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 Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2011 1:13 am
Knight Title: Avernus Page
Avernus was believed to be the entrance to the underworld, and is portrayed as such in the Aeneid of Virgil. The name comes from the Greek word άορνος, meaning "without birds", because according to tradition, all birds flying over the lake were destined to fall dead.
Challenge: "One should purge their sins before death."
Uniform: ELEMENTS TO THINK ABOUT FOR UNIFORM
PLEASE THINK OF YOUR PLANET THEME(S) BEFORE GOING INSANE~!
(Saturn -- Watchers, binders, death.
Saturn -- Gothic culture and Victorian)
BASICALLY: Damon is based off this pin, so it'd be good to have some inspiration from it? Definitely skullish motifs, faint greyish markings, and his main color being a dark purple/blue close to his hair? A necktie or an ascot, perhaps? Gothic elements are cool, but I'd prefer Victorian fashion on the whole.
Top -- thigh-length traditional side-fastened coat? Shorter? Longer? Exposed undershirt? Cropped? Buttons? Toggles? Shoulderpads? Long sleeves, or short sleeves? Sleeves at all? What's the collar like? Could even be a dress? You are generally as basic as it gets here and should be something you can be very active in.
Bottoms -- Skirt? Pants? Shorts? Culottes?
Gloves -- Got any?
Belt -- Belt? No belt?
Shoes -- What kind?
Shoulders -- Epaulettes? Fuzzy wuzzy shoulderpads? Bells? Whistles?
Accessories -- What kind?
Weapon -- (Your weapon will level up over at least three stages. Tell us what type of weapon you'd like, and we'll go from there. Remember that swords and anything with a blade is very rare and will have to have a significant drawback to be approved. Think an item that could be used as a weapon in a tight spot but is usually just used to aid magic. You are the weapon, the item is secondary.)
Monocle attached by a chain --> Magnifying glass + chain --> Staff + Crystal Ball
(Note: The glass of the monocle, magnifying glass and crystal ball are all clouded, as if there are shadows swimming within them)
(SQUIRE ONWARDS)
MAGIC: Shadow Fade- Avernus is able to make an area of his opponent (or even himself if he so desires) fade, growing grey-ish black as if it is a shadow. It also functions like a shadow does; being able to pass through corporeal bodies and objects.
PICK A COLOUR FOR YOUR UNIFORM THAT IS RELATED TO YOUR PLANET. IT WOULD BE SIMILAR TO THAT OF YOUR THEME/CANON SENSHI/OC SENSHI.
YOUR SECONDARY COLOR IS WHITE LIKE SENSHI.
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Posted: Sun Mar 20, 2011 4:59 pm
I like the concept of a monocle! Does the shadowy aspect affect his vision if he's wearing the monocle, or does he not wear it?
The concept for his magic really cool! I like the idea, though I have to wonder what happens if he gets distracted or drops his weapon or runs out of energy when he's channeling his magic and someone or something gets stuck in a wall. Is that the point of the attack? Or can he use it as a ditch effort to escape for others or himself, and if so is that an element of danger for it?
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Posted: Tue Mar 29, 2011 6:08 am
Lithia_Brandon I like the concept of a monocle! Does the shadowy aspect affect his vision if he's wearing the monocle, or does he not wear it?
The concept for his magic really cool! I like the idea, though I have to wonder what happens if he gets distracted or drops his weapon or runs out of energy when he's channeling his magic and someone or something gets stuck in a wall. Is that the point of the attack? Or can he use it as a ditch effort to escape for others or himself, and if so is that an element of danger for it?
You brought up another interesting point; I always thought of an example of his power as making an opponent's hand disappear and therefore not being able to pick up their weapon. Or in the later stages, assisting others or himself so they technically wouldn't get hit by physical attacks. (I'm not sure that having Shadow Fade extend to one whole body in later stages is a bit too much though!) But yeah, if he gets distracted/ drops his weapon/ run of energy, the magic will probably not work and expel said someone or something if it is stuck in a wall in shadow form, I'd imagine.
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Posted: Mon May 09, 2011 1:14 pm
The concept of your attack is very interesting, but it will need a much more in-depth description than the one you currently have to get stamped, including how it is different at Squire and Knight stages.
It seems like you are saying that his attack can basically turn someone temporarily ghost-like, which is very cool and fits nicely with the death theme of Saturn. However because this is a very strong power, it will require a lot of clarification/drawbacks. At Squire stage, perhaps he is able to target an opponent and turn their weapon into a 'ghost' of itself for a total energy pool of 45 seconds. The draw back would be that they can still just punch him, but it would prevent a Nega from striking a weapon blow. Make sure you specify how he casts this power, how it is maintained, and how someone could avoid/end the attack prematurely.
At Knight, you can either make this power last longer and be stronger (as in he can now ghost their weapon and the arm that wields it for a total energy pool of 90 seconds) OR you can add a second attribute altogether, such as him being able to turn himself or an ally into a 'ghost' for a VERY short period of time (since that would be an incredibly powerful move!) like 5-10 seconds. Basically, he could ghost them in order to prevent them from taking a killing blow.
These are just examples, but I wanted to write it out so you could see the kinds of detailing that I think you'll need to let these powers fly. This concept is super cool, but because it is a fairly strong power, I just think you will need to be very explicit about what it can and cannot do.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 11:05 pm
Thank you for the crit, Akina! <333 Akina Tokuwa At Squire stage, he is able to target an opponent and turn their weapon into a 'ghost' of itself for a total energy pool of 45 seconds. The draw back would be that they can still just punch him, but it would prevent a Nega from striking a weapon blow. So it would be weapon or body part, not both? Just wanted to clarify! c: Akina Tokuwa Make sure you specify how he casts this power, how it is maintained, and how someone could avoid/end the attack prematurely He casts this power by looking through the magnifying glass, focusing on the area which he wants to turn into the shadow, and at the time, the shadows from the glass momentarily disappear. He has to maintain his concentration, however, and breaking his concentration or gaze on the area breaks the spell. If the weapon manages to get itself stuck in a inanimate object in shadow form, once the magic runs out, it will expel the weapon from the object. Akina Tokuwa At Knight, you can either make this power last longer and be stronger (as in he can now ghost their weapon and the arm that wields it for a total energy pool of 90 seconds) OR you can add a second attribute altogether, such as him being able to turn himself or an ally into a 'ghost' for a VERY short period of time (since that would be an incredibly powerful move!) like 5-10 seconds. Basically, he could ghost them in order to prevent them from taking a killing blow. The second attribute sounds great! Thank you for your suggestions, Akina! c:
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Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 8:36 pm
Acheron's magic at Squire needs some more detail:
1. How does he use his weapon to channel it?
2. How big an area does he shadow-fade? Saying "an area" is too vague, since that can be anything from a fingernail to half of someone's body.
3. What's his maximum channeling time?
In addition, what about the spell for his Knight stage? Is he going to get a new spell or strengthen his Squire spell? Remember to be as specific as possible with his magic at stage 3 as well! <3
I know this stuff was discussed here in this thread, but it needs to be written into his profile. XD
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Posted: Fri Dec 07, 2012 8:25 am
In the midst of rewording powers, woop~
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Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2014 7:42 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 10, 2014 1:27 pm
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