either, and thus he hides behind a mask? (Now I'm even changing my original idea for flirty...)
Overall, I see him as being someone who has a lot of self doubt when it comes to relationships, but he's the kind of person to stick by someone no matter what.
I'll get to his background in a bit smile
You've got a fun character potential here, you just have some contradictions that need to be smoothed out.
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Posted: Tue Jun 14, 2011 6:36 am
Alrighty, as promised, here's the first wave of points. They're all advice and written up in a way that you can compare them between what you have already. However, I would say that as he stands currently he DOES come across as an oxymoron at certain points. Hopefully I've highlighted a couple of ways that you'll be able to revise his personality and make it flow more smoothly e.g. the implementation of new quirks or the rewording of existing traits.
As I said, all the rephrasing and so on are designed to be taken as advice, so if you feel that something doesn't fit, you can at least one of the potential directions you could have headed in. Hopefully it'll spark off some ideas or inspiration in that respect.
Once you've reworked and reworded the personality to a point you're happy with, we can look towards any other outstanding issues, questions or concerns you might have in terms of your design! <3
-->Go Lucky<-- Switch this to 'Exuberant', it will flow much better with other personality traits i.e. exhuberant individuals are characterised as being very bubbly and excitable.
It doesn’t take much to make him happy, especially if you give him a ball to play with. He’s quite easily entertained by them and will chase them around the room if you let him. This has gotten him into trouble too, with broken furniture as a result. As a result of his easy amusement he is rather like the life of the party, opting to bring out the fun and happy side of others. If someone is sad he’ll probably be one of the first to approach and find out what is wrong. Once he does find out he’ll do whatever it takes to make them happy again. Stop description of this personality trait here - mentioning his negative behaviour in this trait results in contradictions. Move the more negative trait to a new point.
-->Loyal<-- Revised, reworded and had certain elements reworded to flow properly with other personality traits.
Much like his canine self Hideaki is very loyal to those he cares about. He’ll protect them in any way possible. It doesn’t matter if it’s verbally or physically. In some aspects he can be loyal to a fault, opting to find excuses for a problem with someone rather than facing it. This has garnered him to be hurt more easily than others, luckily nobody has broken his heart yet, although it is one of his underlying worries. As it stands Hideaki does his best to be the one friend people can turn to and trust with their feelings. His loyalty lies in the ability to love anyone regardless of whom they are. Unfortunately, this loyalty can lead to a few more negative results...
-->Flirtatious<-- Reworded completely as it didn't make any sense when other traits were taken into account. In addition, it's impossible for him to be sexually aware of how attractive he is without also being aware of the effect this has on others. If you want him to possess that trait you would need to re-evaluate the naivity he demonstrates in other points that you have noted down.
Hideaki is a natural flirt and has an inclination towards the darker and more moody types. Some would say that he's completely unaware of his behaviour (as most natural flirts suffer from this affliction), and while his preference might be for the moodier types, he has a tendency to flirt with everyone! Unfortunately, his lack of awareness to this behaviour has left a few broken hearts along his trail. Consequently, he's been forced to apologise on numerous occasions for this and has been accused of being blind to the effect he has on others when these flirtatious moments take him. While this isn't completely incorrect, a more accurate interpretation of his antics can potentially be put down to his noted naivity.
Naive
His loyalty towards others and his apparent determination to make excuses for him do make him naive to reality and how the world truly operates. Loyal to a fault, he may not necessarily see the manipulative and calculating underside to the select few who might abuse his benevolent nature. In addition to this, there are certain times when he simply doesn't understand how the world works, or how extensive and complex certain aspects of it are. He has been accused of being thoughtless, blind or unfeeling because he hasn't noticed that his antics have had a negative affect on another. He never does this intentionally, it's simply how he is and he would apologise immediately if it came to his attention.
Attention Seeker
He enjoys companionship and adores being around people. However, on that same note, Hideaki can get a tad moody if the attention isn’t always on him. Sometimes it takes a bat to the nose to tone him down a notch and to stop his whining.
Territorial/Over-Protective (This can be interlinked/combined with attention seeking and leads more smoothly into his lack of temper.)
Whether it be in a physical sense or an emotional sense, this boy is exceptionally territorial. What's his should remain that way and he becomes very disgruntled whenever things do not go according to this plan.
-->Quick Tempered<-- This has been reworded again to avoid conflicts. There are certain traits you cannot combine in the same sentence without him coming across as a walking oxymoron. However, there are ways to word it to convey the same idea while making sense.
Normally Hideaki is a benevolent creature and pleasant to get along with. However, this boy harbors a quick temper and is not afraid to show it when pushed. Generally speaking, he can be provoked by pressing the right 'buttons' e.g. question his loyalty, press him on a subject he's not comfortable with or alternatively, threaten or harm someone he loves. More amusingly, there are other more bizarre ways to provoke him as well, one in particular is his avid hatred for baths!
-->Emotional Insecurities<-- Reworded and large chunks removed, they just aren't needed.
Hideaki has never had an issue flirting with an individual whenever it comes to fun and games, however, when it comes to much deeper relationships, he struggles. There can be no doubt that he is incredibly loyal to all those he loves (both acquaintances and more) but, when it comes to confronting the depth of his feelings, he encounters quite a few problems. While he might argue that he simply can't find the 'right words' to provide a confession to the individual, the truth of the matter is that he doesn't want to get hurt. Whether this is a defensive mechanism is open to debate, but past relationships may reveal the truth pinned underneath.
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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:32 am
So, Epee's helped me A LOT regarding my boy here so I'd like to see what you all think of the updates and changes she helped me make. ^^ Hopefully his profile is now more concise and makes more sense.
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Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 2:39 pm
Moving this to approved quest <:
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Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 2:40 pm
Yay! Thank you Moot Moot! <3
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